8523751 Thanks for reading this far. I love hearing people's feedback. When I write, I just have all these things I want to try and just do them. Sure some people will get upset and stop reading, but I would rather write without censoring myself. These characters do messed up stuff occasionally, and confronting that eventually makes for a more interesting story in my opinion.
If people can't handle reading things they don't like without making snide remarks, then they have never mentally progressed passed a child.
Write what you feel you need and want to write, it's how your best work will be done and more people will like it than if you try to pander to every person who wants your story to progress how they want it to.
looking forward to more, the scene with the changelings could be touched up a bit, it doesn't seem too realistic for them to say it was cheating when they all have the goal of conquest in mind
8524562 I have to think about how I would rewrite that for a bit. It doesn't seem too hard. Anyways, I am glad you are excited for what comes next. There is a lot to pack into the next three years of conquering and the next chapter will represent a major step forward on most fronts. I can't wait to get to all the things I have planned for the growth of their enterprise and the effect they will have on Equestria in the meantime.
8524593 I'm just happy to be out of my funk again, I think it was the prospect of re-reading a chapter, I dislike re-reading unless it has been a long time since I last read it
The stallion speaking was a white unicorn, which was a common sight in Canterlot which prided itself in having ponies with neutral-colored coats. There was also the fact that Celestia had a white coat, so ponies thought they might be related to the Princess if they also had a white coat.
Certainly sounds plausible enough from the ponies POV. Though then wouldn't all ponies with a blue coat be possibly related to Luna? (Not that Luna has returned yet, since this is before season 1 even begins if I remember correctly?) *chuckles* Silly ponies. :P
“Metal not your style? Whatever, tightlaced people like you wouldn’t fit in anyways.”
I'm with you Thomas, metal isn't my style either. Too loud and obnoxious. x.x A nice Irish jig is much better. ^.^
“These candy bears have nothing on Haribo’s Gummibärchen,” the philosopher replied without even considering her question.
Eh gummy bears are nice, but give me chocolate over them any day. Especially Dark Chocolate Mmmmmm *licks lips*
“Like what you see?” asked a stallion next to them, referring to the pens — not himself. “We just started making them internally a few days ago. There design was really easy to copy and manufacture internally.”
Hmm not sure if I see canon Filthy Rich doing something like this. His wife Spoiled sure, but he has been shown to be a generally honest pony from what I remember... *shrugs* doesn't mean he 'wouldn't' but idk...
A dark blue alicorn with a starry mane posed before a camera.
Huh or maybe it is into the time of the show now....
“Having fun, Bodo?” Thomas asked the alicorn.
Okay so I forgot for a moment we have changelings.
“Because I owe that pony my life, and we prenchmares never forget a debt.”
Yeah you gp Fleur! Protect our little changelings! You too Penny. ^.^
When we have them all, we strike together and the kingdom is ours.
*snorts* how dare they!? Give us a bad image will you *growls*
The unicorn could do nothing against his amulet, and her horn snapped off.
nooooooo! Poor Penny.
The love floated out of her body. Autumn could see large pink globes leave the bodies of the more powerful changelings to join her much smaller one. Then those globes all disappeared.
hmmmm interesting, very interesting. A very effective way to get love from those in the field.
The top story was “Nightmare Moon, Hero of Ponyville” with a picture of some dark blue alicorn attributed to have been taken by Photo Finish.
8547804 Yeah, Filthy is the more honest of the two, but he didn't see anything wrong with what he was doing. Spoiled was the one who pushed him to do so, but we don't really get hear that in this chapter. There will be a dialogue later that puts the Riches in a more sympathetic light.
Ahhh gotta love the 1984 vibes from Equestria. Looks like they won't have too much trouble convincing the younger generation from joining their cause.
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Thanks for reading this far. I love hearing people's feedback. When I write, I just have all these things I want to try and just do them. Sure some people will get upset and stop reading, but I would rather write without censoring myself. These characters do messed up stuff occasionally, and confronting that eventually makes for a more interesting story in my opinion.
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Yeah, I can't wait for the battle of the bands scene I had outlined since the beginning where the youths of Equestrian rise up for metal.
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Okay, I added the brainstorming scene.
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If people can't handle reading things they don't like without making snide remarks, then they have never mentally progressed passed a child.
Write what you feel you need and want to write, it's how your best work will be done and more people will like it than if you try to pander to every person who wants your story to progress how they want it to.
looking forward to more, the scene with the changelings could be touched up a bit, it doesn't seem too realistic for them to say it was cheating when they all have the goal of conquest in mind
8524562
I have to think about how I would rewrite that for a bit. It doesn't seem too hard. Anyways, I am glad you are excited for what comes next. There is a lot to pack into the next three years of conquering and the next chapter will represent a major step forward on most fronts. I can't wait to get to all the things I have planned for the growth of their enterprise and the effect they will have on Equestria in the meantime.
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I'm just happy to be out of my funk again, I think it was the prospect of re-reading a chapter, I dislike re-reading unless it has been a long time since I last read it
Okay and here we go on a new chapter!
Certainly sounds plausible enough from the ponies POV. Though then wouldn't all ponies with a blue coat be possibly related to Luna? (Not that Luna has returned yet, since this is before season 1 even begins if I remember correctly?)
*chuckles* Silly ponies. :P
I'm with you Thomas, metal isn't my style either. Too loud and obnoxious. x.x A nice Irish jig is much better. ^.^
Eh gummy bears are nice, but give me chocolate over them any day. Especially Dark Chocolate Mmmmmm *licks lips*
Hmm not sure if I see canon Filthy Rich doing something like this. His wife Spoiled sure, but he has been shown to be a generally honest pony from what I remember... *shrugs* doesn't mean he 'wouldn't' but idk...
Huh or maybe it is into the time of the show now....
Okay so I forgot for a moment we have changelings.
Yeah you gp Fleur! Protect our little changelings! You too Penny. ^.^
*snorts* how dare they!? Give us a bad image will you *growls*
nooooooo! Poor Penny.
hmmmm interesting, very interesting. A very effective way to get love from those in the field.
*cackles* yep that would get her running to town.
Excellent chapter, as always a good read. ^.^
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Yeah, Filthy is the more honest of the two, but he didn't see anything wrong with what he was doing. Spoiled was the one who pushed him to do so, but we don't really get hear that in this chapter. There will be a dialogue later that puts the Riches in a more sympathetic light.