i.imgur.com/DiqwR.png Ew ew ew!

Talk about pussying out.

Ah, this turned out rather poorly for both of them. On the other hand i doubt it would have gone better had they done it later down the line, just more painful as the expectations would be higher.

Perhaps it is for the best that fluttershy rushed it? She should understand now that rarity's mismatch in terms of physical attraction is kinda a big deal.

I'm unsure if this issue can be resoveable for them. Rairity is immensly put off by sexual intimacy with fluttershy, heck thinking back she entered the relationship mostly for fluttershy even through she adores fluttershy mentally speaking.

Good work on the descriptions, it was like watching a train wreck in action.

10/10

funniest sex scene I have ever come across.

A train wreck. millions are dead. goodbye my sides.

6019183 She probably didn't even notice it, Rarity has basically been giving, giving, and making sure to hide any problems from Fluttershy with anything involving it, anything that she thinks would hurt fluttershy seems to be hidden away, which is what worried me about the relationship. She's simply doing everything because of how fragile she thinks fluttershy is at times.

I do applaud you for sticking to your convictions through this whole thing. Nice job turning it into a horror show.

I look forward to the meltdown coming next chapter, and for how Fluttershy deals with it all.

man I cant wait to see what happens next! The optimist in me still hoping things turn out well but then the pessimist slaps him.

Okay I can't continue reading it. This is just horrible and sad now and gets worse with every chapter.
RariShy is one of my favorite pairings, but this... is just no.
Where's a sad tag though in this story?

I already can see where this story is going, because I saw a few similar stories in the past.

In the end Fluttershy is going to get magical help from Twilight to change her gender to male for periods of sex with Rarity and Fluttershy will be for some reason okay with it. And they would live happily ever after...

No, I don't like it when stories focus on sex but characters can't have it until one of them would change their gender. It just doesn't work for me. Sorry.

Aside from that it was a very well-written story. But just... no. It's incredibly awkward and bad already for both of them. Just not a fan of "changing gender for the sake of other pony" stories.
And I can't see it work for Rarity without changing gender of Fluttershy at all now. And I was hoping for a sweet story with nice sex scenes...

6019702 I can see how you would think that, but I happen to be a bit of a connoisseur of this ship, I have preread this story to the ending, and without spoiling anything... you're wrong about your assumptions. This story does not need a sad tag. Drama, maybe, but then any story with Rarity involves drama.

The mistake our lady is making is to assume she knows how to lesbian. True fact, not all people can deal with oral. Rarity in particular is a major dirt-germophobe. Of course she's having problems. But instead of talking it out with Fluttershy, she forged ahead and tried to do exactly what she knew she couldn't do.

She might even come to be able to do oral at some point, but one has to be aroused to ignore things like unpleasant smells. At the moment, she cannot be aroused by Fluttershy physically. It's a problem, but not an insurmountable one.

tldr: don't make assumptions, this is just a downbeat in the story.

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That actually makes sense.
Okay. I'll read and hope for the best for both of them. I'm sorry for making quick assumptions.
Thank you for your reply!

I just feel so sorry for Rarity and what she's going through...

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Steel Resolve replied to me... (dies)

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Please, don't misinterpret my over-reaction above as calling your story bad or anything like that.

It's so dang well written, and characters are spot-on!..
so, you can actually feel Rarity's inner suffering.

It affected me and caused that comment. Sorry.

6020038 Good! That means Tal is doing his job! Buckle in, because this is where it gets really unlike any other shipfic I have read.

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I'm intrigued now!

That, was a little painful.
I am awaiting next chapter.

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Whatever the case, I'm flattered that I elicited such an emphatic reaction from you. That was indeed my intention in writing this chapter, but I didn't think I would actually alienate anyone with it. I'm glad that Steel cleared up the issue for you. He is right; this chapter is more-or-less the climax—not that kind of climax!—of the story. Rarity and Fluttershy have found the bottom of the pit. The rest will be picking up the shattered remains.

I'm glad you're sticking around!

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40G—Write an explicit sex scene that's not arousing in the least

Achievement unlocked?

Yup. That was every bit as awkward as I had expected. And then some.

Don't fret Rarity! Fluttershy is not quite so fragile as you believe, I think.

Gosh, this fic series is a blessing.

Ngh, that went about as well as I expected... Lovely work here, I actually felt Rarity's disgust and cringed alongside her.

I eagerly await the next installment.

6029399 Yeah, Rarity needed training wheels. You don't start off with advanced lesbian.

Not bad for Rarity's first time.

This is why being bi is awesome.

I think I'm going to read this whole story tonight and I almost never do that. That's how good this story is.

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I know, right?

Anyone further towards the ends of the Kinsey Scale, is Rarity's portrayal accurate? Is it really that bad? I mean I believe y'all, but it just makes no intuitive sense to me that you could be that in love with someone and still have that violent a reaction to pleasing or being pleased by them. So I just want to know, is that really what it's like?