3000 years ago, the Tree of Harmony was destroyed, the Elements were lost, and almost all of the Alicorns were converted into either Earth Ponies, Unicorns, or Pegasi. Now, Alicorns are the masters, normal ponies the slaves. Can freedom be achieved?
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At least she didn't threaten to bring out the frying pan.
By the way, the ponies mentioned last chapter, any chance we'll meet them soon?
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I'm not actually sure. I just mentioned them as a way to introduce Fluffy and bring up the idea of rescuing ponies from the forrest. Though you will get to see a rescue next chapter, and the two ponies rescued there will be appearing later on throughout the story. I may mention the two rescued last chapter in more detail later, but for now, I don't really know. I may try to work them in though since you mentioned it.
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No prob. Though, I got into this story solely because it went to the FlashLight group, so I'm hoping there's some shipping in here.
Okay, I'm caught up. This is really good. There's some minor errors at certain points, but this is really really good. I really like it. Also, if you need an editor, I'll gladly offer my services.
Also, because I'm a total grammar freak, the title for chapter 6 has a spacing problem.
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Thank you for catching that. Please point out any other errors you see, and thank you for the positive feedback
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Sure! When I get the chance to reread it all, I'll point them out. Also, I'll try to be nice about it and not a grammar Nazi. Sorry if I end up being like that though, tell me if I am.
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You're good
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No problem. Though, you better check the other chapters for Night Light misspellings. I suspect the prologue isn't the only time you mention him.
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I will
Interesting story you've got here, I'll be tracking it. 😊
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Thank you
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Eh, that's fine. I wasn't expecting spoilers, I was just showing you my thoughts.
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That's fine. I like hearing what people think will happen
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Oh, if that's the case...I'm guessing the next chapter is just Twilight controlling her magic. As for the future, I'm hoping we see the alicorns, specifically Thorn, come in and wreck shop, destroying this community they found so we can hate the alicorns more. I also hope there is a future chapter where we meet Trixie...and Maud Pie. Love those characters. I'm also guessing Discord is not gonna pop up in this AU, I doubt he exists in this version of Equestria. Though I'm wondering if Sombra exists...
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Discord and Sombra will both pop up eventually, but not in the way you think. As for Thorn, she will play a role in the end of this first act. Good news, I only plan to have about 10-12 chapters for act 1, so conflict may come sooner than you think
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Oh goody! I can't wait to see that! I so hope she gets her just desserts and gets killed!
Editor's archive:
This is going to be a gold mine. So many silly comments on this chapter here.
There are a few connecting comments about a single issue here. For example, when Flash references knowing how painful the anti-magic bombs were, I commented:
So has it been used on him before, or was he supposed to experience it so he knew what he was inflicting on her, like police and Taser guns?
And then when he confirmed that it'd been used on him:
Magical Taser. Got it.
I probably found it funnier than I should have.
The following lines:
"Pinkie immediately pulled a full bucket of water out of her mane and handed it to Flash. He didn’t question it."
"Flash facehoofed."
"Twilight groaned and faceclouded."
all got the same reaction: Yes. Good.
That's all they needed.
As you might recall, Piemaster is not the best at spelling. The original version of this line:
"He shuddered. “I know what it’s like to be hit with one while using magic."
had one word be incorrect. Me being the grammar nerd I am, I corrected it and left him this comment:
Sorry, but I was laughing when I saw you put down “shuttered,” not “shuddered.” Flash is not a window.
When Fluttershy is shaming the mob as only Fluttershy can, I started thinking Did Twilight break the fourth wall?
And after Pinkie fixes the hole, I said this:
Please tell me that was the fourth wall. I really wanted Twilight to break the fourth wall and that’s why Pinkie is so good at fixing it. it’s too perfect.
And as Piemaster pointed out, she did!
"Applejack began before a grey hoof came up and expertly booped her on the nose"
Me: How exactly does one become an expert in booping?
Still haven't gotten an answer to that question.
“Ok then. Tomorrow I’ll set up some rune circles to stop this from happening again.”
Me: Cue Staples button.
They suffered and cleaned up the messes for years and apparently, fixing it was that easy.
"BRRZZZZZ
BANG BANG BANG BANG
WRRRRRRRRRRR
THUMP THUMP THUMP
AWOOOOOOOOOOOOGA
DING"
Me:Yes. Good.
Also, that last part…did she just ring a bell when she was done…for the hell of it?
Apparently, yes.
"“Go away, sun,” Twilight grumbled as she desperately tried to cling to sleep
Me: GO AWAY SUN I’M BUSY.
Shout-out to Cavadiso readers!
“I just kept quiet so you could have a nice little heart to heart. Don’t mind me."
Me:All I can think is something I say to Brianna every now and then:
“I’ll be over here if you need me. Don’t need me. I don’t know what I’m doing.”
But in this case, I think it’s more like:
“I’ll be over here if you need me. Don’t need me. I’m not third-wheeling on you two awkward beans.”
"But I can see, and more importantly I can still read."
Me: Priorities. She and Twilight are going to get along great.
You know who else Twilight would get along with? Hermione.
“But why’s she got to go to the library?”
“Because that’s what Hermione does. When in doubt, go to the library!”:
"I made pancakes! Whose hungry?”
Me: PANCAKES
We just have a thing with pancakes, in case you haven't noticed.
I can't do any more, there's too many!
But these are the best.
See you next time!
Did you really just do that!?
I wasn't expecting much FlashLight in this story, but I guess it's more implied than anything at this point.
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Yes. Yes I did. And yes, FlashLight is a bit lighter in this story. Check out how to date a princess if you want real flashlight shipping