After feeling the sting of betrayal from her friends at the Canterlot Wedding, Twilight decides to leave Equestria altogether. Twenty years later, she will forge a new empire to combat an even greater foe.
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*stares at the new chapter and sings the halaluya chorus*
So Queen Chrysalis and Blueblood are reformed and turn against Blackhole, this is going to be interesting.
Maybe not, but that doesn't mean that they'll bow to you!!!
All to go against the likes of you!!!
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You sick bastard....
...than to lose to a creature like YOU!!!
He never said that Twilight....
Exactly, because all that will do is make him win!!!
Maybe so, but Flash is still your mate Twi, so it falls upon him Just as much.
Sorry Twilight, but Flash ain't gonna let you do this alone...you two are in this together, whether you like it or not.
Exactly!
Cause all that'll to is lead you to loss....
Truer words have never been spoke!!!
That is some messed up shit there Blackhole.
Interesting to learn who Chrysalis really is, to think it was Cinch.
I can say I am so happy that you have returned and updated this wonderful story.
Why did I find this line so cheese? Meh, I don't know, but I'm glad this story has been updated. I'm really excited about the final battle between Twilight and Voidheart.
Looks like BLUEBLOOD finally saw the LIGHT.
So far so good.
*skims through to chapter 5*
AU recap, AU recap, literal lecture of a backstory, ok so the story branches off here...
*jumps to chapter 16*
Wait what? Am I reading the same story?
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Do your research about royal titles. Under all Emperors and Empresses, there are Duchesses and Dukes as well as other royal titles. Twilight is an Empress and as such she rules over a continent. With a continent, their are smaller principalities beneath her that govern their people but still have to answer to her. As for my editing, you come here reading and instead of messaging me directly and pointing out my mistake, you merely critique every flipping thing you come by. You should be aware that even the greatest makes mistakes. It is people like you that demotivates my drive to continue this story.
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First of all, I am not critiquing every little mistake, just pointing out a few small ones. Secondly, I was not trying to insult you or get you unmotivated, I was just trying to help. Thirdly I love, Love mid evil ages so I know all about duchesses and dukes, I was just curios as to why there are so many, because kings and queens didn't appoint every major person as a duke, only those who had earned it.
*Edit*
I admit, I could have worded my previous comments better and I'm sorry.
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You do realize that at the beginning of the story the author tells us that Crissy is AC, right?
Emperial Star I for one am finding this story an incredible read, it is therefore distressing to hear that people are demotivating you from continuing this story.
Constructive criticism is always helpful and I hope people stick to being constructive. But the way I see it websites for writers are not for people to read stories on thats just an added benefit. No I believe they are for people to have an outlet for their creativity! Small errors should never stop that. If your story is good and well constructed most people don't even notice errors.
Don't let other people dampen your creativity keep writing because I can safely say that your creativity is appreciated.
And I heard a good piece of advice! If you need to check for errors put a chunk of text into google translate and get it to read it out loud its much easier to listen for errors than to comb through text for it.
“Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned.” -Some random dude from centuries ago
Cortes, you are absolutely screwed. Ain’t shit you can do.
Can't wait to read the next chapter
This story is incredibly primitive so far, though I like the premise, the first chapter needs some serious work shopping.
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You and me both😆
this is an interesting fan fiction and i hope its not dead because i would like to read more of this if more comes out
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It's not dead. Just on hiatus till the other chapters are through.
This is a great story : ) hope more is coming.
Hey currently on Chapter Checkmate 1 and I have to say although I am not a Twilight x Flash Sentry shipper, (those first few parts were really difficult for me to read), this story is really good!!!!!!!!! It's just starting to get very exciting and great. I saw your blog post and feel sad about what happened to you. Bullying isn't nice I know that first hand. I could write a lot about how things will get better etc. but I can't say that things will be better. But I can say that I enjoy your story and beg you not to delete it better would be if you could continue it but after what happened I wouldn't want to continue something that only gets hate either but pleas don't delete it
What does on hiatus mean
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Hiatus means stopped but may be resumed later.
Please more!!!
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Well more might come should I see the support.
To be honest I've been writing my own book, slowly filling it with action packed scenes, love, drama,
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This comment is old but golden. And yes, I'm editing a chapter to upload, may upload within three days.