Twilight messes up yet another spell. Now Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash have switched bodies and there's a new Empire in town to handle. Just another day in the Elements of Harmony.
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This was an engaging chapter. I think its rather strong and well paced. It was hard to put it down, even when I had to go to church (and kept reading it as I was setting up the sound system).
Griffons with magic seem like a real pain for the poor ponies. Gallus' personal mission was good and the near-death fight he got into was well done. That battle seems to be very much swung in favour of the griffons.
Luna's reaction to Twilight was rather funny. The Luna swooned line was a excellent capper to the first part and it only continued to get better. Now for the coming scenes between them... I am expecting something great...
Dash and Fluttershy coming into the boutique and RD wanting them both to become males wasn't what I was expecting. I had thought that only one would get turned into a stallion (and therefore end up getting the other knocked up..) The horse sizing was funny and the way you played it out makes me think Rarity needs to go up stairs and have AJ help her get the images out of her head... I'm sure AJ can help
Windy's scene was fun but I'm not sure it offered a lot beyond being a break and fun lil moment.
The rock farm makes me question why Pinkie is still there. Her family is messed up... Although she may be slowly getting some grounding (har, har) from her family. It seems pretty bleak... although they are likely to be safe from the attacks on other major settlements. Wonder if a fellow party pony could could feel something too and show up?
DT's mother is bad news... I'm not sure if having a dog around will help much. That mare is crazy...
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Well that's fantastic to hear- was real worried about all the fighting bits. And well, the addition of both Posey and her gang of misfits and Dash's parents were partially a 'hey guys don't forget that they exist too' and partially a respite from the whole chapter being dark. And I first thought of making Dash and Shy have separate stallion scenes, but I thought just taking them both out right now might be for the best- two birds with one stone deal and I keep having fun ideas for those two. And you'll see what I have planned for Diamond's mom. Let's just say it gets rather messy in my head. I mean this whole ending few chapters are Nightmare Night focused. I have a few ideas what to do there.