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The story of Trixie's past and the reason why she grew arrogant. The reason she became a traveling magician. A story of her inspiration. A story of love, sadness, mystery and ponies. And a story I'm entering in hopes of winning a contest. I wrote this based on an idea I had laying around. I ponifed it and decided to finish it. I wrote this in one sitting and it isn't great but hey... maybe it'll become your head-canon.
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I feel like the story is moving pretty fast. Also, even after the note of referring to herself in 3rd person, she still talked in 1st person. But aside from that, I like the concept of her going on a journey to look for her father, and passed through Ponyville on the journey.
841631 I'll need to work on my writing skills then, I'm open for criticism since this is the first piece of writing that I've ever shared anywhere
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Sorry about that. I did feel like I rushed it now that I re-read it. Hopefully I can do better in the future
An interesting idea, although it does feel a bit rushed-- but maybe that is me. I'm a giant stickler for details and juicy bits of plot. I bet you I rewrote the first chapter to my fanfic 50 times before I was satisfied with it
Anywho, keep at it. I am sure you will get better.
I think its a good start. Hang in there.
There was one part where it mentioned her mother gave her a 'clock' and a hat.
I don't think she has a clock, I think she has a cloak.
Anywho, I think it was a really good idea, I like it!
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