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Night Skies
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That was pretty good! It honestly feels like it would've been a satisfying ending to the story yet, leaves me wanting for more. This feels like one of those one-shots that you could easily expand into a full fledged story. That's not to say that it doesn't stand well on its own and that it wasn't written fantastically. Overall good story, have some mustaches.
I actually really like this. Sure, some things could've been done a bit better, but the concept is nice and really does give a satisfying ending to the story, one which the original kinda lacked. Good job.
This is a solid ending to a good story, I quite like it, and I actually agree with some of the other comments, this could be adapted into a longer story. However I reckon this is a good a place to end as any, good work man.
Liked and faved.
Wow, this was quite the alternate ending, now rarity is just like tempest shadow, and she gets to rlive her past, except grown up. Great alternate ending.
It was a good ending,but one thing I don't understand:why did her mother said that Rarity looks like her sister,when early she said that Rarity has the same mane and coat like their baby?I mean they even said they believed she time traveled,so why not end it with a cool one liner such as"Feel free to stay,our daughter"or"Our little Rarity will be excited to meet her older sister"
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oh uh, i think I threw that in to say her mother already saw family resemblance basically. Now that i look at it, her parents sudden acceptance may not have been genuine acceptance... but either way she was welcome to stay as she had done them a great service.
As much as I morbidly enjoyed the original ending to the story, this also wrapped it up quite nicely. I particularly like seeing an interpretation of what the test of Magic would have been. :-)
Theoretically Rarity could "return" by simply killing Starlight Glimmer before the others meet her, thus making it so the test doesn't happen.