look, this is a great idea and a well-written story, but try to stick to ONE story, you have two (maybe three) stories going on and that was just 3 chapters. decide what you want and go with it. don't just write what sounds interesting and keep adding on. like how I taught my little brother, adding more Lego bricks doesn't make something better, it just makes a mess, it's the style and way you place those bricks that really make something worth looking at
8501347 I fair criticism, and what I was most afraid of. I once read a story that used short stories at the beginning of every chapter to set the theme. I wanted to try it, but it seems like it was more annoying than interesting. I will think of what I can do to salvage the situation. I could just relocate all of them to an optional chapter. That way they don't distract from the main story. What do you think?
8501445 personally, i think the ideas are good enough to be separate stories standing on their own two legs, the spider and the dreamers trying to regain their honor. Twilight and Cadence fighting the harmony thing while Trixie sees her as any other princess (which she is) all are good concepts and could be great stories, don't waste them as optional chapters, make them something bigger.
anyways your a decent writer and able to handle criticism, so you can be sure i'll keep reading, no matter what option you choose
8501492 I decided to make a 'short stories' fic for them all. Also, I put in the second part of the Grand Illusion. Feel free to follow me if you want to read more of my stories.
8501492 I might make full fictions out of some of these universes later. One thing at a time. For instance, the Puddinghead chapter came out of a guest chapter I am writing for another writer. That guest chapter was a lot of fun because I decided to take their character all the way to Tartarus and she met all these interesting characters like Sun Wukong, the Monkey King. I can't wait to publish that.
also, I think you should change the way she tells him to respect his friends, she sounds a little too desperate. it breaks the emersion, at least for me
look, this is a great idea and a well-written story, but try to stick to ONE story, you have two (maybe three) stories going on and that was just 3 chapters. decide what you want and go with it. don't just write what sounds interesting and keep adding on. like how I taught my little brother, adding more Lego bricks doesn't make something better, it just makes a mess, it's the style and way you place those bricks that really make something worth looking at
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I fair criticism, and what I was most afraid of. I once read a story that used short stories at the beginning of every chapter to set the theme. I wanted to try it, but it seems like it was more annoying than interesting. I will think of what I can do to salvage the situation. I could just relocate all of them to an optional chapter. That way they don't distract from the main story. What do you think?
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personally, i think the ideas are good enough to be separate stories standing on their own two legs, the spider and the dreamers trying to regain their honor. Twilight and Cadence fighting the harmony thing while Trixie sees her as any other princess (which she is) all are good concepts and could be great stories, don't waste them as optional chapters, make them something bigger.
anyways your a decent writer and able to handle criticism, so you can be sure i'll keep reading, no matter what option you choose
8501492
I decided to make a 'short stories' fic for them all. Also, I put in the second part of the Grand Illusion. Feel free to follow me if you want to read more of my stories.
8501492
I might make full fictions out of some of these universes later. One thing at a time. For instance, the Puddinghead chapter came out of a guest chapter I am writing for another writer. That guest chapter was a lot of fun because I decided to take their character all the way to Tartarus and she met all these interesting characters like Sun Wukong, the Monkey King. I can't wait to publish that.
Huh... i am pleasantly intrigued by this fic
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Wait for the next chapter, which will be out in the next 12 hours. It gets even more exciting.
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mkay, I look forward to them, for now, i wait for updates
also, I think you should change the way she tells him to respect his friends, she sounds a little too desperate. it breaks the emersion, at least for me
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I will see what I can do. This chapter is slated for touch ups today.
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Anyways, I am glad you are still reading my story.