Shining Armor is trying to be a better father. His little filly, Flurry Heart, has grown up so fast... she's almost 16! But things seems to be so distant between the two of them... is there some way that he could regain her love?
FYI the Equestria in this story is located in a deep gravity well, so all characters are over ten million years old in Earth years and therefore 100% not illegal.
I'd say 3) is the most sensible option, but 1) is the most in character. . . Shining Armor is a military stallion of action, it's ALWAYS better to take action EVEN if you make things worse, so dictates the man-logic!
I was thinking of voting for whatever steered most clear of incestuous fun, just to see how long I could counter the will of the readers, but I'm not sure which of those that might be this time.
Maybe 2. Overwhelm her early so she resents him longer.
1. so he doesn't get furry heart any more upset than she already is . so you can understand flurry heart little bit. he's been away on his Royal Guard Duty for a while. getting to know play Heart little better will help him out in the long run
9665590 No, I don't think that's a good idea. Shining Armour should be considerate and kind parent showing flurry heart that she could trust him with anything . that he understands how she feels So she will open up to him.in more ways than one.
On the one hoof, knowledge is power, and it would behoove him to learn more. But this is Shining 'Goddamn Moron' Armor we're talking about here, so I have doubt as to whether he could capitalize on any information gleaned from Cady.
On the other, he's had a long day, and just chilling out for the evening would do him good. As a bonus, it'd make it look like he's doing exactly what his wife told him to do, and Cady strikes me as the kind to 'reward' such behavior. ;)
So I suppose I'm left to vote for OPTION TWO, because it's what Shiny would do; it'll make for some fun, potentially hilarious story telling, and could definitely be more-rewarding later on, when Flurry wants to "make up." More importantly, it will flesh out the struggles Flurry is facing, give her some character traits, and establish some more-concrete strife between her and Shiny.
“Well hey there Lost, I’m Night Light.”
LoL Oh man, that one will never die. Lots of mileage left.
... Flurry had given him a cold shrug and had even asked why she should accept his proferred hug, as this was the exact same as when he’d returned home from work the previous week.
FYI the Equestria in this story is located in a deep gravity well, so all characters are over ten million years old in Earth years and therefore 100% not illegal.
I keep meaning to get to your (and everyone's comments) when I remember that I have time.
The question at hand is whether this multi chapter story choices results in punishment/reward and how heavily this choices influence the pace and interactions.
Though option 2 is by far the best choice, rationally thinking, and in this case, how Shining thinks, going for option 1 is a safe option in this uncharted social lands and might give us insight of some juicy information, that even dimwitted Shining Armour might use to his advantage on future chapters.
I would suggest 1. If Night Light was telling the truth, maybe Twilight told Cadence and Cadence could steer Shining in the direction we all want.
Although I was also gonna suggest the panicking Shining ask Cadence to go on her own vacation for a week or two so Flurry would have to rely on Shining a bit more.
“Son, there is no way to understand teenage fillies.” Night Light laughed, mussing his son’s hair. “They’re a little girl wrapped up in a woman, mixed with a conundrum and befuddled by puberty.”
Old Joke Man gets a wish from a genie. "I want you to build a bridge from here to Hawaii (about 2,000 miles) Then, get down on your hands and knees and use your nose to push a peanut across the bridge from here to Hawaii and back"
Well, the genie protests. It's stupid, pointless, and WAY too much work for too little return The man gets tired of hearing it and finally says "Oh, all right! You don't have to do that, just explain to me 'How women think' "
The genie looks at him for a moment then says "Two lanes wide going to be enough for that bridge?"
Hey Readers! This is a really quick note to explain how this story works, and how you can participate! You will help Shining Armor in his quest to win back the love of his teenage daughter before the end of the month (and the end of the contest).
At the end of each chapter will be a number of choices which you, the reader, will be able to vote on in a strawpoll. Once a sufficient number of votes have been received, I'll proceed to write the next quick chapter showing the results of your choices, and creating all new avenues for you to chase.
Your speculation and suggestions in the comments can help too!
Let's all try to get Shining Armor to successfully reconnect with his daughter before the end of June!
I'd say it was successful, the story is complete.
“I was the one who wanted to fire you.” Luna sniffed, not moving even a single muscle as she sat with a deadpan expression next to her sister’s throne. “Your replacement of the alarm-swans with alarm-frogs was the final straw for me.”
The frogs are fleeing from the battlefield, SHAMEFUR DISPRAY!
A particularly wart-covered bullfrog hopped onto Princess Luna’s head, perfectly perched against her silver crown. Already well-accustomed to such events, Luna didn’t even flinch, simply maintaining her deadpan stare at the flustered captain of the guard.
Nice image!
Shining Armor’s eyebrows pinched together and he cocked his head in confusion. His brain was having trouble parsing the unfamiliar word. “I mean… I like heavy metal Princess, but what does Rockhoof’s band have to do with this?”
Celestia stood up and walked down from the dais, extending a friendly wing. He’d been her captain for so many years and though he’d gotten a few chewing-out sessions, usually after some super-villain found yet another way to subvert all of his carefully planned defenses, she’d never suggested he take time off.
That's on you, Celly.
“Go be with them Shining. Be with Cadence.” Celestia had calmly turned him around with her wing, directing him toward the door to her throne room. “But more importantly, be with Flurry Heart. She needs you!”
While walking through the paved streets of Canterlot, thinking about how best to approach his new ‘mission’ he started to remember just how soured his relationship with young flurry heart had become.
flurry heart
COME ON BRO!
Any outing with her quickly resulted in the teen pulling out her phone and treating him with about as much attention as a fica plant.
Seems like you have degenerate human technology in all of your stories and not just Space Ponyos. I find it all so alienating and it's a huge reason why I avoid Equestria Girls. Well, that and the fact they look like shit. At least your universes have the excuse of being adult-driven content. Still, not my favorite part of your stories. I do love the canon and the limited technology world of MLPFiM. So much room to build headcanon by speculating how ponies survive without it.
And it wasn’t that Flurry Heart was a bad teenager. Sure, she was what you would normally expect from your average fifteen-year-old filly: angsty and emotional, convinced that at her young age she’d already solved the mysteries of the universe… but she was not a bad apple.
I'm going to hold you to that age, Mister Ten-Thousand-Year-Old blackhole dweller. (Yes, yes, sex with children is bad. We get it.)
‘Heh, good one!’ Shining thought with a grin - he wondered why he’d never appreciated his father’s brand of humor when he was younger.
Jesus, they are both goddamn idiots. Shining is in good hooves.
“LALALALA CAN’T HEAR YOU!” Shining shouted, blocking his ears and shaking his head. “No! First off, way way too much information Dad… second I was asking about Twilight Sparkle, your daughter.”
The mischievous older stallion didn’t even miss a beat. “Well, she wasn’t as much trouble in bed, but I-”
Unicorns are fucking degenerate!
“Sure.” Night Light laughed. “Suddenly all that affection is mixed up with all sorts of biology and hormones… things can get confusing for them.” He scratched the back of his head, pausing again in consideration. “If Flurry is anything like your little sister was, she still loves you… maybe more than you know. You just have to trust her to come back to you.”
This was all nice and fatherly. It's going to amount to Shining fucking a fifteen-year-old but it's still a nice touch.
Night Light shook his head, blowing smoke out of his clenched teeth and clicking his tongue. “Shining Armor you poor, oblivious, goddamn moron. Who said I was joking?”
You know I always headcanoned that Roseluck was able to get just about any stallion out there but struck out spectacularly with unicorns. I think I know why! They're too busy fucking their siblings!
Thanks for the headcanon, me boyo!
Cadence had given him a sympathetic smile. “She’s studying for a test at school tomorrow. And she’s feeling a bit grumpy about her upcoming birthday.”
I was always happy about my birthday until I hit 21 and I realized I was just one step closer to dying.
Her birthday! Shining slammed one hoof into another, it was only a month away! She’d be turning sixteen.
Well, now I know she's not going to have sex until this particular day because, for you, sixteen is the magical age when anyone can insert anything into you and it's copasheshy.
People must have really bullied you hard over the foalcon thing over the years for you to invest so much plot armor into your stories. I'm glad I don't write it, is all I can say.
Despite how she acts around you, she’s sensitive Shining.”
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“I mean it. No stupid Shining Armor strategies.” Cadence crossed her arms and looked at him with a skeptical frown. “No alarm-swan type plans. Understood?”
I thought it was the frogs that were pissing the royals off.
I'm skipping the multiple-choice since my vote doesn't matter anymore. The story is complete.
I haven't decided if I like this story or not but I'm more than happy to keep going.
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It's just science.
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meh option 2 it feels like the road more insane and crazy
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Really neat story idea, I like it!
Gonna go with number 3, if liquor is involved, things could get interesting!~
I'll be sticking around till the end for this one.
While I appreciate the topic, Shining is a Smart Boy, don't you be dissin' him!
I'd say 3) is the most sensible option, but 1) is the most in character. . . Shining Armor is a military stallion of action, it's ALWAYS better to take action EVEN if you make things worse, so dictates the man-logic!
Shout's Flurry is the best depiction.
Period.
Also 3.
Can't ever go wrong with booze.
3 seems like the best choice
I was thinking of voting for whatever steered most clear of incestuous fun, just to see how long I could counter the will of the readers, but I'm not sure which of those that might be this time.
Maybe 2. Overwhelm her early so she resents him longer.
1. so he doesn't get furry heart any more upset than she already is . so you can understand flurry heart little bit.
he's been away on his Royal Guard Duty for a while. getting to know play Heart little better will help him out in the long run
I choose number 2. Let's get this crazy train going off the rails early.
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No, I don't think that's a good idea. Shining Armour should be considerate and kind parent showing flurry heart that she could trust him with anything . that he understands how she feels So she will open up to him.in more ways than one.
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Oh absolutely! But when his mind is being controlled by the readers of fimfic... Uh oh.
I vote option 1. Let Cadence help with the planning.
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I can't decide between options one and three.
On the one hoof, knowledge is power, and it would behoove him to learn more. But this is Shining 'Goddamn Moron' Armor we're talking about here, so I have doubt as to whether he could capitalize on any information gleaned from Cady.
On the other, he's had a long day, and just chilling out for the evening would do him good. As a bonus, it'd make it look like he's doing exactly what his wife told him to do, and Cady strikes me as the kind to 'reward' such behavior. ;)
So I suppose I'm left to vote for OPTION TWO, because it's what Shiny would do; it'll make for some fun, potentially hilarious story telling, and could definitely be more-rewarding later on, when Flurry wants to "make up." More importantly, it will flesh out the struggles Flurry is facing, give her some character traits, and establish some more-concrete strife between her and Shiny.
LoL Oh man, that one will never die. Lots of mileage left.
Should be spelled 'proffered'.
Whoa, things heated up fast!
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Alcohol will make everything worse
lets do it! 3
I keep meaning to get to your (and everyone's comments) when I remember that I have time.
Hmm..... I think I'll say.... 3
The question at hand is whether this multi chapter story choices results in punishment/reward and how heavily this choices influence the pace and interactions.
Though option 2 is by far the best choice, rationally thinking, and in this case, how Shining thinks, going for option 1 is a safe option in this uncharted social lands and might give us insight of some juicy information, that even dimwitted Shining Armour might use to his advantage on future chapters.
Voting 3.
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She blinded me with science.
Voting Numero 3!
i'll go with option 1 edit damn it to late to vote. welp well i'll just vote on the next one
I see where this is going, but let's let Shining Armor get a win in the show. Choice 3.
I would suggest 1. If Night Light was telling the truth, maybe Twilight told Cadence and Cadence could steer Shining in the direction we all want.
Although I was also gonna suggest the panicking Shining ask Cadence to go on her own vacation for a week or two so Flurry would have to rely on Shining a bit more.
The Twi-Night subtext has me like:
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Flurry Heart's name is not capitalized a few times in this chapter.
Old Joke
Man gets a wish from a genie.
"I want you to build a bridge from here to Hawaii (about 2,000 miles) Then, get down on your hands and knees and use your nose to push a peanut across the bridge from here to Hawaii and back"
Well, the genie protests. It's stupid, pointless, and WAY too much work for too little return
The man gets tired of hearing it and finally says "Oh, all right! You don't have to do that, just explain to me 'How women think' "
The genie looks at him for a moment then says "Two lanes wide going to be enough for that bridge?"
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Hahahaha...
I've given up long ago.
I'd say it was successful, the story is complete.
The frogs are fleeing from the battlefield, SHAMEFUR DISPRAY!
Nice image!
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That's on you, Celly.
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(chuckle)
COME ON BRO!
Seems like you have degenerate human technology in all of your stories and not just Space Ponyos. I find it all so alienating and it's a huge reason why I avoid Equestria Girls. Well, that and the fact they look like shit. At least your universes have the excuse of being adult-driven content. Still, not my favorite part of your stories. I do love the canon and the limited technology world of MLPFiM. So much room to build headcanon by speculating how ponies survive without it.
I'm going to hold you to that age, Mister Ten-Thousand-Year-Old blackhole dweller. (Yes, yes, sex with children is bad. We get it.)
Jesus, they are both goddamn idiots. Shining is in good hooves.
Unicorns are fucking degenerate!
This was all nice and fatherly. It's going to amount to Shining fucking a fifteen-year-old but it's still a nice touch.
You know I always headcanoned that Roseluck was able to get just about any stallion out there but struck out spectacularly with unicorns. I think I know why! They're too busy fucking their siblings!
Thanks for the headcanon, me boyo!
I was always happy about my birthday until I hit 21 and I realized I was just one step closer to dying.
Well, now I know she's not going to have sex until this particular day because, for you, sixteen is the magical age when anyone can insert anything into you and it's copasheshy.
People must have really bullied you hard over the foalcon thing over the years for you to invest so much plot armor into your stories. I'm glad I don't write it, is all I can say.
Add a comma.
I thought it was the frogs that were pissing the royals off.
I'm skipping the multiple-choice since my vote doesn't matter anymore. The story is complete.
I haven't decided if I like this story or not but I'm more than happy to keep going.
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Sounds like you're chuckling along so far! That's the goal.
A reminder that Flurry is 10,000,015 years old at this part. Don't forget that.
I would actually love to know what you would have voted, it's fun!
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I was actually going to agree with the consensus and play a defensive strategy because I'm a filthy camper.
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Subtext?
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The first joke by itself would've been subtext