So many questions, so many opportunities, so much potential... I can't wait to see where this goes and whether or not my predictions and preferences are real
Firstly, I hope that they find that group of dragons that did this. We know they have names of at least one of them, Goliath (the red one--thank God that you decided with a OC instead of Garble when you said a red dragon). Hell, even have Ember and Torch find out about what happened to Spike. Go easy on Amethyst, I think that she did have some feeling for Spike even if ultimately it was all a farce. Goliath needs to take care of his mates better, then he wouldn't have that kind of scenario that she dates another dragon just to make him jealous and want her back.
Secondly, I have to say it because I'm a fanatic of Sparity, so bitch at me if you want for this. Just remember, I know already first hand that Rarity's with someone else, and Spike was with someone else before the beat down, so I already knew Sparity wasn't happening. Here goes: Rarity didn't see nothing romantic happening between her and Spike enough that she hooked up with some random unicorn stallion, but cares about Spike in a family sort of matter that she's willing to KILL her friend's ex---Damn... Part of me would be thinking 'You're such a f------g hyprocrite Rarity' but another part of me says "WAY TO GO!! Do you need an accomplice"
Related to that, I have a feeling that even though Celestia and Luna are trying their hardest to prevent what could be seen as a possible act of war because I'm pretty sure at least three of them are comtemplating violent gory murder and overkill to send a message--which could easily be answered by a bunch of dragons going after Canterlot in retaliation, some sort of retribution has to be done.
Finally, Spike you are a damn dragon. It may take a bit of time, but you better recover stronger than ever. Whatever creature that earns the right to be Spike's special somecreature has to be someone that you have to hang on to---probably ain't too few of mates with that kind of fotitude these days.
....just leave out the possible "Prince" stigma so you don't get a golddigger...
7456675 for example: How did he meet the dragoness? What's his connection with the princesses? Is he going to see her again? and if so, is he going to forgive her and her drakefriend, or is he going to take revenge on/justly punish them? and a lot more, but I assume you're going to go into those kinds of details as the story goes on.
Firstly, I hope that they find that group of dragons that did this.
Blood will be shed!
We know they have names of at least one of them, Goliath (the red one--thank God that you decided with a OC instead of Garble when you said a red dragon)
To tell you the truth, Garble wasn't even a thought in my mind until you brought him him just now. lol
Go easy on Amethyst
No
I think that she did have some feeling for Spike even if ultimately it was all a farce
No she didn't. She's evil. Blood will be shed.
I have to say it because I'm a fanatic of Sparity, so bitch at me if you want for this. Just remember, I know already first hand that Rarity's with someone else, and Spike was with someone else before the beat down, so I already knew Sparity wasn't happening
I'm not gonna attack you for liking a pairing I don't.......I'm not THAT kind of brony.
Rarity didn't see nothing romantic happening between her and Spike enough that she hooked up with some random unicorn stallion, but cares about Spike in a family sort of matter that she's willing to KILL her friend's ex---Damn..... Part of me would be thinking 'You're such a f------g hypocrite Rarity'
Well here's the thing.....Rarity loves Spike just not in that way, she knew how Spike felt about her so she probably explained to him that that there was no way they could be together because of the eight year age gap.(Spike 13, Rarity 21 at that time) She let him down gently.
but another part of me says "WAY TO GO!! Do you need an accomplice
I think she has more than enough
Related to that, I have a feeling that even though Celestia and Luna are trying their hardest to prevent what could be seen as a possible act of war because I'm pretty sure at least three of them are contemplating violent gory murder and overkill
You have no idea my friend....no idea.
which could easily be answered by a bunch of dragons going after Canterlot in retaliation
I know a story where Spike nearly killed someone for talking to his girlfriend. And the readers where eating it up. Saying how great a boyfriend Spike was and how kind it was that he only nearly killed the other guy. This approach here is much more realistic.
8598849 God, that was more than a year ago by now. I don't even remember which girl Spike had there, just that someone talked to her and Spike beat him nearly to death for it. You were supposed to root for him for that.
*Chapter starts off with the GGG* Okay, weird we're starting here, but alright. Not the weirdest place to start, but still.
*Problems starting immediately with Spike being injured* Well fuck me running, stupid decision on the other party's part, since Spike not only has Twilight to back him up, but also the rest of the mane six, the Royal Guards, the Lunar Guards, Celestia, Luna, Cadence, Shining Armor, and the Crystal Guards as well. Still though, he is weak enough to be at a point of being almost defenseless. I mean, what cannon fighting skills does he have? He lives in a town of peace, no dojos, no areas for sparing, not even local guards.
*Seeing the hopeless situation Spike has been thrusted into* I just want to find whoever did this to him and skullfuck them with my stiletto, as much as we dislike Cannon Spike we don't want harm to come to the little drake. I still have my Dealbreaker Warhammer, spines will snap like twigs.
*Followed by getting saved just in the nick of time* Oh thank god, someone realized what was up and came to help. Now we'll get to see more and possibly find out who did this.
*Scene cutting to Twi and OC getting done with "activities" and Pinkie almost pounding down the door* Hmm, interesting, maybe a mainstay in this collection of stories? Thankfully Pinkie's loudness did some good. For once in her life, she was useful to the plot.
*Transitioning to the Hospital and seeing Spike medically comatose* Good lord, you know what fuck the Stiletto, I'm breaking out my Chinese War Sword, these fucks deserve what's coming to them. Looks like i'm Breaking Out my Dual Deviled Blades, You fucked with the wrong Drake.
*Realizing Blueblood isn't a cunt in this story and actually wants to help with new magic* That's a fuckin' first, finally got your head out your ass bluey? Looks like he served some time as a soldier, the only thing that will break entitled little shits like him.
*Realizing what Spike went through* *Silence* *Silence* *Takes a deep breath, then screams* I"LL SKULLFUCK THOSE MOTHERFUCKING CUNTS! YOU ALL WILL SERVE YOUR TIME IN THE LOWEST REACHES OF THE UNDERWORLD YOU MOTHER FUCKING SHITBAGS! *Takes a deep breath, then says calmly* You three will never, never, see the light of day again, till the day you die, you will be locked in the pits of the underworld.
*Aftermath of the girls finding out and their reactions to it* Pretty goddamn accurate to how a group of friends and family would react to seeing their youngest member getting toyed with and tossed away like last week's trash. Honestly, if any of our friends or family were in this situation, tis be our exact reaction to the realization that they were hurt like this.
*Realizing that Celestia is the fucking voice of reason and trying to calm the tides of anger* Damn, don't think i've seen many fics where Celestia is the voice of reason, It's normally Twilight that is the voice of Reason. Celestia i'm guessing is pissed that her Surrogate son is pissed, but she has a better way time of curbing her anger for later use.
*Final Thoughts on CH1* Looking good so far, such a good hooking point, can't wait to see more! We hope to see more great work like this.
9645310 Hey CrimsonFucker, are you the same CF from Hellsing Ultimate abridged? If so, I loved what you wrote, it was hilarious. If not the same, no harm done. Still, I love what you did with the 2 different points of view about what happened in the first chapter.
I'll follow it. Sounds interesting.
Please Tell me those dragons will be Punished!
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Spoilers
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I'll take that as a maybe I read fics liekt his and the guilty party never gets it. Why..I no idea.
So many questions, so many opportunities, so much potential... I can't wait to see where this goes and whether or not my predictions and preferences are real
Firstly, I hope that they find that group of dragons that did this. We know they have names of at least one of them, Goliath (the red one--thank God that you decided with a OC instead of Garble when you said a red dragon). Hell, even have Ember and Torch find out about what happened to Spike. Go easy on Amethyst, I think that she did have some feeling for Spike even if ultimately it was all a farce. Goliath needs to take care of his mates better, then he wouldn't have that kind of scenario that she dates another dragon just to make him jealous and want her back.
Secondly, I have to say it because I'm a fanatic of Sparity, so bitch at me if you want for this. Just remember, I know already first hand that Rarity's with someone else, and Spike was with someone else before the beat down, so I already knew Sparity wasn't happening. Here goes: Rarity didn't see nothing romantic happening between her and Spike enough that she hooked up with some random unicorn stallion, but cares about Spike in a family sort of matter that she's willing to KILL her friend's ex---Damn... Part of me would be thinking 'You're such a f------g hyprocrite Rarity' but another part of me says "WAY TO GO!! Do you need an accomplice"
Related to that, I have a feeling that even though Celestia and Luna are trying their hardest to prevent what could be seen as a possible act of war because I'm pretty sure at least three of them are comtemplating violent gory murder and overkill to send a message--which could easily be answered by a bunch of dragons going after Canterlot in retaliation, some sort of retribution has to be done.
Finally, Spike you are a damn dragon. It may take a bit of time, but you better recover stronger than ever. Whatever creature that earns the right to be Spike's special somecreature has to be someone that you have to hang on to---probably ain't too few of mates with that kind of fotitude these days.
....just leave out the possible "Prince" stigma so you don't get a golddigger...
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Questions? What questions? Do tell
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for example:
How did he meet the dragoness?
What's his connection with the princesses?
Is he going to see her again? and if so, is he going to forgive her and her drakefriend, or is he going to take revenge on/justly punish them?
and a lot more, but I assume you're going to go into those kinds of details as the story goes on.
If I was in Spike's place I'd want every single one of the dragons skinned alive. Then maybe rip out their entrails and strangle them with them.
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Blood will be shed!
To tell you the truth, Garble wasn't even a thought in my mind until you brought him him just now. lol
No
No she didn't. She's evil. Blood will be shed.
I'm not gonna attack you for liking a pairing I don't.......I'm not THAT kind of brony.
Well here's the thing.....Rarity loves Spike just not in that way, she knew how Spike felt about her so she probably explained to him that that there was no way they could be together because of the eight year age gap.(Spike 13, Rarity 21 at that time) She let him down gently.
I think she has more than enough
You have no idea my friend....no idea.
Hope they have a good health plan
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I'll leave you with this then....Blood will be shed.
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Damn man
You know what's funny?
I know a story where Spike nearly killed someone for talking to his girlfriend. And the readers where eating it up. Saying how great a boyfriend Spike was and how kind it was that he only nearly killed the other guy. This approach here is much more realistic.
This is totally f***ed up. I wonder how Luna is going to stop Rainbow Dash?
DAMN! Those Sons of bitches!!! I been called first dibs to anyone who hurt Spike.
Target the Dragon lands, single reactor, you may fire when ready.
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Nice reference
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what story is this?
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God, that was more than a year ago by now. I don't even remember which girl Spike had there, just that someone talked to her and Spike beat him nearly to death for it. You were supposed to root for him for that.
*Chapter starts off with the GGG*
Okay, weird we're starting here, but alright.
Not the weirdest place to start, but still.
*Problems starting immediately with Spike being injured*
Well fuck me running, stupid decision on the other party's part, since Spike not only has Twilight to back him up, but also the rest of the mane six, the Royal Guards, the Lunar Guards, Celestia, Luna, Cadence, Shining Armor, and the Crystal Guards as well.
Still though, he is weak enough to be at a point of being almost defenseless. I mean, what cannon fighting skills does he have? He lives in a town of peace, no dojos, no areas for sparing, not even local guards.
*Seeing the hopeless situation Spike has been thrusted into*
I just want to find whoever did this to him and skullfuck them with my stiletto, as much as we dislike Cannon Spike we don't want harm to come to the little drake.
I still have my Dealbreaker Warhammer, spines will snap like twigs.
*Followed by getting saved just in the nick of time*
Oh thank god, someone realized what was up and came to help.
Now we'll get to see more and possibly find out who did this.
*Scene cutting to Twi and OC getting done with "activities" and Pinkie almost pounding down the door*
Hmm, interesting, maybe a mainstay in this collection of stories? Thankfully Pinkie's loudness did some good.
For once in her life, she was useful to the plot.
*Transitioning to the Hospital and seeing Spike medically comatose*
Good lord, you know what fuck the Stiletto, I'm breaking out my Chinese War Sword, these fucks deserve what's coming to them.
Looks like i'm Breaking Out my Dual Deviled Blades, You fucked with the wrong Drake.
*Realizing Blueblood isn't a cunt in this story and actually wants to help with new magic*
That's a fuckin' first, finally got your head out your ass bluey?
Looks like he served some time as a soldier, the only thing that will break entitled little shits like him.
*Realizing what Spike went through*
*Silence*
*Silence*
*Takes a deep breath, then screams* I"LL SKULLFUCK THOSE MOTHERFUCKING CUNTS! YOU ALL WILL SERVE YOUR TIME IN THE LOWEST REACHES OF THE UNDERWORLD YOU MOTHER FUCKING SHITBAGS!
*Takes a deep breath, then says calmly* You three will never, never, see the light of day again, till the day you die, you will be locked in the pits of the underworld.
*Aftermath of the girls finding out and their reactions to it*
Pretty goddamn accurate to how a group of friends and family would react to seeing their youngest member getting toyed with and tossed away like last week's trash.
Honestly, if any of our friends or family were in this situation, tis be our exact reaction to the realization that they were hurt like this.
*Realizing that Celestia is the fucking voice of reason and trying to calm the tides of anger*
Damn, don't think i've seen many fics where Celestia is the voice of reason, It's normally Twilight that is the voice of Reason.
Celestia i'm guessing is pissed that her Surrogate son is pissed, but she has a better way time of curbing her anger for later use.
*Final Thoughts on CH1*
Looking good so far, such a good hooking point, can't wait to see more!
We hope to see more great work like this.
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Ha you know it’s a good story when the fans of said story are threatening to kill a fictional character in said story
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Hey CrimsonFucker, are you the same CF from Hellsing Ultimate abridged? If so, I loved what you wrote, it was hilarious. If not the same, no harm done. Still, I love what you did with the 2 different points of view about what happened in the first chapter.