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A bit short for my taste, but I like the style of the story and has is very original. Good job pal, but I suggest you to maybe split the text a bit more. There are some really big chunks of text that would be better of if they were cut into two pieces. and maybe make a sentence every time they think of say something?
Ok first chapter, a little short but interesting.
HHhhhhhmmm not sure if I like the main char yet, but nothing really bad was shown so far. His personality just seems already different from that one in the manga I saw. I mean this story works without the aditional pictures, but the main char also makes me remember a few Anons that I hated.
So far it is just a memory and nothing really bad I can say about him.
I only put that here, because I kind of hope his personality isn't focusing on that. Otherwise he will be one of the 2.000 Anons or other main chars here that focus on how the babes look and their swearing. It's a little bit like half of the soldier or street kids main chars.
Just to be clear, as long as this isn'T everything he is, I don't mind it if he notice something he likes. I admit trough, that I would prefer it if he is a bit more picky than characters like Sanji from one piece which nearly run after every lady.
I like it so far, I voiced my concerns, but I like it.
I know it is to soon to actually judge his character yet, but I don't know how much you have already written, when the next chapter is coming out, or if the next chapters already show how bad or good he actually is.
I like this, a few grammatical errors but overall story looks good, hope for good things
Gonna assume this wasn't an error...
The fact, that it is written better, than the original novel is kinda sad.
There audiobooks material on Youtube you can use for your Story. There is a Manga side for free to read the original souce material . Shall i PM you it?
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Can't agree with that... But i love the more grafic descriptions
Because sometimes when the universe is bored it look at someone and says: "i'm gonna ruin this man's whole career
Amazing to have the story back!
I love this story
Many years pass... Time to re-reading it
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it's not that it's badly written. The translations just suck
Was this chapter overhauled? I remember lower quality. Well done!
This story has some nice turn in the first chapter already. Not having to learn universal speech is a blessing in disguise
My first time seeing a “So I’m a Spider, So What?” MLP crossover, this ought to be interesting.
This reads like a self-indulgent wish fulfillment story. That's not terrible in of itself, but they do tend to have a reputation. I can already see you're going for the op character route and I'm not sure how to feel about that only one chapter in. Let's see where this goes for now.