One bad day changed everything.
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That is a beautiful interaction.
Who did the cover art for your story, and are they taking commissions?
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I made the cover art myself. I am not taking any commissions right now, but someday I will.
Flamepuff reminded me of the incubators from Madonna Magica only more forceful and transparent.
I get the strangest feeling that shits gonna go down in that pizzeria. I can’t wait for flash to show up. From what I noticed of your comics they could have a really cool buddy-buddy relationship that would be useful for breaking the tension. It’s funny because I’m looking forward to that more than I am with her meeting with Twilight. Don’t get me wrong, still gaying for that encounter but still...
Flash, Sunset and Flamepuff...
You’re doing great.
I can't lie, when I saw the cover art on dbooru, I had to laugh cause this would have been the perfect cover for the story i'm working on.
Anyway, the first two chapters were great, and i'm really looking forward to more.
Just got done reading the second chapter, sorry for taking so long:
+ I love the development you’ve got going with the possible cartel member, lots of directions you can take this.
- I wish you had shown Sunset actually taking the car in real time and not through a shoddy flashback. It just comes across as lazy storytelling.
+ I love that you’re continuing the theme of loss of Sunset’s friends. Hopefully this will act as the catalyst that drives Sunset further down the line!
+ Sick avatar!
Hm. Well, so far I can say that this has a bit of a slow-burn start. Not much has happened. Though that might end up paying off down the line.
And I can say that I agree with JackRipper. I think the flashback and the first segment should have been flipped. It would have flowed better. But it's too late now, so we all move on!
The story is really good so far, but the writing implies that English isn't the author's first language. I look forward to reading the rest.
"Ok Sunset, here is what we do. Take the car and get a new paint job with the money. Take the drugs and go dump them. And then, we go buy some guns, for when the drug dealers come. Sound good? Good."
I can't believe how badass you are making this Sunset....