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Octavia and Vinyl Can't Club

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A celebratory night out is threatened by Vinyl's ineptitude, a bouncer's intense resolve, and the fact that Octavia is a total lightweight.

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Diamond Sparkle

Diamond Sparkle #1 · Dec 16th, 2015 · · ·

Very well written and interesting.

TwilightUCrazy

TwilightUCrazy #2 · Dec 16th, 2015 · · ·

It's not Vinyltavia, but it reads well. Nicely done. I can't think of any criticisms.

Jake Witt

Jake Witt #3 · Dec 16th, 2015 · · ·

Not bad. I thought Tavi would slurr more, but what you did was better.

V: "Tavi, you had waaay too much to drink."
O: "You hurt me now, but I Won't cry! I am Octaaaviahhh!"
V: "Octavia? Octavia!"
O: "Yeeeeaaaahhh! Yeeeaaah!"

ViceCityFTW

ViceCityFTW #4 · Dec 16th, 2015 · · ·

So,lemme get this straight. Ponies go to hell "Tartarus" to drink? Well, I'm done with this shit

rosebug

rosebug #5 · Dec 20th, 2015 · · ·

I really enjoyed this story, Octavia and Vinyls friendship was really fleshed out and Vinyl's dialogue made me laugh at points, but I especially enjoyed reading Octavia's thought process while she was drunk. I especially enjoyed the bathroom scene, it was probably the most realistic (and familiar) drunken moments I've read in a while.

Nice job!