Twilight and sunset both have crushes on each other but they don't know it.Sunset ask twilight to go stargazing.They both will have a great night.
I'm in love with the bacon horse! I ship Rarijack, Flutterdash, and Sunlight/Sci-set.
Twilight and sunset both have crushes on each other but they don't know it.Sunset ask twilight to go stargazing.They both will have a great night.
it's a nice story, but I suggest you fix the paragraph structure. after a punctuation mark, use the space, otherwise the reading becomes more uncomfortable.
Yeah. This is a perfect example of why having an editor go over a story, or chapter, should be mandatory on this site.
I can't even finish it because all the mistakes.
Ok.Thanks for the feedback.
Nice for a first story.
There are missing spaces and punctuation, some repeated words in one or two sentences (same with the names), and maybe you can use a bit more of description to invest the reader more into the setting.
Overall, I think it just needs some work! If it's your very first story, I think it's a good start
Ok.Thank you.
A date huh, interesting.
Sleeping doesn't count as work Spike.
Guess they both have crushes on each other.
a sigh of true love.
This story was good but I can tell there needed to be many edits and changes to be made, especially with spaces.