the old on already had sex talk alamax by here, so this is an upgrade.

plus i like how you changed luna and cadences attitude. fits better for this.

Awwww yissss Richter gets to fighting a Narrowscale. And now he's got some serious backup. Or teammates to be more specific. But, Richter is gonna have to endure boring ass birthday shit first. Then he can get the action. Also, Annerose is still the heavy duty ass kicker and the blushing school girl. Just the way I liked her.

But what about Svea? Will they slay her, or will Annerose get super flustered when they start fucking??

I NEED ANSWERS

7979998 Ah. Well, RIP Svea.

Answers have been gottened.

This came out quicker than expected. Is this going to be a normal thing or just you wrote both one after the other? Either way, cannot wait for more!

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Are you planning to change the personalities of the characters, like making Ritcher less of a depressed loser or the alicorns (specially Luna) less of a bunch of amoral monsters?

Yay, Annerose! Glad to see she's going to have a slightly bigger role in this version!

This new Luna, i like. Now we have seen more dialogue with the characters i must say you've outdone yourself rewriting Lineage. Can't wait to see more.

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but is she still going to be a sexual deviant who loves corrupting women, and making them whores?
and if so, please make a side story!
if you need inspiration for a side story, check your pms, from me ;) the clocktowers bell rings for you.

7980306 still doesn't mean she cant like to make whores, AND be mother goose.

7980313 fair enough.
RIP best mum.

My journey started with a task: find and slay a dragon to prove myself worthy of a crown... but it soon spiralled into something far greater. A journey that spanned the first decades of my immortal life, a journey that left scars on mind, heart, and psyche... and a journey that was filled with forbidden love, hidden away in the confines of the Equestrian Monarchy that I soon fell into, only to embrace wholly and without regret.

A journey that will begin in a few chapters (hopefully).

I'm ok with this as long as Dragon wife is back......please

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Oh no I'm just here because I'm 'Mates' With this twat

Send him birthday wishes tomorrow in the form of dead cats

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Shite, RIP Svea,hopefully got her name right .....o well I'm sure I'll still like this story....I'm just lazy right now to read the story......

Itty Bitty Titty Committe

A Sekirei fan I see.

So I wonder how Richter's speach is going to go.

kinda fcked up what you did but atleast ur remaking it

I'm guessing that this version of Richter doesn't have a past of fucking anything that moves.

I like this redux but the original is still good in my book, though.

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BUT WHAT GOOD IS INDESTRUCTIBLE STEEL IF YOU CAN'T UNSCREW IT TO THROW IT AT YOUR ENEMIES AND END THEM RIGHTLY

You refer to cadence as the pink alicorn, does that mean they aren't as human looking in this story?

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a lot of fucking good, stabbing, slashing (as long as it's a longsword and not a rapier) etc

If this comment gets 1k dislikes i'll personally make the cover image in my brilliant artstyle

you should definitely have the dragon confuse annarose as a guy when they meet

Although I'm sad Lineage got canceled, I can sort of see what you mean; it was starting to struggle under its own weight. I look forward to seeing where this goes.

I enjoyed the old Luna but i enjoy this luna better also yay new cadance and yay Zane

We love the fact that you pretty much took the first 10 chapters and put them together without losing any of the overall storyline.
We also hope that Svea remains in this version

wow
thats some intense
social satire my
dude
11/10 would taste again

That is all. Equestria is ours.

I like it so far! But it seems like it miiiight be no Svea? That was probably my favorite part of the original. :3

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I read for the Clop mostly
I spell good
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7982105 What?? No!!! There better be Svea, I want my Dragon lady back!! She was one of the best parts of the original!! Though would not mind seeing more Nekomata... we honestly did not get enough of them.

7982249 I know! I loved Svea. And for all I know, she very well might be happening again. Just seems that with the change to the storyline that the meeting will be different (obviously) or she simply won't appear! I can't claim to know what is going through the mind of the almighty Neko Fag tho!

Really hope you bring Svea back, dude. She was one of my favorite parts of the original.

Thank fuck. Luna isn't a souless cunt, Cadence doesn't have a personality that screams "Whore", Celestia is chill as fuck, Annerose has a bigger role, Zane... he's fine. Grael is chill as always.

This is 10000x better then the original Lineage.

7980249 Considering that the plot of the first story was Richter having to go around the world and fuck really powerful women, thereby gaining their power, in order to become powerful enough to fuck the nightmares out of his family members, you're already doing better. The plot of the original started off like the storyline of a shitty sex videogame, with the quests consisting almost entirely of sex, all the way up until the final mission which was to fuck four demigoddesses' alter-egos out of them.

This one, he's a prince, and he's got a sword, and he's got his trusty advisors/battle buddies, and he's gotta go and kill a dragon so that he can be king someday, or something like that. It's awesome! It's an actual plotline! Also he doesn't seem to be a manwhore, or at least as much of a manwhore, and he seems to have at least some hangups about incest. Also Cadence is actually acting like a mother would, rather than just doing shit like "let me fuck it better, son."

I like the way that you're just teasing at the possibility of incest, like with Cadance and Luna, instead of just going "BANG! They're fucking their own family members! WOOOOO!!!" It's a lot classier, as you said.

11/10, would read again. You're doing fantastically so far.

I'm just gonna leave my dislike and go. This hits so many of my "fuck this shit" buttons that I fear I may have to kill myself.

Woot! I remember starting g the original Lineage, and I stopped reading it for the same reason you're rewriting it.

I know this'll be a lot better, and I'm so ready for the story.

We want Svea back! Please?

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Mini Minrie just got.....
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The fuck? How the hell did I end up on Chapter 2 when I didn't even read chapter 1 first?

Anyway, are the characters here, except for Richter, anthropomorphic? Just wondering, especially with Grael being a wolf.

I'm rereading, and what the fuck are you on about in this chapter? Everyone has at least one x chromosome, but only males have a y chromosome.

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This would be before I took this story over from Buster.