3000 years ago, the Tree of Harmony was destroyed, the Elements were lost, and almost all of the Alicorns were converted into either Earth Ponies, Unicorns, or Pegasi. Now, Alicorns are the masters, normal ponies the slaves. Can freedom be achieved?
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8202480 Thank you
Aghh why a week this is almost as bad a 'cliff'-hanger as the end of the last chapter.
8202637 I'm sorry about that, but I want a bit of time to work on chapter 7. The others are written, but it usually takes me a while to write them due to other stories and video games distracting me. I promise it will be worth the wait (I hope)
8205876 Thank you for the support and I hope it lives up to your expectations
8202677 I know it will but doesn't mean I can't grip about the cliffhanger.
Certainly looks interesting.
Alright, two big questions that at least 1 of which needs to be answered next chapter.
1: Who helped Twilight with the key and cannonballs?
2: Who of the Mane 6 will she meet first?(I'm thinking it's gonna be either Fluttershy because Everfree, or Pinkie because Pinkie.)
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#2 is answered next chapter. #1 will remain unknown for quite a long time (AKA, until the interlude between acts 1 and 2)
Alright, here's Chapter 3 errors I found, as promised...
It should be you're here.
Its supposed to be 'losing' here
Its supposed to be 'lid' not 'lit'
Missing an 'up' after 'blow'
Not sure if you want this to end in a question mark.
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Fixed
Really great chapter full of tension, but also funny moments. I haven't thought of Twilight as of a 'bakteriophobe' afraid of getting down into the sewers, given I assume Lady Thorn didn't care much about the hygiene and well-being of her slaves. Maybe her stay at House Shining Star made her a little more pampered?
Also, in the beginning of the chapter, two thoughts crossed my mind. First, how was the Queen planning to 'store' Twilight in utter isolation? Wouldn't the poor mare die because of hunger and all?
And second, how did Twilight manage to unlock the magic-dampening device on her forehead when her hooves were chained to the ground and magic gone?
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First answer- the door would have had a one-way magic barrier over it to let food in, but not out.
Second answer- her hooves still had enough slack that she could reach her horn. It's how she was able to walk to the bed. Or she could have just leaned down and put the key in that way. Also, ponies can hold things with their hooves, but that is explained a bit more later.
So Twilight needs to find the other Elements so she can wield them and they'll become a part of her torc?
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Perhaps. You'll just have to wait and see
Editor's archive time! There are some fun ones in this chapter.
"The weights on her hooves were metal cuffs, attached to chains and connected to an anchor in the middle of the floor."
Me: It’s like Link, from Twilight Princess!
Because, you know, you guys DON'T already know how much of a nerd I am.
"However, the Element of Magic reacted and struck Thorn before she could touch you, causing her horn to explode. She will recover, eventually."
Me: Guessing that horn isn’t growing back, huh?
Actually, thinking back, I can't remember if I was wrong about this or not! I'll have to double check.
"It will be impossible for me to wield them and heal Equestria"
Me: OOOOOH!
LOL, this one cracks me up. Sometimes, I just need to react to things.
"‘Oh Celestia, this feels WEIRD"
Me: That’s gotta feel so weird, to use your teacher’s name the same way we humans say “Oh God, or “Sweet Jesus.”
You think she's ever said it to Celestia's face? Or Luna's? Now THAT would be weird.
"That’s why."
Me: LOL! “Why me?” “Because there’s a cannonball coming at your face – duck.”
Dear Lord, this is one of my favorites! I almost forgot about it!
"‘I really hope I’m not going crazy,’ she thought.
You’re not."
Me: Don’t worry, you’re not crazy. The voice in your head knows best.
"She teleported the three of them over to the small walkway next to the river of sewage"
Me: Here, have a pleasant little walkway right next to A RIVER OF WASTE COMING OUT OF A PRISION. WON’T THAT BE FUN?
Every time I read this comment, I hear the last part come out in Really Freakin' Clever's voice.
See you next time!
Um, you do know that Flash Sentry is a Peagsus right?
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Yes. Was there a part where I mistook him for another race? If so, let me know where
The cure for watching your father being publicly tortured is a hug from your slave master.