After feeling the sting of betrayal from her friends at the Canterlot Wedding, Twilight decides to leave Equestria altogether. Twenty years later, she will forge a new empire to combat an even greater foe.
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Interesting. I'll track this for now.
more PLz
I require more
7856459 tho I except all good criticism given, I must inform you that this chapter has been written specifically this way for a key part of the story. And I actually like Flashlight and yes it is moving fast for a reason.
7856985 Oops. I really need to not do this on my phone. its been edited so its legible now. Sorry 'bout that.
1st Nothing against FLashLight. It's just not a fave of mine.
2nd. Just some nitpicks I had. Sorry if I seemed overcritical, but the iodiotball is one of my greatest peeves.
That said this story still has my like.
7857293 I appreciate the critique, It helps me to be a better writer.
Next Chapter now!
How stupid could those certain ponies get?
Celestia said she raised Cadence. I mean, forget wedding stress. Shouldn't she had noticed her nieces aura has changed?
Rainbow Dash made it seem like Twilight was a selfish insane pony. I mean, she can overreact, but Rainbow Dash isn't perfect, as much she would like to believe to! After Mare Do Well and partially wrecking the Cake's entry, she really shouldn't be flattering herself.
Even worse, considering how they reacted, Twilight's Nightmare of being sent to the dungeon and Flash being exuceted seems likely, especially since they don't know they fought back. If she mentions that to them..
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That's a problem this story created with Twilight being able to sense a change in Cadance's magic aura. In the show, she couldn't. She just thought Cadance was rude and that's why she wanted to call off the wedding.
Now here, by giving Twilight this special skill, it makes everypony around her stupid for not noticing. I don't think it's a good change, much like with making Celestia stupidly lashing out when this Twilight actually has more evidence than canon!Twilight ever had. It makes things so blatantly one-sided, you know?
I feel less for Twilight and her group than in the episode now, mainly because the other side is made to look so stupid.
I forsee Rarity, Fluttershy and Flash being obvious ones to leave Equestria with Twilight. I am guessing Cadence will be as well as why would she stay with an aunt who obviously only pretends to know her niece and a stallion who chose a version of her that was a total bitch over his little sister. And likely Luna as someone is gonna need to bring that Book for Twilight to become an Alicorn.
I like the story so far, but I would suggest adding an Alternate Universe tag.
Wow, that is a wall of text up there.
But spelling and grammar issues aside, I think I'm okay with this idea.
This is going great. I can't wait to read what happens at the wedding.
7912907 the wait is almost over
Remove this part. What comes after is enough.
You rushed that way to quickly....
So far its going in the direction I want it to go! Onward!
Bridezilla! Good one Rarity!
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Okay yes it was rushed but to go out of the way to attack someone over what they like crosses a line.
"Are you sure you wanna stay alone with her, Twi?" Flash Sentry asked after the others left. "Cause If you don't, I coul-". Her lips made contact with his and within that moment the world was at peace, at least for the couple. Flash embraced the kiss, wrapping his forehooves around Twilight's lower back, savoring every moment of this erotic embrace. Out of breath, they parted while looking into each other's eyes, an intense fire burning deep. Flash was the first to speak, still lost in those lavender orbs. "Twilight, I love you."
The lavender unicorn blushed, looking up at her stallion, smiling at his declaration. "I love you too Flash, I've known it since I first laid eyes upon you."
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ONvr_pWH5Vg
2:29 worry not Doombringer069, i have a more.....permanent solution
Twilight's remaining "friends" and the princess has alot of apologizing to do after this is over, can't blame Shining Armor because he's in control, as for the Princess, well she is kinda being controlled but that's only because her negative feelings were forced out so she already felt anger to begin with, the only difference is that it wouldn't have been that bad, Twilight's other friends though don't have an excuse.