Chapter 21: Accident
I groaned quietly and cupped a hand to my forehead, breathing deeply. “God dammit...” I muttered softly as my head ached slightly and my stomach felt like utter shit. Two days in a row of waking up with a hangover probably wasn’t one of the smartest things I’ve ever done...then again there had been plenty of things I’ve done in the past that weren’t smart. Not only that, had it been two days in a row? Being down in the vault with Reynolds made it hard to tell time, and I couldn't exactly see a clock through my shut eyes.
I gritted my teeth and whimpered slightly as I opened my eyes, sighing with relief the lights in the room were partially dim. Looking about my surroundings through my blurry vision, I could see that I was lying on the couch in the recreation room. A few bottles of whiskey were scattered about along with a shirt draped over one of the chairs and my bra laid on the floor in front of me along with my panties...
“The fuck?” I blinked and sat up, my mind sobering up rather quickly as I noticed I was completely naked. Gulping nervously I caught on to a rather peculiar taste of something bitter in my mouth, I groaned as I reached over and snatched a bottle off the ground and gazed into my reflection, my hair was a complete mess and my face looked completely exhausted. I reached up and touched my face and flinched a bit as I was shocked with tingles, my eyes widened and I dropped the bottle...I knew exactly what had happened.
“I got laid...” I muttered softly to myself, the symptoms I was feeling, these tingles, sudden tiredness, let alone the fact I was messy and my clothes were scattered all about the place. I had just got fucking laid and by the looks of it...I probably enjoyed every second of it but, how the...why the?
I covered my face and let off a groan, suddenly I felt so embarrassed and ashamed. “I fucking got laid by a thousand year old man!” I moaned into my hands. “A fucking man!” I repeated as I shook my head as I suddenly felt like crying.
‘Maybe you were raped?’ The darker half of my conscience suggested.
I shook my head. “No, that’s stupid. Reynolds wouldn’t do that and he’s old as shit, he can barely even go up steps.” I muttered as I shifted on the couch, my exhausted body tingling due to my overly sensitive nerves, usually caused by a strong climax.
‘That doesn’t mean anything, you were drunk,’ Dark Chloe said and I glanced over to see her in the doorway.
“Yeah but...we both were,” I said softly, utterly ashamed.
Dark Chloe snorted and shook her head before tossing my bra to me, I grabbed it and put it on before walking/stumbling over to get my shirt. ‘Then why are you beating yourself up if there’s nothing wrong?’
I bit my lip and immediately pulled a lame excuse out of my own ass. “Because I’m a lesbian and...well...” My teeth gnashed my lip a little harder. “He’s old.” Dark Chloe snorted once more before falling into a fit of laughter.
‘Really, now? That’s why you’re so upset, have you’ve forgotten you’re the last chick on Earth?’ My darker half chided. ‘Listen to yourself, girl, you’re not going to be able to fuck another girl’s brains out for the rest of your life.’ I opened my mouth to retort but stopped when she continued, ‘Not only that, maybe you could help the human race by...I dunno, getting pregnant and having a real kid.’ I flinched at that and bit my lip the thought of Reynolds releasing inside me sent a serious shiver up my spine, I quickly snatched my shirt up and pulled it on, only to stop when I felt something really sticky latch onto the shirt halfway down my back.
Dark Chloe grinned wildly at me from by the refrigerator, how’d she get over there? ‘I guess we’ve got some kind of cum back story.’ I could feel my cheeks become a vibrant red as I threw my shirt off and shook my head.
“SHUT UP!” I cried out at my conscience, my heart unable to take her words any longer. “Just shut up and get the fuck out of my life!”
The other Chloe continued to laugh before starting to walk over me. ‘Sorry, sexy, I can’t really do that~’ she purred.
“Please, just go away!” I whined as I clenched my fist and began to look around for my panties, my breathing escalating as I realized I couldn’t remember where they were.
‘I wonder how Reynolds is doing?’ I felt her voice sneer right into my ear.
I shook my head. “Shut up...” I muttered softly as I clutched a hand between my breasts, my eyes shifted left and right, I couldn’t find those damn panties.
‘He probably enjoyed it greatly~’
“Shut up.” I felt tears rolling down my cheeks, where the fuck were they?!
‘I bet he’s writing all about it in his diary—’
“SHUT THE FUCK UP—!” I whirled around towards the door and screamed, only to stop when I saw Reynolds looking at me with wide eyes, suddenly, as if my body went on autopilot, I started to march towards him.
“Chloe, wh-who are you talking—” The back of my hand connected with the side of Reynold’s head, my knuckles colliding with his temple. Reynolds eyes, for a brief moment, widened in shock before rolling back as he fell to the floor.
For a few moments I remained standing over the man’s body, my chest rising and falling as I was overwhelmed with anger. As my actions finally caught up with me, my heart began to race madly as my eyes suddenly filled with tears. Covering my mouth, I felt as if I was going to hyperventilate. “Oh shit, fuck, fuck!” I dropped to my knees and shook Reynolds. “James, James!” The man didn’t respond, his eyes were closed and his body was motionless. I stood up and hugged myself with my arms and glanced wildly around the room, not knowing what to do. “What do I do?!” At this point I was openly sobbing, my voice barely even audible.
‘Good job, you killed the only other human on the planet,' Dark Chloe said as she rolled her eyes.
“SHUT UP!” I screamed and cried loudly.
She rolled her eyes once more. ‘Well, at least this time it is your fault.”
I responded by dropping to my knees and sobbing loudly.
‘So much for the possibility of getting laid again.’ Dark Chloe walked over to me and kicked me with her foot. ‘Hey, dumbass, you should at least go get ahold of someone...or somepony, whatever the fuck they say.’
She was right, take deep breaths. I pushed myself up and glanced towards where her voice was coming from. Except...she wasn’t there, yet my panties were. Right in front of the couch where I woke up. Biting my tongue I snatched the underwear and ran out of the room without even throwing them on.
:[-]:
I stumbled and sobbed through the castle with only my shirt on. Constantly stopping at every pony to ask them for help, yet like always, they ran away. As if I was some kind of monster looking to kill them or something. “Please, M-my friend!” I reached out towards a maid who quickly scurried away from me, covering my face I dropped to my knees and began to sob once more.
‘Maybe if you’d actually put on a pair of pants, they’ll at least attempt to talk to you...’ Dark Chloe tsked and shook her head.
“Shut up...please...” I said between sobs, I wiped the tears away from my eyes with my wrist and whimpered softly.
“Chloe?” I heard a familiar voice of a mare behind me, I turned and gasped when I saw Twilight looking at me concerned.
“A-are you talking to...yourself again?” The alicorn asked nervously as she approached me slowly.
I flinched and shook my head. “N-no...” I sniffed and wiped my eyes once more, I knew they were puffy and red, especially due to the irritation from constantly rubbing them.
Twilight seemed to not question my response and instead changed the subject, “Are you okay?”
I responded with a shake of my head, but then quickly perked up and reached out to Twilight, who in turn dashed back. I immediately retracted my hand. “I-I need your help,” I whispered softly, Twilight blinked and softened her body relaxing before giving me a concerned look once more.
“What’s wrong, Chloe?” She asked me while also staying out of arm's reach, it was as if she was treating me like some kind of wild animal.
“I-It’s Reynolds, I hurt him...and he won’t get up.” I covered my face once more and began to sob, within seconds I felt Twilight come to my side.
“Wh-where is he? Take me to him,” Twilight said and I felt myself being pulled up so I was standing.
I nodded my head. “He’s back...i-in th-the vault.” I continued to rub my eyes, Twilight’s magic enveloped my other arm and I felt her pulling me along like a lost child. “W-we were just relaxing...h-having some drinks, I-I blacked out and...” I decided to leave out the sex bit and instead said, “He came in and startled me and I hit him.”
Twilight shook her head. “You need to be more careful,” she muttered as we headed towards the stairwell leading into the cave. As we traveled down the steps, I couldn't help but feel very alone, and I found myself wishing both Quartz and Crystal were here. Even though I only knew them for a short bit, I just...had a feeling that the two of them would know how to cheer me up.
Yet they weren’t here… In fact, I had no idea where they were. I recall Crystal left to go deal with her money issues, and Quartz...she just left without telling me where she went.
The two friends who helped me the most weren’t here, and once again I felt like I was truly hopeless.
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Hope y'all had fun with this one folks. I helped with an edit pass.
7801079 Ahha! That is right, I forgot to list you with my editors!
Uh oh...
7801081 You evil heretic. How could you?!?!
7801093 No! Please, forgive me! In the name of the God Emperor himself, I updated the description!
7801099 Good. Good!
On a more serious note, I do hope Dark Chloe is brought to the light soon... I get the feeling she's a Nightmare, or something akin to one.
7801121 Or Chloe is just mentally unstable and or crazy...maybe both
7801123 That's basically what happened to Luna... She went bat shit cray-cray!
7801124
Unlike Luna, she's not going to end the world with magic no matter how crazy she gets... although she could do some serious damage if she put her mind to it.
7801224 True. Of course, this just could be related to her monthly cycle...
well shit.
7801123 Dark Chloe threw Chloe a bra, seems hard for that to be imagined since she them put it on. Unless she really is going that crazy, which would put every action we've seeninto question, and this doesn't feel that kind of story. So I'll echo others and assume it's some form of Nightmare.
7801325
Why would it put it into question?
She may have saw Chloe throw her a bra but in reality went and picked it up.
So, in summary both of the remaining humans are insane.
So now Dark Chloe can interact with physical objects? O.o
7802180 uhm, looks like that nanites are making her darker form real maybe??
I'm starting to wonder whether Chloe ever actually woke up. Maybe she's still in her cocoon... In a changeling hive.
Don't be too worried about frequent updates. Readers tend to be patient. The fact that you're trying too hard to get these out quickly really shows in this chapter. It just doesn't work at its current length. It feels incomplete. You should've waited and published it after you could add more-- perhaps combining it with the next one.
If anything happens to Reynolds, I hope Chloe does find other humans to procreate with...if she's not pregnant already.
7802431 I was thinking a minor Nightmare, maybe.
Oh great more crazy human girl...
seriously its about time someone put a jacket on this bitch and put her where she belongs before she kills someone (if she hasn't already).
Chloe should really get some help with that 'dark side' of hers. It's actually made her hurt someone already. It can only go worse from there if she won't confide in someone. Not just a quick one, a full explanation.
7804744 It looks to me like the nanite plague was designed to "uplift" non-sapient animals to sapience, but when a pre-existing sapient is infected the result is death. For some reason, it supposedly killed fish as well, but there are fish in Equestria in canon, so I can't figure that part out.
...Or for that matter, why the nanites didn't do anything to Chloe... Except maybe make her more susceptible to insanity. That young lady is a danger to herself and all those around her.
Anyway, that makes the MLP:FIM ponies artificially-uplifted ponies of the future.
Welp, Chloe has killed Reynolds
That would've been true if it weren't for her clone daughter and the Remnants...
And now she misses her two best friends. Wonder if they'll have a bigger role in the story soon..?
7801429
Or, thanks to Chloe's immunity to the SOL virus (aka, magic), maybe she can subconsciously manage to tap into it from time to time, allowing Dark Chloe to actually interact with the world around her in a minimal fashion? Telekinesis is something that's REALLY easy for even the weakest of unicorn casters in the show.
(An unlikely outcome of events, but not entirely impossible based on what we know so far...)
7811598 SOL virus.... shit out of luck virus?
7822359
The virus that killed everyone and destroyed the human world in this fic is called the "SOL virus".
7822519 i know, i was making a joke about it
7824706 Indeed I am fellow Warboy
7825780 Death and isolation fucks people up.
For Chloe she had literally lost everything and the possibility of having any "human" friends had gone out the window. As for the date she just chose to write the date of the burial.
7843236
I know, I know.
I just hate the thought of humanity just being dead. At least leave a super computer with all our history and knowledge in it to leave for the next species, you know?
I think to much. Lol
7843334 They do have two super computers there's Glenn and Stephanie.
Wow. They were right in front of her, too.
I'm really starting to wonder what purpose "dark chloe" serves. So far the "hallucinations" have done nothing for the story aside from force it forward in awkward lurches with little rhyme or reason. It adds nothing to the narrative aside from being a voice that says things and makes Chloe angry...
7871643 It's to show that Chloe is mentally broken and not all there. Dark Chloe is there to show that she is always questioning herself and is torn completely asunder and one half of her has completely given up while the other strives to move on. That's what she's brought.
7872225
In other words, things you could have showed through the narrative. Show us her self doubts, her guilt. Let us look into her head and see how she is. Have her argue with herself (not a "Dark Chloe", but simply her own thoughts).
Everything that Dark Chloe has "brought" to the story could be more efficiently be presented to the reader through the narrative. You don't let us see Chloe and put the pieces together, to come to the conclusion that she's still deeply marked by everything. You spoonfeed it to us through this "Dark Chloe" who acts as a Talking Head: A character there with the purpose to give information, and nothing more (bad thing, btw).
Show is the conflict Within Chloe. Show us how she's battling with her own demons, rather than simplify it as one Chuckling and Smiling Chloe (You use "Smiled" and "Chuckled" far more than is appropriate if you ask me) versus Pessimistic and Perverted Chloe. DC (dark chloe) acts like someone who finds it entertaining to make fun of CSC (chuckling & smiling chloe), not her doubts and guilts made manifest.
I can sum up my problems with DC like this.
1 - She serves no obvious purpose aside from being a Talking Head.
2 - The purpose she is supposed to serve and what DC is can be better explored by looking at Chloe's mind as a whole, rather then look at two "halves" of the whole from the outside. Remember it's not DC vs CSC, but Chloe vs Chloe. She's fighting herself, so show us that fight. Not some alleged manifistation of "guilt and doubt" making fun of CSC.
3 - The purpose she's supposed to serve is different from how she is portrayed (guilt and doubt does not equal perverted humour and malicious joy from making fun of CSC).
7873439
Have you been read the story?
Jokes aside. I honestly don't fully agree with you here, Chloe has been doing all of that since the beginning. (Battling her inner thoughts and so on.)
DC has only been appearing when Chloe is actually starting to show signs of snapping via hallucinations. It could be implied here that Chloe is starting to suffer signs of schizophrenia or any other form of disorders that induces hallucinations. She's always paranoid, questioning herself and now also seeing hallucinations of a darker half of herself that berates her and makes herself feel even worse.
In the end it may seem that DC is just hear to be a talking head but for all we know she could be something more.
7873834
What you call "battling her inner thoughts" is obviously different from my idea of it. I've been following this story since the beginning, and I don't feel like there's a lot of us seeing her thoughts. It's mostly just you telling us what's happening. Show vs Tell and all that.
Regardless, I think you (and the story) would benefit if you try to read up on writing styles and so. The whole Show vs Tell thing. That is not meant to be an insult, but simply a piece of advice.
7947277
Yep, it's dead.
That was very angry looking Frisk with Chara standing behind them.
Actually, here. I've found another copy of it
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I really REALLY like this story. The concept is super cool, and interesting, and it's fun to see how Chloe responds to everything going on, while her mind is in shambles. Dark Chloe is definitely a really cool concept. But it sounds like it's starting to become an internal manifestation of SOL virus. Hell, her dark half threw her shirt to her. SHE PICKED UP AN OBJECT. And Chloe didn't even bother asking how. @-@?
Anyways keep up the good work. :D I hope you can finish this story (^-^)
8155027
What's your point?
„Ich heiße Shepard und dies ist meine Lieblingsraum der Zitadelle“?
Dark Chloe snorted and shook her head before tossing my bra to me, I grabbed it and put it on before walking/stumbling over to get my shirt. ............................................... ok THAT is fucked whit a capatul FUCKED!........ how can she interact with objects like that???