Right off the bat, I can see that you are telling us, not showing us the story.

It felt like I was reading a transcript for a play, rather than the visceral action of lasers and bullets fired everywhere.

6490381 So I need more detail? More descriptions for what the characters are doing/saying/thinking, right?
Also thank you for your comment and input.

Slow down a bit. The idea is good but you are kinda pushing it rather than letting it flow on its own accord. Also, you must remember that the Wanderer has seen some serious shit and probably wouldn't come to except the talking horses that are friendly so quick.

6686578 Thanks you the advice. I did realize awhile after posting these that I was pushing it and needed to slow down. The reason I did that was because I wrote the story (almost to completion) a while ago, then didn't like it so I restarted. I'm currently reworking the first few chapters and I'm gonna try and make myself slow down. As for the Wanderer not trusting the friendly pastel talking horses, I've got something in mind for that.