Twilight messes up yet another spell. Now Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash have switched bodies and there's a new Empire in town to handle. Just another day in the Elements of Harmony.
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This... Quite a chapter to wake up to.
I see Pinkie Pie appears to be sticking to her course of action, so that is going to put Twilight in a harder position to come as she realises that Pinkie Pie is not, in fact coming back. Her family is less welcoming than I thought they would be, especially Maud. But it was well played with how they are portrayed here. Will they come out of their little rock domain when a war starts?
I hope so. I can see it being the call to action for Pinkie Pie, even though the Pinkie Sense will be driving her crazy with how active it is about to become.
Then we have drunk/tipsy Twi. As a stallion. Shes getting really messed up here and not making things any better for herself while doing so. Note, I bet he has a better ability to absorb alcohol when as a stallion. So that means Twilight can probably drink more.
...probably not a good thing in this case.
Then we have Dash hopeful for getting to bone Fluttershy while they are body swapped. Quite a thing to go to Twilight about really. But certanly a better time could have been chosen. While normally a bit of FlutterBlitz action would be great, this sounds a lot more messed up, although it could still have its cute moments before a second couple join AJ and Rarity in carrying a foal.
I can't see Pinkie Pie getting in on this sort of action. Her and Twilight have far too much damage to try and fix, so thankfully we are only likley to go into this war with two pregnant mares of the mane 6. I expect this war to really put pressure on budding famillies. It's not a great time to be pregnant and I can see AJ & Dash wanting to get stuck into defending Equestria.
Back to the top, AJ & Rarity's big moment. Rarity is coming off a bit self centered while AJ is trying to put their developing foal first. I can totally understand the farmer and her need to put family first and the resulting conflict played out about as expected. I could totally picture in my mind Rarity doing a backflip and her couch falling over after getting hit by her marefriend like that. It was kinda comical really.
Sweetie Belle, my dear innocent filly. Are you going to go and spill your bigger sister's secret?
Oh I can see Apple Bloom being overjoyed and the rest of the apples (except Big Mac?) being horrified.
...It's going to be great, but terrible for them.
Twist aye? Cute that hes trying to be helpful and misinterprets her condition for a disguise.
DT could have used his help. She really needs to go to the hospital before things get serious and she is faced with losing her leg.
The action in the desert continues to be of a weird sort of interest. Capper, is that really you? You seem a lot more ... warrior-like here. I'm not sure I'm all sold on this take of him, but as you have established things thus far, I guess we are running with it.
Two hours of fighting though? That's a really long time to be doing something as high intensity as fighting (well duelling?) and dancing around, especially for a buggered pair of ponies. I guess the main thing that bugs with capper is him being all armoured up and still able to fight for a crazy long time. Having worn armour before, it gets heavy fast when you're going hard. Interesting that hes now opted for talking to the ponies hes helped have chased off and kulled.
Lightning Dust is an honourable mention at the tail end and is somepony I can see getting killed in the incoming attack. The last paragraph certainly works hard to set up the tension for the incoming assault. It also makes me sure that our little insight into the brother and sister in town is headed for a brutal end.
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Thanks, I've been working on this a while and seeing a reaction like this is very uplifting. To get through your things in general sequence- Pinkie's family is something I wanted to really get into and every time I wrote them, I wondered what years of isolation and emotional pain would cause them- as I kept mentioning, Pinkie leaving messed up their whole family dynamic.
The rest with Sweetie and the pregnancies- Sweetie wants to tell the happy news to someone. And that's going to cause a whole lot of issues. I've been setting up hints of some really bad stuff coming AJ's way because of that, and with how canonically well her own parent's marriage went, I am probably going to go for a head there. Dash and Shy will get together in that way, but while I was writing this, I kept hitting that wall of 'it just isn't the exact time yet' and so I've pushed that moment slightly further down the line.
On the ending bits, I've actually taken some hints of more Generation 1 with the cats- Catrina was a old antagonist in that generation and besides a rather powerful witch- being in effect, her son and royal, he's kind of dealing with a lot on his plate. Of course, he's probably the most approachable of all of them- being fourth in line to the throne and outside of a rare occurence (like the Storm King killing the royal family and imprisoning his mother) he really didn't have to deal with the implications of his actions. Bit of an arrogant streak at times, but with how lucky cats tend to be in how I made them use magic, of course he comes off slightly full of himself. And watching the movie again, he was rather shady when they first met. Blame me for having cats for years- like how I wrote the Diamond Dogs, I tended to play up some of the feline/ canine traits to get them slightly more of a personality than some.
On the Zephyr Breeze/ Lightning Dust connection, I've actually been wanting to do that since he was introduced and had a similar color design to her. Weirdly enough, that one slight idea turned into this whole story in a way, building off itself into what it is now.
Overall, I have a whole lot of weird ideas that I've not even touched on.