I'm ...not keen (let's just say) on the whole 'da special package, the pillar special' bit... That killed the whole spa scene for me.

Other than that. It was a great chapter.
The start was good. The Twipie was crazy thanks to Pinkie. When they were getting food it was a real mind bender keeping up with Fluttershy in Dash's body and Dash in Fluttershy's body sometimes. But it was funny how the mare was angry with the wrong pony.
That along with the walk home and the end of the chapter was a good enjoyable read. Cute ending makes me happy too.
Fluttershy seems to be getting excited there. I think she is warming to the idea of having Dash (in FS's body) in her bed.

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Oh that is perfectly fine with me. Some scenes flowed easier and the spa scene is where the divide between sections of writing happened.

And that kind of scene won't happen again mainly because now Dash knows what's exactly up in the spa. And yes I am going to bring that up briefly in the first bit of chapter 3. It got brushed under the rug mainly because of Rarity being at the spa to but yeah I plan for every scene to have some form of purpose. And actual payoff. And she learned from this unfortunate event to ask Fluttershy what to expect from situations and say no to surprises like that. Anyway ship detours like that will be highly rare now. Since endgame is decidedly the FD. But yeah certain scenes definitely worked better than others though I chalk that up to when and how I was writing it, my personal favorite one writing wise was the TwiPie scene. Pinkie Pie comes ridiculously easy for me.

And yes trying to come up with more descriptive and reader friendly ways to make body swapping pots and who is actually in which body and is speaking or moving can get rather difficult to write clear. That's to be a learning process on my side as well. The whole idea of body swapping unfortunately tends towards more mind bending
things or comedy. Thanks.

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That showed in your writing. The TwiPie scene flowed like a swift river, it came so easy, fast and smooth.

Male Pinkie leads to some especially funny stuff thus far. I wonder what would happen if Twi accidentally got her marefriend actually stuck as a colt for a while, just to go with her unfortunate mishap with the Flutterdash body swap too. Bet that would be a good morale 'booster'

Wrestling bears and caring for large, dangerous animals in the corner of the most dangerous forest in Equestria tends to do that to the least of ponies.

Rainbow could just facehoof. Which hurt her far more than it hurt Shy. Cursing her friends ridiculous strength,

And nope. This is where I stop. Honestly, I can understand Fluttershy being stronger than most people think. But when they get to the level of seriously being physically stronger than Rainbow Dash, that's when I turn away.

Sorry, not gonna continue reading this.

Fluttershy heard her voice tinkle out like a clear bell. "Haha, sure, I just have a few things. Like don't grab my furniture. Twilight can get that stuff, then she can help out somehow. She's got a stupid balloon or something. Oh wait, she can just use her alicorn magic and pick up my entire life of things and drop them off at your house. But, no worries, I just need my pillows, and my bed sheets, and like my turtle, and my toiletries. That's actually about it."

Fluttershy: Tortoise!