It's a beautiful day outside, birds are singing, flowers are blooming, a perfect time to be outside and enjoy the sun. But Twilight was in her castle reading a book, well, at least trying to read, she couldn't keep her mind off of those five mares that confessed their
true feelings to her, and it was really getting to her. Twilight closed the book she was trying to read and placed it back on the shelf where she got it.
"Ugh... why can't I keep my mind off of them" Twilight said walking to the door.
Twilight opened the door with her magic before closing it as she walked out. Twilight was making her way down the hall of her castle and up the stairs to her bedroom. Twilight stopped just outside her bedroom and whispered to her self.
"Maybe I will know what to do after a quick nap, I mean I have been up all night just thinking about them and I know I am gonna have to pick one of them to court me".
Twilight used her magic to open the door to her bedroom and walked in closing it behind her before making her way to her bed. Twilight yawned and was happy to be able to get some rest before having to make a REALLY tough decision that not only will change her life but the mare she wants to be with, Twilight began thinking of the mares. 'Celestia, Luna, Cadence, Rainbow Dash or Spitfire, ugh, I can't decide'. Twilight knew it was gonna be a hard decision, choosing the mare she will spend her life with, Twilight just hoped that she will at least be able to be friends with the others still. Twilight walked over to her bed, laid down on it and put her head on her pillow and drifted off in to sleep.
3 HOURS LATER
Twilight woke up and checked the time on her clock, '12pm'. Twilight got up out of bed and stretched her limbs letting out a cute yawn doing so. Twilight was about to leave when a scroll appeared in front her as hit the ground. Twilight took the scroll in her magic and looked at it.
"This is the Canterlot seal, it might be important so I better read it".
| Dear Twilight
| I know this is a bit sudden, but it's been a week now and all of us are eager to know
| who you will choose to court you. Please come to Canterlot when you get this letter.
|
| From
| Princess Celestia
Twilight rolled the letter up and placed it on her night stand before opening her bedroom door and walking out closing the door behind her. Twilight was making her way to the front doors of her castle when she began to think aloud about the letter.
"All of us?... wait" Twilight froze in place as the sudden realization of what those three words meant before practically bursting through her front doors in a panic "Does this mean that their all there waiting for me to make the decision?!" Twilight paused a moment thinking about it then continued "That has to be it, there is no other way to take it!". Twilight flared her wings and burst off the ground in much haste heading towards Canterlot as fast as her wings would let her.
Twilight was about maybe 10 minutes from Canterlot by now because of how fast she was flying, this gave Twilight some time to think about the letter that Princess Celestia sent her. 'Is it just me or are they a little to eager to know who I will choose'. As Twilight was thinking she didn't know she was already in Canterlot. Twilight landed in the middle of the street, she looked around seeing ponies going about their day, she stopped and looked at one particular unicorn, the dreaded Blueblood. Twilight could think of only one thing... that he was a total stuck up bitch, but she didn't have time to think of anything else because she had to get to the castle so Twilight began to walk to the castle where she will have to make a really tough choice that she was both scared and a little, just a little bit happy to make because she will be able to spend the rest of her life will the pony she loved. Twilight was almost at the castle now when she started to slow down and began to think out loud again but only she wasn't thinking about all five of the mares, no, she was thinking only about one, and that was Spitfire .
"You know, Spitfire is the captain of the Wonderbolts, and I have known her for awhile now. When we first met I thought she was just another Rainbow Dash, brash, arrogant, demanding, and filled with way to much pride. But once I got to know her she was actually pretty kind, and well, cute. I realized that Spitfire is only the way she is to her team and all the recruits because she wants the best out of them. She does this because she cares about them, she gives them respect and they give her the same respect back to her and that's something that I like about her, tough but fair. When I am making my decision I will remember this".
Twilight arrived at the castle and went inside, she made her way to the throne room door when she was met by two royal guard ponies, "I have business with the Princess, please let me in" Twilight said looking at the guards. The two guards looked at each other for a second then both nodded, they opened the doors in unison. Twilight walked in as the doors closed behind her, Twilight was then greeted by the five mares in front of her.
"Greetings, my faithful Twilight" Celestia said with a warm, welcoming, and calm tone as always but a hint of glee was also present in her voice. 'I just want to sweep Twilight off of her hooves and kiss her all over'.
"Greetings, we welcome you Twilight" Luna said with a cheery attitude. 'I want to walk over there and plant a long kiss on those lips'.
"Hello Twily, its always great to see you" Cadance said in her ever cheerful tone. 'Oh Twilight, I want you so badly'.
"sup Twi, hows it been" Rainbow said looking as confidant as ever. 'I want to hold you and never let go, Twi'.
"Hey hon, hope your getting out and using those wings" Spitfire said in her scratchy voice. 'I cant wait to preen those feathers of yours Twilight'.
"Hello everypony its nice to see you too"
Twilight walked forward and stopped making sure there was enough room for all of them. Twilight was nervous, well, nervous was an understatement, more like mentally panicking. Twilight took a deep breath trying her best to calm her self down and when she calmed down enough she spoke.
"You all want to know who I have chosen to court me" Twilight looked at all them a few times before continuing "The one I have chosen is...."
I think someone has a grudge agaisnt the guy i mean he could be in the story as twilights younger brother or cousin but my vote is for spitfire mostly because 2 of the 3 princess are over a thousand years old and thats just kinda gross in my opion it would be like sleeping with your grandma and cadence I think twilight would see as a big sister rather then a potential mate and for rainbow I like that ship but I want to see something else
Why not Zoidberg?
Dude. The cover art is by MagnaLuna. https://magnaluna.deviantart.com You need to credit the artist.
I think Twilight should pick Luna. After all Twilight admires Lunas' night sky and saved her from nightmare moon. I love twiluna also twilestia
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With how many people ship Twilight with the princess (including me) I doubt anybody cares about the age difference and I like that you voted for Spitfire to win because I want her to win also but I want the audience to decide who she picks. The reason why Shining Armour isn't in this story is because the entire story is about each mare confessing their feelings to Twilight in the following chapters.
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thanks for giving me the correct link
I enjoy both Twilestia and Twiluna ships but there are alot of those. Twidash is good to but again a lot of those. I would like to see either Twifire or Twidance mix it up a bit those two ships are under appreciated.
Personally I will root for Twifire as it's the underdog here. Wherever this goes I enjoy most of the ships so this should be good.
Here's what I see coming. No matter who Twilight decides to go with, she will break the hearts of four mares. Maybe not to the point they will try and sabatoge it.
But it's gonna be there no matter what. As for my choice, I'd go for one of the princesses. Rainbow is an overused ship, and I'm not really sure on Spitfire (nothing against her. Just not one I'm familiar with to make a judgement.)
Out of the three, I'm in with Cadance.
i like all the ships presented but you just dont see enough twifire so while id love to say just have her start a harem and chose all of them id vote spitfire
How about you do separate chapters for each mare.
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This was a chapter telling who shes about to pick, the chapters that come later will be their confession to Twilight so one confession per chapter and the final chapter is her telling who she picked
TwiDash is overrated, and TwiFire is a crack ship. I'd go with a princess and probably pick between Luna and Cadance. Luna because she would be eternally grateful for having her life saved multiple times. Cadance because of their history. My choice sides with Luna.
Best of luck!
i say Luna, because their colours go well with each other, i could see Luna as somepony who loves books, the way she talks is very beautiful, their both princesses, they both won't die, Luna is meant to help ponies calm down and work out how to fix their nightmares, and as Twi is known panicking, i could see Luna helping Twi when ever she panics, Twilight loves watching the stars, and a date of them star gazing and having a picnic would be so cute, also Luna could move the stars to ask Twi to marry her, oh and Twilight is Luna's hero, she did save her from the nightmare X3
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then why make him smarty pants then? you know someone who twilight can talk two to more or less vent
Will there be multiple endings? and if not I vote for Spitfire there not that many TwiFire stories
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I'll take the multiple endings under consideration and yes indeed there are not many Twifire fics out there, I just wish people would make more of it I love the ship
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all five mares know what their getting into and they wont be mad, but disappointed that they didn't get picked, so they will still be friends with her at least.
Oh dear, this story is a bit of a mess.
grammatical issues, perspective changes, tense jumps... You should definitely check over it again to fix a few things.
My biggest complaint though would be that the writing is just pretty blant. It's uninteresting and overly simple. That's just kinda something that you can fix through experience and effort.
The premise is interesting enough, though I will personally not read any future chapters.
I'd say go with Luna. I do like TwiFire, but a story needs to have a lot of depth and pull some pretty neat stuff to make that a believable pairing and not just a crackship. I don't see this story heading in that direction, rather taking a different approach.
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Oh good. If nothing else, it will be akward for a time with them all, seeing Twilight and whoever together. Even though they'll never be mad, some part of them will always wilt seeing them together.
Could just be me.
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If you say that about Cadance and Twilight having a history, then you can't just discount Celestia, either.
Personally, I'm for either Celestia or Luna. Celestia preferred, again, because of their history, but I'm not one to turn down Luna if a strong enough case is presented.
I would like it to be Cadance. She has been Twilight's friend since she was a filly.
I wouldn't choose Celestia, as I think Twilight sees her more as a mother.
Not Rainbow because there's just too much fics of those 2, I'm already tired of that ship.
Spitfire is interesting, there isn't much of those 2.
Luna could work, but there's more fics of those 2 than Cadance, so I prefer Cadance.
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The earliest I can make the changes would be next week I have state exams for the next 4 days and I have to study. Plus I like reading the comments people give me on what to fix, it really helps so my stories will get better and better so thank you for telling me about the errors.
Alright, so here's where this going for me right now, I love all of these ships... Though Twi x mare is kind of thing... Call me weird. I don't care, I am... definitely not normal. But like some people have pointed out, some of these ships happen a lot more than others TwiLestia and TwiDash for instance. TwiLuna also, (my favorite ship btw) is a little more common than most of the ships Twilight gets with mares. Now TwiDance and TwiFire however, are two ships that get very little love, but due to my favoritism of TwiFire I'm gonna have to cast a vote for the Twilight x Spitfire pool.
Also,
Someone seems to be a fan of Carapace Though if you look at most of the people on this site, you'd probably get a consensus on that.
celestia, 100%
I wouldn't be myself if I didn't do this: TWILUNA!
Haven't read the first chapter yet so I don't know why this is not a valid option but...
why not all of them? Equines DO form herds after all... and I'm sure all of them would learn to love each other in time?
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I most certainly can. Because Teacher x Student and Jock x Nerd are the two most overwritten romance tropes on this site, if not everywhere. Especially involving Twilight. It gets old after a while.
Also, Twilight totally looks up to Celestia as more a second mother than a friend/marefriend.
8657303 Cool Then I change my vote to multiple endings
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No, you can't. You can't just use some of the facts when you want to argue. You have to look at all of them. And wow, just calling out two of most popular ships (Twidash and Twilestia) as overwritten? I want to say get over yourself, but that sounds a lot more pretentious than I mean to come across. Maybe... take a chill pill? There are plenty of other ships to enjoy.
There are reasons the ships are so popular. As far as Twiestia, there's a larger part of the fanbase that enjoys exploring that relationship. Twidash, I'm not too big a fan of myself, but it's popularity can't be denied. Don't get me wrong, I ship Twiluna as well, and while they aren't as numerous, they still bring just as much passion to the ship as the Twilestia shippers do.
Back to Twilestia, Twilight adores Celestia. This is canon, from episode 1. You can clearly see it. Whether that means as a second mother, a favorite teacher, or something romantic is up for debate. You cannot deny that Twilight does her utmost to please Celestia. Have you watched this latest season? There are several episodes where their relationship is clearly changing, from what was student/teacher (or pupil/mentor) into more friends than anything else. Celestia probably doesn't have much left to actually teach Twilight, and that dynamic is going away, but their relationship is not.
But, I'm not discounting Cadance in this. She, if nothing else, is one of Twilight's best friends, or should be. The time Twilight spent as a kid growing up would make them both special to her, in possibly different ways. She could've been Twilight's first crush, devastated in secret when she finds out her older brother is dating Cadance. She could also only see Cadance as a best friend, whom she can go to over anypony else when she needs a shoulder to cry on, or talk with after a stressful day.
Either one of these is valid, but you cannot just throw away the dynamic that Celestia and Twilight have for no reason. It would be doing both of their characters a disservice.
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"No, you can't."
Stopped reading right there. You can't tell me what I can and can't do.
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I think you should make a poll on one of the online poll makers. Going through all the comments would be too much of a hassle.
As for me, I pick Cadance, only because there are less TwiDance fics than TwiFire
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Considering what you'd said on my story, my Twilestia story, a few days ago, I don't think you really have much room to talk.
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I didn't tell you what to do though. I said it would be nice if you would, and I even made a point to say that you shouldn't be obligated to.
So, yeah, I have some comfy wiggle room.
In case it wasn't already clear, I don't hate Twilestia. It's a good ship. It's just overrated, while TwiDance is not. That is my justification. Your story is still great. I can't just say otherwise.
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I like that idea.
I didn't read all of the comments (because i'm to lazy), but isn't polygamy an option here? I mean why can't she just choose them all?
hey when are you going to finish this story?
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hopfully soon.