I'm just a janitor. The only Human janitor in Equestria, but still just a janitor. I quite like my job if I'm honest, sure it gets a bit hectic, but the pays good.
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I like this.
Most people start off struggling to write 2K words. After a while, though, you struggle to keep it bellow 7K xD S'just a matter of getting comfortable with writing.
Maybe try describing more the feelings, the mannerisms, the looks characters give each other, that sort of thing. They include more depth to the story AND increase the word count ^^
As long as you write a minimum of 1k words everything is fine with me.
You might want to do something so people know whats flashback and whats not, I had trouble knowing the diffrence
Again, Impressive...
Nice one keep the production on the highest lvl
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I try to start the chapter off in a flashback, atleast for now. I'll do something besides leaving it in italics.
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You're half right... I'll let you decide which half is right for now...
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i know most people don't like the ones who pick things apart to see what things are, but i find it fun to try my hand at using logic to solve trivial problems, after all, on thing i'm good at is overthinking things.
now, based off the wording it could go one of two ways:
1) celestia zapped him with something
2) somebeing zapped him with an anti-age spell or someting
since the first one references two halves of the question, it is highly unlikely that that is what happened.
which leaves (if you go based off of the wording) option 2 to be the most likely outcome.
great chapter man.
hmm... you may want to invest in break lines because in this chapter i was confused when you switched the setting from the past, to when spoiled was trashing the room.
I honestly thought Celestia was trashing the room.
As for your chapter length situation? Don't worry about it.
Most people here like at least 1,000 words per chapter, so if you can manage that then your golden.
when you get more comfortable do more.
Soooo yeaah great story here brother
hope to see more.
They do have survival instincts.
Well, now we know why he hasn't aged! Smoking tobacco makes you immortal in Equestria!
<Wait, what?)
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don't tell everyone you asshole! Now I'm gonna have to come up with another reason!
I love this story, simple and intriguing. Keep up the awesome work!!
Please, write more of this. I'm liking it. Minus some punctuation errors here and there, it's quite enjoyable. And don't worry about the small size of each chapter; it helps keep the story "digestible".
I love this, I don't really read human in equestria type stuff, but I love this.
Is it sad Ive been reading this with Neil Flynn's voice in my head?
This is the greatest thing ever.....
Nitpick: Spoiled Milk is an earth pony. There's no horn to grab.
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