7574520 So much hate for such a small thing. If you don't like this story, or the friend I dedicated it too, then please, by all means don't stick around. Just 'x' out of the window and go find a story you do like. Oh, a feel free to leave a dislike on the story too, if that would make you feel better.
However, if you continue to insult the readers, as well as anonpencil, I'm afraid I'm going to have to block you. I don't mind you insulting me or the story, but please, don't insult my friends.
7574537 Thanks bruh, but no worries! Some people just hate me, and that's ok, really it is. Do what you want to do with your readers and this story, of course.
7574537 Very well. I shall insult the "story." As a matter of fact, I'll improve it:
For a moment, Sweetie Belle feels a pang of bitterness, of anger at the whole situation. The racks stand over her, looming, judgmental of her own weakness, and she can feel every strip of cloth staring down at her. Maybe if she’d just been more assertive. Maybe if she’d stressed the importance of the situation. Maybe if she’d offered to do that weird thing Rarity likes to do with Spike in her bedroom (and shower sometimes). Maybe then she’d have gotten her medication, or at least figured out a helpful spell. But no. She’s Sweetie Belle, Rarity's sweet little sister. This is her life, and she’s going to accept it, she realizes it, even if the work is just killing her. It’s only a matter of hours before Sweetie Belle notices that her cough isn’t going away. Sure it might be the dust or…just maybe…could it be that… No, there’s no way. But then, a little while later, she feels a sudden pang of exhaustion, far greater than she’s felt before. Then comes dizziness, a lack of appetite, despite the fact that she hasn’t eaten all day. Then she feels as though her chest itself is swollen, bulging out past where her rib cage should be. By the time she brings her hoof to her nose, then brings it away bloody, she knows for certain what’s going on. With a cry of despair, Sweetie Belle throws himself against Carousel Boutique's door. She bangs and scrapes against the heavy surface for dear life, but it’s no use. Blood runs down her face, mixing with fearful tears. “Rarity!” she screams. “Rarity, please let me out! I have to get my heart-worm medication! Before it’s too late!” But it’s already too late. A mosquito bit her that morning, and without the medication, the larvae got into her bloodstream and made their way to her heart. She knows they’re there inside her now, reproducing, thriving on her unmedicated body. Sweetie Belle curls up on the floor, feeling her eyes going hazy as a sudden pain in her chest thuds through her. The sound of her feeble coughs ring through the empty boutique as she twitches with a sudden, pained seizure. “N-no…” she croaks out, gripping at her chest. But there’s nothing she can do now. There’s nothing anyone can do. The heartworms continue their cruel work, and in the next few minutes, Sweetie Belle coughs her last, blood-tinged cough. Then she lies still, dead in the dust she has so carelessly left on the boutique floor. It takes a few days for Rarity to even notice that she’s gone.
I came here for a comedy story, and I get this... I regret nothing
I suppose, seeing as it is written as a gift to anonpencil(no offense here, just the kind of stuff he writes is gross imo), how the story is presented and all the other tags except "comedy" I should have seen this coming, but hey, I'm not known for my insight
Not sure yet if I like it or no, only confusion so far, so neither up, nor down vote for now. Keep 'em coming dude
7574393 Well, that was unnecessary. And rude, whatever did i do to you? I think you have a problem. Out of all the people who commented you chose little ol me? Why? I mean, I said nothing of value. I did it as a joke. It was the definition of a throwaway comment. I may not agree with the authors hatred of Spike but I support them for their creativity. Just wow. You really want to lash out at a nobody that didn't even do anything intrusive or disruptive? Wow. That is a new level of random hatred. You didn't even do anything creative with the insult. I'm wondering if you chose me at random just so you could have someone else to throw your hate at. Whoever you are, you need to calm down. Your insulting random people on a MLP fanfiction site. Go do something creative and further you existence.
So we're getting a new version of Scootaloo Dies a Bunch but with Spike this time? Sounds like fun. Even if it does make me miss Scootaloo Dies a Bunch even more...
You're the one who gave me similar beef when I had Luna refer to Spike as Dusk Shine's pet. Then you went a disliking spree where you disliked all the comments on that story.
You would think that Celestia would notice that Spike would be constantly dying and Twilight won't give a shit. I get that this story is comedic (and it is funny in a dark sort of way), but I get the feeling that Twilight should be using her logically brain on this. I'm not criticizing your story, It's humorous and good. The character's, other than Spike, just rub me the wrong way. I'll still read this just to laugh.
Actually, the story itself isn't meant to be taken seriously. As for Celestia, as it says in the description 'nobody notices'. Basically, Spike's gonna die... a lot... and no one is going to care.
I'm not criticizing your story, It's humorous and good. The character's, other than Spike, just rub me the wrong way.
7575473 I'm just putting my opinion out there. I'm still going to read this story (and this is coming from the guy who asked his parents if his grandmother was shacked up in the wackobasket [props for you if you get the reference]). This is your story, and it has me interested. Spike has already died twice, I'm looking forward to seeing the other 998 deaths.
7574393 I know who you are. You're that Spike fan who won't shut the fuck up about your femdom fetish. You're incredibly sensitive when it comes to him, like you think he's your family. How cute. Do us all a favor, and leave the fandom forever. This place would be a lot better without idiotic Spike fans like you. After all, the show IS called My Little Pony, and not My Little Dragon.
Tl;Dr: You're a stupid Spike fan like all the others who should get the fuck out.
Guys, don't feed Swashbucklist. He's a sterling example of the Spike zealots in our community. Raving lunatics who attack anyone who doesn't worship Spike as some sort of hero-god (I have received death threats from these people), bitches about Hasbro not making Spike a screen-hogging main character, and generally trolls any story that could have conceivably featured Spike and chose not to because he wasn't important to the story.
7574488 You're right. I suppose between this author and its "friend," there's only enough humanity for one person.
7574520 So much hate for such a small thing. If you don't like this story, or the friend I dedicated it too, then please, by all means don't stick around. Just 'x' out of the window and go find a story you do like. Oh, a feel free to leave a dislike on the story too, if that would make you feel better.
However, if you continue to insult the readers, as well as anonpencil, I'm afraid I'm going to have to block you. I don't mind you insulting me or the story, but please, don't insult my friends.
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Thanks bruh, but no worries! Some people just hate me, and that's ok, really it is. Do what you want to do with your readers and this story, of course.
7574537 Very well. I shall insult the "story." As a matter of fact, I'll improve it:
That's better.
I came here for a comedy story, and I get this... I regret nothing
I suppose, seeing as it is written as a gift to anonpencil(no offense here, just the kind of stuff he writes is gross imo), how the story is presented and all the other tags except "comedy" I should have seen this coming, but hey, I'm not known for my insight
Not sure yet if I like it or no, only confusion so far, so neither up, nor down vote for now. Keep 'em coming dude
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No offense taken at all! I am kind of a little pretty gross.
7574393 Well, that was unnecessary. And rude, whatever did i do to you? I think you have a problem. Out of all the people who commented you chose little ol me? Why? I mean, I said nothing of value. I did it as a joke. It was the definition of a throwaway comment. I may not agree with the authors hatred of Spike but I support them for their creativity. Just wow. You really want to lash out at a nobody that didn't even do anything intrusive or disruptive? Wow. That is a new level of random hatred. You didn't even do anything creative with the insult. I'm wondering if you chose me at random just so you could have someone else to throw your hate at. Whoever you are, you need to calm down. Your insulting random people on a MLP fanfiction site. Go do something creative and further you existence.
I thought I was going to like it.... And turns out I was right. Can't wait for more!
7574393 Holy shit look at how fucking edgy you are.
I bet you main as Reaper.
The title of your story reminds me of this show.
Well.... This is a thing... that happened...
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Self-insert version Twilight, never you mind.
Kidding. Seriously though, it's just for the purpose of Spike suffering in this one case. Nothing more.
7574685 7574702 She hasn't gone to Ponyville yet, thus she had no friends and is a bitch.
7574680 There was an mlp parody that did that same concept, it was funny as hell.
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So we're getting a new version of Scootaloo Dies a Bunch but with Spike this time? Sounds like fun. Even if it does make me miss Scootaloo Dies a Bunch even more...
7574393
Hey, I remember you!
You're the one who gave me similar beef when I had Luna refer to Spike as Dusk Shine's pet. Then you went a disliking spree where you disliked all the comments on that story.
I find this to be both horrifying and a bit curious. Like watching a train wreck. You know it's going to end badly and yet you can't look away...
End of story, Celestia puts Twilight on trial for murder and sends her into exile forever.
I like it.
7575194 Patience, my friend. This is but the tip of the penis that will be jammed down FimFiction's throat. We have many, many more chapters to go.
WASTED
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Oooooh yes. There's many many more to go through. No need to rush, hehe.
>when a dragon gets fucking heartworms
WHAT IS THIS
You would think that Celestia would notice that Spike would be constantly dying and Twilight won't give a shit. I get that this story is comedic (and it is funny in a dark sort of way), but I get the feeling that Twilight should be using her logically brain on this. I'm not criticizing your story, It's humorous and good. The character's, other than Spike, just rub me the wrong way. I'll still read this just to laugh.
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Actually, the story itself isn't meant to be taken seriously. As for Celestia, as it says in the description 'nobody notices'. Basically, Spike's gonna die... a lot... and no one is going to care.
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Most characters will probably be OOC, just fyi.
7575473 I'm just putting my opinion out there. I'm still going to read this story (and this is coming from the guy who asked his parents if his grandmother was shacked up in the wackobasket [props for you if you get the reference]). This is your story, and it has me interested. Spike has already died twice, I'm looking forward to seeing the other 998 deaths.
THEY KILLED
KENNYSPIKE!7574393 I know who you are. You're that Spike fan who won't shut the fuck up about your femdom fetish. You're incredibly sensitive when it comes to him, like you think he's your family. How cute. Do us all a favor, and leave the fandom forever. This place would be a lot better without idiotic Spike fans like you. After all, the show IS called My Little Pony, and not My Little Dragon.
Tl;Dr: You're a stupid Spike fan like all the others who should get the fuck out.
Guys, don't feed Swashbucklist. He's a sterling example of the Spike zealots in our community. Raving lunatics who attack anyone who doesn't worship Spike as some sort of hero-god (I have received death threats from these people), bitches about Hasbro not making Spike a screen-hogging main character, and generally trolls any story that could have conceivably featured Spike and chose not to because he wasn't important to the story.
Just don't reply.
7575911 Sorry, but that one was too good to go unposted.
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Well, you're not wrong at all, so I can't shake a finger at you too hard.
7574869 So what you're saying is, he's a whiney little bh that can't stand anyone who likes what he doesn't.
7575202 Dat phrasing
7575770 Those bastards!
(how did no one respond to you yet?)
pounding on the door for hours? Sheesh dumby it was unlocked during business hours...
poor 'stiff dragon' I can really use another ponyquin for my display case.
I'd like to see Spike worm his way out of this.
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Wat...?
Is this whole story supposed to take place in the same timeline after the first chapter's spell happened?
Edit: Nevermind. The third chapter said it all.
I like this one of my least favorite mlp characters dies
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Le sex.