After an accident involving Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash, a confused mare wakes up in an Equestria she doesn't recognize. Set on finding out what happened after the failed experiment, she plunges herself into the grim streets of Canterlot.
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Good stuff.
The A/N just made me realize a little something: not a single chapter for this story is below 10k words...
...which just means more fun words to read, I figure
had no connection?
spent her life?
Or even
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Thank you very much for both your kind words and noticing the typos (I've fixed them already).
For some such chapter length is an issue, though. I'm glad it isn't so in your case.
If it wasn’t interesting before, it certainly is now.
I wasn’t the only one who was young and stupid, you know.
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Thank you, fixed.
Beautiful. Absolute aces mate.
I haven't much to say... good job man.
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That is all I need to hear. It's the words like this that make me write.
Thank you very much.
Man, I remember adding this story to my 'read later' library over a year ago. I don't know why it took me this long to read this fucking amazing story, but I regret not reading it sooner. I've only ever been enthralled by a story like this a handful of times. I can't even put my thoughts on paper coherently because they're chocked full of emotion. Good shit. I'm looking forward to the conclusion of this magical tale.
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Thank you ever so much. The comments like yours motivate me to write (and to write better) like nothing else.
If anything, that happened to me as well. I had stories, absolutely amazing stories, waiting for me to read them for too long, much longer than they deserved.
Speaking of long. Though it is only chapter 17, I'm finishing chapter 20, which is one of three final chapters. Hopefully, the Epilogue will be published before the New Year. And even if not, you won't have to wait for long.
I post this same comment almost every chapter but it really bothers me how this story isn’t featured and has under 100 likes. I mean there are fics out there that aren’t even HALF as good at all and are into the thousands...DONT ever give up on this. It will have its time sooner or later
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As long as I have at least one reader, I'm going to do my best with my stories.
Actually, it has been featured about 4-5 times already, if not more. It stayed there for an hour or two, but still.
In any case, thank you for your words.
Quite a lot of nuanced examination of the characters in this chapter, another great addition to this story! As for length, I'm not too concerned, the length is packed with great story and not a sentence of filler!
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Thank you!
This... was oddly beautiful. No complaints here for the length, if anything, I prefer it to a degree. :P
So Twilight Sparkle, Element of Harmony, mother of Equinoids, so important to have a grave dedicated to her in the most opulent palace in the known world, with this network of devoted androids she assisted in creating connected to the current ruler of the land and serving under her... just had her memory gems laying in some trash box a robot (who is part of this network and connected to the royal palace) working in an unguarded public library tossed in the dumpster? Not only that, but her chassis, THE first robotic transference attempt ever created, with a broken mind, is almost alone and unguarded in said library as well, despite the historical and technological significance? Why?
And why couldn't they just hook her gems up in the chassis and recover the real Twilight Sparkle immediately?
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Considered a traitor by most, thanks to Chrysalis' propaganda.
A former one; she failed to use them, after all.
She sold the patent and the TCE isn't a kind of company that bothered to mention it as her invention.
The opulence of that place didn't last long as the Sky Palace concealed Canterlot castle.
Those were diaries, none but Tin Flower thought to use them as memory gems, and only because she had no idea what memory gems are.
As the text says, Thirteen threw them in trash out of petty spite.
In my over comment to your questions (under Chapter 7) I mentioned that the library is protected by the Royal Guard by definition; also, it is implied to be a barely visited place.
Does Canterlot of Aftersound strike you as a place where someone would care about such a thing as historical significance? Technology aside, those chassis are only special because they were created with a thought of a living being potentially occupying them, thus their only notable features are the ability to imitate breathing and such. Outside that, it is an outdated model with custom visual design.
It was never specified that those chassis were put in the library immediately, it could have happened years after, when everyone has forgotten about who Twilight was. Nobody had to know that it was the first model; the TCE would likely present something else as their commercial product.
As in the other comment, I, by no means, claim myself being absolutely right and you just nitpicky. This story is bound to have flaws, but as I was creating it, I hoped they weren't those that you pointed.
Again, thank you for the feedback.