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Shadows and Stars

Celestia has invited Twilight and her friends to Canterlot, but as stories unfold, the Mane 6 are left with more mysteries and strange occurances than they could ever think possible.

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VDtheBrony

VDtheBrony #1 · Jun 26th, 2012 · · ·

This is my first shot at a fanfic, so please leave constructive criticism if any

Midnight Magician

Midnight Magician #2 · Jun 26th, 2012 · · ·

Wow, your first fic, eh?

I'll admit, I'm thoroughly impressed! Your story has a lot of substance, that is, there's enough going on and the characters are all well represented. Uhm, there were some spelling errors and blah, blah, blah. But nopony that matters will really care about mistakes that minor. I liked your story. I liked it, and favorited it. One more thing. You should definitely get some cover art for this piece. I mean, I'll admit that a LOT of readers will overlook a story without art! Those foals!

Real quick... Why does Snoop Dawg carry an umbrella???? Fo drizzle!

VDtheBrony

VDtheBrony #3 · Jun 26th, 2012 · · ·

814890 yeah, first fic. next chapter I'm working on right now. I lost my journal where I'd written up a rough copy of this and working off memory.
The art though, may be a problem. I'm still fairly new to deviant art and its very problematic. I have a great Idea for it but right now its not coming out quite right

great to know that nobody's hated it yet

Neverwinter