Rainbow Dash was putting her guitar away after the first performance of the new Rainbooms featuring Sunset Shimmer. Rainbow Dash couldn't help but admire how Sunset looked in the (and she knew Pinkie would laugh about this) Sunset glow. The red and yellow haired girl looked away from her own guitar to Rainbow Dash with a grin.
"What? I got something on my face?" She joked as the two were the last ones in the room. Rainbow shook her head then laughed.
"No, it's just." She smiled as she blushed. "You look good is all." Dash mumbled as she carried her guitar case over to the hero of the day.
"T-thanks Dash. That means a lot." Sunset Shimmer said as she scratched the back of her head. Sunset quickly locked her guitar in it's case then lifted it up, she turned to Rainbow Dash then kissed the athlete's cheek. "I mean it." She said rushing out of the room. It was at this moment, looking at the door to the music room that Dash began to make a plan for a Christmas surprise for Sunset.
The slamming of a door brought Rainbow Dash out of her stupor as two police officers walked over to the table Rainbow Dash sat at. While one of the officers sat in front of Rainbow the other stood next to their partner, holding a file in his hands.
"Rainbow Dash I'm Detective Black Light and this is my partner, Detective Night Stick. Can you explain to us how Sunset Shimmer is currently in a coma at Canterlot General, while also in Manehattan with her parents and brother?" The detective asked as he studied Rainbow Dash.
"I-I don't know. Maybe you have your info wrong." Rainbow Dash said, looking away from the officer. Detective Night Stick pulled out three pictures from the folder, the first one was of the girls with Princess Twilight summoning the Alicorn spirit to fight the sirens. The other showed the sirens themselves using their magic as they floated in the air.
"Want to try again kid?" Detective Night Stick said as he glared at Rainbow Dash. "Look, we got the statements from your friends and video the Cakes were more then willing to supply. All of that would put you in a heap of trouble. But because this girl is from another world, that complicates things." Night Stick spat out the words like a foul substance.
"What do you mean?" Rainbow Dash asked as she looked worriedly at the two. Detective Black Light sighed as he picked up the images.
"We're under strict orders to keep anything regarding residents of Equestria secret." Black Light explained to Rainbow Dash.
"So as it stands. This is being treated as an unfortunate accident. So congratulations, your getting away with attempted murder." Night Stick stated bitterly. This surprised Rainbow Dash as she remembered Sunset's unconcious body laying on the ground.
"You can't be serious." Rainbow Dash said stunned, Detective Black Light pulled out a cellphone from his pocket, Rainbow's phone, sliding it onto the table while Night Stick spoke again.
"By the way, we were informed about this Anon-A-Miss situation, thought you ought to know they sent out another message when Sunset Shimmer was sent to the hospital." He said almost mockingly as Rainbow looked at the post.
'Looks like somebody has problems. Here's Gilda leaving Anger Management. Isn't it a little late for that?' the post read as it showed Gilda hugging a woman leaving a building. Dash put the phone away as she placed her hands on her head.
"No. She was telling the truth." Rainbow whispered to herself as she stared at the book sitting before her. She quickly lifted her head, looking to the officers. "W-what happens now?"
"Now, your parents are going to take you home. Again, since Sunset Shimmer was the one hurt, our hands are tied. Until someone else get's hurt or the culprit is found, we can't do anything." Night Stick said as Black Light put the pictures in the folder, he then walked to the door, opening it for Rainbow Dash.
"But I hurt Sunset! I deserve jail time, or community service! Something." Rainbow Dash growled as she growled at the officers.
"I agree, but that decisions been taken from us." Night Stick growled back. "Now, get the hell out." He ordered, pointing to the door. Rainbow Dash hung her head as she stood up slowly, trudging to the door.
"Miss Dash." Black Light called, causing Rainbow to look back. "You seem like a good kid who just made a mistake, but it might be best for you to get your anger in check." He said as a warning. Rainbow Dash shook her head before leaving the room into the busy main room of the precinct, seeing her mom and dad standing on the other side of the wooden gate leading to the exit.
Her parents were silent as they left the building. They remained that way for a few moments in the car, but only a few.
"Sweetie. It was an accident, right?" Rainbow Dash's mother, Windy Whistles asked. Rainbow Dash was looking out the window as she listened to her parents speak.
"Of course it was. This is Dash we're talking about. Our daughter is not a murderer." Her father, Bow Hothoof stated. As her parents continued to defend her mistake it only fueled the fire of guilt inside of her. "...Dash, did you hear us?" Rainbow discovered her father was asking her a question.
"Huh? What?" She asked as her mom looked back.
"We asked what actually happened?" Her mom said, giving a nervous laugh. "I mean come on, you get into fights sure, but you've never wanted to kill anyone...right?" It was there, that tone, that crack of fear in her mothers voice that set off something in the tomboy. Your a monster,
Rainbow Dash. The voice whispered darkly in her mind as tears began to fall.
"I didn't mean to." She whimpered as the voice had truly frightened her. "I just stopped thinking as I yelled and then after the second shove I realized I pushed her to the ice. I realized she could have slipped and hurt herself. I was gonna apologize and then..." Rainbow paused as bile threatened to leave her throat, her father saw this and parked on the side of the road with enough time for Rainbow to open the door before vomit left her mouth.
Rainbow laid her head and cried as her mother rubbed her back. Later that night, Rainbow Dash was trying for the fifth time to write to Twilight about what happened when she recived a phone call from Pinkie Pie. With a sigh, Rainbow Dash picked up the phone.
"Hey Pinks." Rainbow anwsered the party planner.
"Dashie, your on a conference call with the others. Are you okay?" Pinkie asked missing the normal energy in her voice.
"Pinkie Pie, how could you ask that? After what just happened I don't think any of us are okay." Rarity's voice stated in a somber tone.
"You girls ain't gonna like this, but Sunset's karma did this to her. She was the one spreadin' everyone's secrets." Applejack stated coldly.
"She didn't." Rainbow said emotionlessly. "While I was talking to the cops Anon-A-Miss posted again." Rainbow was crying as the words left her mouth. A loud thud could be heard from one of the phones as the girls could hear weeping.
"So, now what do we do?" Pinkie asked amid Fluttershy's crying.
"We gotta find the real Anon-A-Miss then." Applejack growled, it was clear she was angry. "That dirty snake tricked us! I'll be damned if we let her get away with it while Sunset is in a coma!" Applejack shouted.
"Shouldn't we tell Twilight about this? I mean she must be worried sick about Sunset." Rarity questioned the group.
"I got that covered. Look guys, I gotta go. We'll talk more about this tomorrow." Rainbow said, wanting to just get off the phone.
"We'll talk to ya later Dash. Just remember, we're on your side." Applejack stated before Rainbow hung up.
Hypocrite. Did you hear what she said before? The voice spoke again, startling Rainbow Dash. That Apple bitch is such an assholes. Rainbow Dash was looking around for the voice when she discovered something weird, her reflection in the full body mirror was off. Her hair had a darker tint to it, her eyes a darker shade of red with dark smoke billowing out from the sides. The oddest thing however was in the reflection she had wings, they were larger than when she normally ponied up and were darker. Boo.
Rainbow Dash jumped back as she watched her reflection stay in the exact same place, an evil grin on her face as she watched the real Dash.
"W-what the hell are you?" Rainbow asked as she looked around her room.
I can be a lot of things Dash. For this instance, I like to think of myself as your redemption. The mirror image said as she crossed her arms.
"I don't understand." Rainbow said as she walked closer to the mirror.
That's okay, just remember this. You'll keep trying to get justice for what you did, it won't. If you want to truly get justice for her, you'll say yes. The mirror Dash bellowed away like smoke, leaving a confused Rainbow staring at herself. Deciding to ignore that as her nerves, Rainbow walked over to the journal and began to write.
Dear Princess Twilight, something bad happened to Sunset Shimmer.
More! Mooooore!!!
Hating Applejack..... yeah read the chapter again and still feel a burning hatred for her..... It's a good feeling, should keep me warm tonight lols
anyway still loving the story
Oh..Dashs inner shadowbolt is haunting her...nice.
So the demon is gonna try again? I knew ancient magical artifacts of infinite power wouldn't be enough to banish what is essentially a minor deity
Hmmmm... Not what I was expecting at all for chapter 2. Decent, but this felt rushed compared to chapter 1.
Huh. Intriguing ending.
Applejack, you have no right to suddenly act all concerned for the friend you abandoned. Act all high and mighty again, and I will shove your own leg down your throat.
And thumbs down for the shipping crap, hope that your story is successful.
next chapter: cue angry Princess Twilight
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Especially since literally seconds ago she was saying that karma was repo si le for her almost dying due to being blamed for spreading secrets
So is anyone from equestria has a mole in the human world?
Plus I wonder how the CMC react when their scapegoat was in the hospital during their latest posts
Well this is going to go well. Rainbow Dash needs something more then anger management and hopefully Vice Principal Luna is alright as she was the one who hit Sunset.
Will apple Jacks words be threown back into her, i really want her to eat ehr words ethier by Rainbow or Twilight.
Wonder how Apple Jack will react whens he learns it ehr own little sister the one who started it.
Applejack can just go die in a fire. Possibly even moreso depending on how she reacts to Apple Bloom
I see how Applejack is mad. She's probably mad at herself too once she finds out Sunset was innocent. But what she said about 'karma', Applejack should be having some later. All of them are feeling the weight of their guilt.
I agree to what Mirror Dash said about Applejack. I hope karma will be biting AppleBimbo's ass soon.
Why do these stories always attract comments from people who just want to blindly hate these characters? Even when that's not the point of the story they seem to show up.
Other than that I am enjoying the story. The fact that it's an Anon-a-miss story focusing on someone other than Sunset really helps set it apart from similar stories.
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Yeah, I was worried the car ride part would look rushed but I thought that was just me getting in my own head, you know?
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If ya focused a bit more on Rainbow being jail & Luna being questioned by the cops and less on the flashback & A.J. being a hypocrite, maybe chapter 2 would have for an impact, bit that's just my opinion.
huh, you realize should celestia or twilight want to take action because of this, said government would be equally obliged not to stop them right? anyway still an interesting story.
8626402 I dunno, it could be that the same people had friends who the characters remind them of and because that friend betrayed them and the whole Anon-A-Miss comic, it could just be therapeutic to hate on the characters and not the friend.
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Karma can be a cruel, sadistic mistress.
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Wait for it.
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A mole? You mean someone telling someone else in Equestria what's going on?
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Same tune, new player
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Shh.
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She wasn't in jail though, they merely took her to an interrogation room. As for the Luna part, we are focusing on Rainbow's pov and since they wouldn't be in the same room there was no point having the confrontation this chapter.
Oooh an update
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Fair enough my friend.
"You girls ain't gonna like this, but Sunset's karma did this to her. She was the one spreadin' everyone's secrets." Applejack stated coldly.
Holy sh*t Applejack! That's dark as f*ck! Even if Sunset was Anon-A-Miss, she didn't deserve such cruelty!
Also, why aren't the Humane 4 freaking out at Rainbow Dash of what she has done?! SHE JUST ATTEMPTED MURDER!
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Yeah reading that again it was awfully harsh, I mean being angry at someone and actually being glad they were nearly killed are 2 different things. As for them not freaking out, they saw what happened they know Rainbow didn't intend for Sunset to get hit by the car. All she did was push her there was no way she could know Sunset would wind up in the street as a car drove by.
I actually question whether or not it would even count as attempted murder. She didn't push Sunset into the street Sunset walked into the street as a result of being pushed. Maybe that's the same thing I'm not really sure.
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yea but, direct or indirect, it's still murder
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I really hope I didn't come off as rude. It's hard to hear tone online and I just wanted to show that that's my train of thought for why I did what I did.
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Exactly. As for why Applejack is acting like such an assholes, I drew inspiration from the 'Bats'
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You good Manic, no harm at all
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Yeah, I was wondering how the police and the government got all this information
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I will explain that in a bit.
It should be
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Give me a minute.
Aww shit Loved it! Plz continue!!
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Probably the same reason Applejack had to say that downright evil, vile phrase: Because they thought she was spreading secrets and bruised their oh so precious egos. Therefore she deserved to get hit by a car and nearly killed.
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Shock and denial are two powerful things
I'll be honest: I liked the first chapter, but I wasn't really feeling this one.
I thought the cops were acting really weirdly (and pretty unprofessionally), and I thought the shipping stuff felt really out of place considering the tone of the story.
Also, this chapter is absolutely riddled with spelling and grammar mistakes, to the point where it really detracts from the story. I think you should seriously get a spellchecker or something like that.
Nontheless, I'll keep reading. Like I said, I liked the first chapter, so I'll wait and see where it goes.
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I hope this doesn't come off as rude but, why is everyone surprised again about tue ship, yeah I kinda gave it more of a focus on this one, but I did mention it in chapter one. The reason I focused more on it (and this deals with what's gonna happen in the next chapter too) is to show just what Rainbow's action have cost her.
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I did notice the one line in the first chapter, and honestly I found it rather out of place then too. But a simple "loving" someone could still be interpreted as a deep platonic relationship with some odd wording imo, so it only really became fully apparent what you were going for in this chapter. (At least for me, that is.)
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That's true as well and I probably should have taken into account not everyone uses love in just the romantic way. For that I'm sorry. At the end of the day this is why I haven't written the next chapter, because I'm afraid people will hate that one just as much as this one. Especially with what I'll do with Luna.
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Uh? I see 6 explicitly positive comments on this chapter and 3 explicitly negative comments (including mine). And given that people are more likely to voice their opinions if they don't like something, I'd count all the other comments as somewhat implicitly positive.
Plus, your story has 105 upvotes and 15 downvotes. So... it really doesn't feel like "people are hating it".
Personally, while (as I mentioned) I found the interaction with the police rather odd, and think the romance is a bit offputting given the type of story, those are all things I can probably deal with. It was all the myriads of mistakes that really got to me. I think if you could fix those it would go a long way.
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You know when person that focuses on the negative comments more of the positives? I'm one of those people unfortunately.
Thoughts that went through my mind ~3 minutes ago:
Yay! it updated!
...~2 weeks ago...
how did I miss it update?
...oh, I hadn't added it to my bookshelves...
...I feel like an idiot.
Eagerly awaiting chapter 3, no need to rush though.
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What exactly are you going to do to Luna? Is she going to get into trouble for running Sunset over?(even though it was an accident and it was because of Rainbow?)
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no Harder than Princess Twilight and Princess Celestia!
Among all the Anon-A-Miss fics I’ve read, this is the first one that I can recall being about someone other than Sunset. It’s very interesting, and I want to see where it goes from here.
Attempted murder, hm? That's a tall order. They'd need to prove Rainbow planned to push Sunset in the way of an oncoming car.
I get a sense that phrase is thrown about rather casually.
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Actually, they wouldn't. They'd only need to prove she intended to push Sunset. An intent to harm can be inferred if the contact was harmful or unwanted.
Any felonious activity can be used as means to convict on another, directly related, crime. The idea is that a criminal, committing a crime, is the CAUSE of whatever results. It's why if police officers, while in a gunfight with a gunman, aren't convicted of murder if they hit a civilian. The gunman gets those added to their conviction. So, even if the 'gunman' only had a knife, the act of causing public chaos which resulted in police officers accidentally killing others would allow the knife-only gunman to be charged with assault with a deadly weapon, murder, etc.
I doubt they'd go for murder with Dash, but aggravated assault, battery, and negligent homicide are all easily on the table.
Of course, this all assumes a legal system similar to that of the US... which, given multiple dimensions and orbital friendship lasers, might not be quite as strict or regulated.
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they'd probably decide on manslaughter and it doesn't even require intent to kill, just the stupidity to act.