Shy and timid Nora finally works up enough courage to ask Princess Celestia on a date. However, there might be more to Celestia than Nora originally thought.
Was there a chapter with something happening between Nora and a minotaur or is that going to be explained later? I can't remember what all's happened so far anymore.
Some things aren't explained, like how Nora ended in equestria, this minotaur incident, when Nora realized Flutters had a crush in her... Big things and small things, but it would be good if you explained them.
The door slid partly open and a unicorn mare stuck her head through the opening. She glanced around before catching sight of me sitting in the corner. A small smile touched her lips. “Do you want anything from the trolley, dearie?” she asked, her voice soft.
6609335 The dream/nightmare at the start of this chapter seems a likely candidate for how she left Earth, doesn't exactly explain how she wound up in Equestria but well, natural/wild magic does strange things from time to time.
Fluttershy's crush, IIRC, was so thinly veiled that even the most innocent and least perceptive sentient life form could see it plain as day. In other words she probably noticed it as soon as it was a thing.
As for the "minotaur incident", I too would like an explanation at some point. Just her being there for the Iron Will incident of the show doesn't seem like enough to elicit that sort of response from the mere mention of a minotaur being around. Though I will say that my 'gutter-mind' has an idea or two...
(I intended on posting this a long time ago, but there was an error preventing me from posting on most stories, period. This is a bit late, but still relevant.) The scene with Luna and the colts... While it doesn't seem like rape in the scene after, the scene and its ending are defintily very rape-y themselves. You really couldn't have found a way to get it across that it was consensual after so many people saying it felt like rape?
There's a idea called "Death of the Author". It means that the writer's intentions are irrelevant, it's all about what the reader takes away from it. Just saying that it wasn't rape isn't enough. If the reader sees it happening in their mind's eye, then rape happened. It's not about what "actually" happened, because there is no such thing. You never wrote anything in the story that directly refutes the idea of Luna raping two colts, but there's enough evidence in the story for the event happening that a bunch of people have called you out on it.
Wow. Really? Really? It's called Gender Dysphoria/Transgender. Look it up.
And yes, Celestia is lying by omission about something he really should have brought up by now.
It's not a lie if it's your identity. Celestia in this story genuinely is a mare, just one who happened to be born in a male body. It's not lying when the subject is so tied into who you are that telling anybody is a sign of great trust.
Now, letting this fact go untold before too long would be kinda dickish, but it's not something you just tell somebody. If you don't think you can trust them with this information, break it off before it gets serious. Celestia has gone on two dates with Nora. They aren't getting hitched in the next chapter.
Celestia's standards are really low
What. Okay, first: who would ask her out in the first place? By this accounting, almost everypony Celestia has ever met is so intimidated by her that she hasn't been asked out in a damn long time. Second: And Nora's best competition is a bunch of Nobles apparently willing to openly mock the first person that does ask Celestia on a date. Third: Even if anyone else in the world asked Celestia out, she would still be dipping into a lower class. She is literally a demi-goddess and all-but-worshipped by her citizens. If she's looking for an equal, she's either out of luck, or needs to look for someone not under her rule.
Nora is some sort of fetish obsessed Irish chick who starts having vivid sex fantasies in the middle of a date at the movies
Riiiight. And it's perfectly normal to never ever think about sex. While on a date, in close proximity with your crush.
Kind of wish Nora would have given the reason why she doesn't want Fluttershy. Also surprised both Nora and Celestia are okay with breaking the mare's heart. Fluttershy has probably been nothing but good to Nora, and Celestia owes her a great debt for saving Equestria as the Element of Kindness.
This...I do think the author could have put more work into this, but I think he has a plan for this arc. You don't just give a secondary character an unrequited crush and make a love-triangle and abandon the thread. Well, some people do, but them we burn in effigy. Also, Nora said "no". No means no, not creepy sniffing and public displays of affection. Fluttershy has always had trouble dealing with other people, and unfortunately this seems like one of the more likely responses she'd give. Either not "get" that she was actually rejected, or shut down.
It's not Nora's responsibility to give Fluttershy a date, and it's not Celestia's to abandon Nora because Kindness is the opposite corner of the love triangle. It might be nice to get a more solid reason behind Nora's rejection of Shy, at least for the sake of fleshing out this sub-plot, but Nora did give a reason, and it's as good as any if the sub-plot ends there. I don't think it will, and I hope it goes somewhere interesting, but do you really need a reason to not be attracted to somebody? Especially if they are a different species...
6908750 Working on it, and not entirely sure. This was originally supposed to be only three chapters, but as you can see, it's evolved past that. I would, however, be surprised if it reached 20 chapters. We'll see what happens.
7215098 Not at all, it's a practice that's usually only done in forums like space battles or sufficient velocity. I just mentioned it because when I first read it it seemed odd to me that so much empty space was at the bottom.
7217559 Yay! I'm already liking this story! Excited to see where it goes. I'm more than a little confused after Luna's reckoning and your comment about this not being a futa story. I suppose I'll just have to keep reading.
Was there a chapter with something happening between Nora and a minotaur or is that going to be explained later? I can't remember what all's happened so far anymore.
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I am guessing she was in town, more than likely, for the Iron Will Incident.
Some things aren't explained, like how Nora ended in equestria, this minotaur incident, when Nora realized Flutters had a crush in her... Big things and small things, but it would be good if you explained them.
$5 imaginary currency of your choice the minotaur fucks up their date.
Nora is a human version of Fluttershy with an accent?
The poor dear...
to short of a chapter i hope theres another coming soon
Trolley lady kehehehe Harry Potter kehehehe , and no hidden white text awwww
Oh Max you're such a tease Dx
Huzzah! An update!
Awww... It's over already? It's never enough! Never enou-ou-ou-ough...!!!
Partial sentence. The abomination was ruining what?
"Just some last minute confusion about a new trade agreement" ?
OOHHHH!!!!! OH MY GOD! YOU DID NOT!
I FECKIN LOVE YE!
Yaaaay ! New chapter !
Hail to to you !
I can't wait for Celestia's secret to be discover ! Mwahahahahahaaaa !
6609335 The dream/nightmare at the start of this chapter seems a likely candidate for how she left Earth, doesn't exactly explain how she wound up in Equestria but well, natural/wild magic does strange things from time to time.
Fluttershy's crush, IIRC, was so thinly veiled that even the most innocent and least perceptive sentient life form could see it plain as day. In other words she probably noticed it as soon as it was a thing.
As for the "minotaur incident", I too would like an explanation at some point. Just her being there for the Iron Will incident of the show doesn't seem like enough to elicit that sort of response from the mere mention of a minotaur being around. Though I will say that my 'gutter-mind' has an idea or two...
Yup.
It updated!!!!!!!
6609434 5 doge coins it is
6611017 ... Kelso, you're not going.
6609434 5 Stanley nickels it is.
6609434 5 golden Trololos it is!
The stories pretty interesting but man you've go to tone down the accent a bit, it's pretty jarring when Nora speaks and even I have to decipher it.
6618462 if i remember right, it only gets that bad when she is nervous. like really really nervous.
6648479 It's not that it's thick, it's just that it's inaccurate, and jumps from barely there to full on really suddenly.
MOAR!
I agree with pissed off fluttershy. Moar traplestia please!
This was fun! Thanks!
(I intended on posting this a long time ago, but there was an error preventing me from posting on most stories, period. This is a bit late, but still relevant.)
The scene with Luna and the colts... While it doesn't seem like rape in the scene after, the scene and its ending are defintily very rape-y themselves. You really couldn't have found a way to get it across that it was consensual after so many people saying it felt like rape?
There's a idea called "Death of the Author". It means that the writer's intentions are irrelevant, it's all about what the reader takes away from it. Just saying that it wasn't rape isn't enough. If the reader sees it happening in their mind's eye, then rape happened. It's not about what "actually" happened, because there is no such thing. You never wrote anything in the story that directly refutes the idea of Luna raping two colts, but there's enough evidence in the story for the event happening that a bunch of people have called you out on it.
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Wow. Really? Really? It's called Gender Dysphoria/Transgender. Look it up.
It's not a lie if it's your identity. Celestia in this story genuinely is a mare, just one who happened to be born in a male body. It's not lying when the subject is so tied into who you are that telling anybody is a sign of great trust.
Now, letting this fact go untold before too long would be kinda dickish, but it's not something you just tell somebody. If you don't think you can trust them with this information, break it off before it gets serious. Celestia has gone on two dates with Nora. They aren't getting hitched in the next chapter.
What. Okay, first: who would ask her out in the first place? By this accounting, almost everypony Celestia has ever met is so intimidated by her that she hasn't been asked out in a damn long time. Second: And Nora's best competition is a bunch of Nobles apparently willing to openly mock the first person that does ask Celestia on a date. Third: Even if anyone else in the world asked Celestia out, she would still be dipping into a lower class. She is literally a demi-goddess and all-but-worshipped by her citizens. If she's looking for an equal, she's either out of luck, or needs to look for someone not under her rule.
Riiiight. And it's perfectly normal to never ever think about sex. While on a date, in close proximity with your crush.
This...I do think the author could have put more work into this, but I think he has a plan for this arc. You don't just give a secondary character an unrequited crush and make a love-triangle and abandon the thread. Well, some people do, but them we burn in effigy. Also, Nora said "no". No means no, not creepy sniffing and public displays of affection. Fluttershy has always had trouble dealing with other people, and unfortunately this seems like one of the more likely responses she'd give. Either not "get" that she was actually rejected, or shut down.
It's not Nora's responsibility to give Fluttershy a date, and it's not Celestia's to abandon Nora because Kindness is the opposite corner of the love triangle. It might be nice to get a more solid reason behind Nora's rejection of Shy, at least for the sake of fleshing out this sub-plot, but Nora did give a reason, and it's as good as any if the sub-plot ends there. I don't think it will, and I hope it goes somewhere interesting, but do you really need a reason to not be attracted to somebody? Especially if they are a different species...
I want to know more about Nora's encounter with the minotaur. I am compelled to know what happened.
Next update? And how many more chapters are left?
6908750 Working on it, and not entirely sure. This was originally supposed to be only three chapters, but as you can see, it's evolved past that. I would, however, be surprised if it reached 20 chapters. We'll see what happens.
Plz continue the story of the drunken Irish bullshit sputtering woman and the princess with gender issues!
6943393 Don't worry. I'm working on it. Slowly, but I am indeed working on it.
Top kek m8 Still top o' my list of fic writers, i feel you, keep at it
When are we going to get an update?
6957662 Actually working on the next chapter right now.
I'm kind of surprised they haven't worked out an MtF spell in all this time. Might be something for Twilight Sparkle to address.
I adore this story. I really like reading about Max as well, but Nora's something special to me. I really hope to see more
6957717 neglect every other story for this
Sooo... is this futa? Or is "Celestia" actually a dude?
(Haven't read, not into futa, saving us both the discomfort. )
7179814 Celestia's a dude
7180171 memecrunch.com/meme/13CJY/what-a-twist/image.png?w=480&c=1
OK, well, I may just check this out, then.
Friggin' bishounen...
6609773 is there normally hidden white text?
7215098 Not at all, it's a practice that's usually only done in forums like space battles or sufficient velocity. I just mentioned it because when I first read it it seemed odd to me that so much empty space was at the bottom.
7215909 OK.
If it's fucking dead, I'll lose faith in humanity and probably kill my self.......
........ Anyway, I'm out (╯°□°)╯︵ ┻━┻
7217433 Nope, not dead. I finished with classes and can now start working on stuff again.
7217559 .....fuck, I had the gun and the letter set up too, whelp won't be needing that
Luna is one frisky mare
I haven't read anything but the title and I can already guess this is a futa
7239048 Not a futa.
7217559 Yay! I'm already liking this story! Excited to see where it goes. I'm more than a little confused after Luna's reckoning and your comment about this not being a futa story. I suppose I'll just have to keep reading.