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I'm taking a bet she looks like this? Because I find this one of the better Athro Zecora pics out there.
How'd what's-his-face know Zecora makes potions, much less being a master at it?
So he outwardly freaks out and runs into a forest while inwardly freaking out and is wondering what's going on after he asked a dragon to send him someplace no one has ever been before, and then tries to claim he isn't freaking out and not a lot can make him freak out?
And for zecora it would be the movie
Man, I would like to see it happen, if he answered differently. Just for Zecoras reaction to the unexpected answer!
Hate to say it, but the freak-out when seeing Pinkie the first time throws off the whole "I'm hard to freak out" nonsense which follows soon after. Consistancy is a good thing.
You wanted a reason not to have to ryhme for zecora, didn't you?
Well, if you aren't willing to simply grab it by the neck and kill it then I can't feel particularly sympathetic. Were I attacked by wolves, I'd grab one and use it as a club.
She just said it is cultural, so duh.
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True, but I think that can be excused and after he got used to her, everything else probably seemed not so shocking in comparison to the initial OMG moment.
The way this story is written is throwing me off. It's too fast-paced with what is going on e0in terms of the events that take place within a chaper. It's like an improv session where you don't stop the story, you just say "and then" after each scene. It needs to be slowed down just a little. For example: describe the scenery in a little more detail, or the characters he encounters. Give the main character some internal thoughts that reflect on what he's seeing and feeling, after all this IS written in third person. This story has lots of potential, but it's still rough around the edges.
It felt weird reading Zecora's dialogue without the rhymes but anyway, I'm liking the story so far.
Also: "50 shades of red" + "technically correct. The best kind of correct". I saw what you did there
Sorry. I can't read this. When you have a big section of your character literally speaking their backstory aloud to themselves for no reason and then follow it up with no break in the constant "and another thing" style writing.
Maybe it gets good later, but this is just not reaching me at all.
And this is where I stop reading, sorry. Don't like the cliche of this.
I like Zecora rhyming better tha. Plain talking zebra
Forgot caps on twilight's name
Ah, 2015. I remember those days. The fandom so full of vigor...
I'm just going to assume the writing improves down the line. The beginning shows a lot of the signs of an enthusiastic new writer who hasn't had time to fumble around long enough to know the road.
Try saying this but in rhyme form,you shall not regret
I see what you did there
I was confused until I checked for an anthro tag.
Still gonna read it, so, good story so far.
Me. Exactly me.
I like how he talks to himself. It reminds me of me.
This was a awesome and funny chapter.
Not really a Antro fan but if the story is good i can dig it. Looking forward to his Pinkie partys ones he has his new home accepted...