This seems to cheerful for horrific mutilation right from the get go.

7484532 it's the wasteland! Cheery mutilation is mandatory!

7485440 Well, only if your making the character insane, and even then there's usually some measure of guilt buried in them.

7485861 it's a build up to something major. And the Rage will be the catalyst. But outside of the 'Tom' mode he is a very passive dragon.

7485887 Well in that case you probably shouldn't have opened with a shitload of violence.

7485911 in the next chapter or so somethin will drastically change his ways

7485918 Good to know, but the first chapter might turn people away from the story, it's a bit excessive on the violence and that much all in your face from the get go doesn't leave much for character development to happen or even be introduced to he main character.

7487388 thanks for the tidbit. Some of the drive behind this story is the freedom to be dark and gory; compared to my other story, Fed the Hand that Chaosed Me, which I have a 'brighter' path in mind for it.

7487402 No problem, I'm not really a writer myself since I can't stay focused enough and I lack the motivation to sit down shut up and make something out of the jumbled mess in my head, so this is just observation on my part and I figured I'd just let you know.

7487450 and thanks to you, I might have the next chapter out by next week. I'd pushed this story too far to the back of my mind....

7488309 Like I said, no problem.

What's with the Capitalization of random words?
Other then that it was a promising intro and a neat concept. The pacing was a bit wonky but pacing's a bitch to explain and fix; you should develop a feel for it in time. I think I'll keep track of this one

7501490 it's suppose to be a screwy opener. The main character has some brain issues. ( Avoided spoilers equal crapy comment section explanations)

7501497
OK. I know a lot of authors do stuff with their styles but it is hard to tell if its intentional with fanfiction (the person could just have an issue or funky keyboard). I personally believe that Kkat left just as many errors in the original as she wanted and that Blackjack took up writing in her later life (hence why Project Horizons is so well written)

7501511 yea, this is my more free form story versus my other( it's set in 'normal' Equestria).

And incidentally, I'm nearing the end of horizons....

7501524
The ending of Project Horizons.....

"YEAH, BABY!!! I don't know if I'm crying because it was so glorious or because It's finally over! "
-Me, 2016: upon finishing PH

There's some epic sequel/spin-off bait in the last chapter that you shouldn't look at if you enjoy sleep.
i'm done, sorry

7501559 More Queen Whisky??????

7501565 Well her story is told but there were a lot of characters in that story that all live on.