"Please make free reign of any and all amenities during your trip. Free of charge of course. Is there anything I can get for you?"
The phrase is "free rein." It's actually about horse-riding: If you let the reins hang loose, the horse is free to go wherever it pleases. It's almost always meant to be used in the form, "give (someone) free rein (to do something)." On the other hand, "free reign" is a common mistake, but "make free reign of" is an awkward phrase.
I'd recommend a different term, like "free use," since either version of the phrase is odd when coming from a servant -- someone below Twilight Velvet in status and thus not really in a position to grant her authority one way or the other.
I actually feel bad for Twilight Velvet, because it sounds to me like Shining faked the letter just to get inside his mom. I really hope the writers thing wasn't faked... That could be cruel of Shining, regardless on how much sex he makes it up to her with.
Please don't ever type the word 'taught' again, unless you mean the past-tense form of 'to teach'. The word you are looking for is 'taut'.
As this is a word that seems to recur in clop scenes, it would behoove you (see what I did there?) to search all applicable stories / scenes and replace the word after verifying the context.
Nice story so far, but there's a minor thing you may want to edit.
"train's".
I feel like Cadence is in on it and no one knows it. And I'm slightly convinced that wasn't lube
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Same.
The phrase is "free rein." It's actually about horse-riding: If you let the reins hang loose, the horse is free to go wherever it pleases. It's almost always meant to be used in the form, "give (someone) free rein (to do something)." On the other hand, "free reign" is a common mistake, but "make free reign of" is an awkward phrase.
I'd recommend a different term, like "free use," since either version of the phrase is odd when coming from a servant -- someone below Twilight Velvet in status and thus not really in a position to grant her authority one way or the other.
I actually feel bad for Twilight Velvet, because it sounds to me like Shining faked the letter just to get inside his mom. I really hope the writers thing wasn't faked... That could be cruel of Shining, regardless on how much sex he makes it up to her with.
Shining Armor's Ruse Cruise, population: Twilight Velvet.
Wine so nice, you say it twice.
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Destination: Sexy Town.
(Aka Your Mother)
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~This wine wine
Makes me feel so fine fine~
Please don't ever type the word 'taught' again, unless you mean the past-tense form of 'to teach'. The word you are looking for is 'taut'.
As this is a word that seems to recur in clop scenes, it would behoove you (see what I did there?) to search all applicable stories / scenes and replace the word after verifying the context.
Other than that, keep up the good work!
7632580 Seig Heil! Ze grammar Nazi's vill be victorious in zhere efforts to purge ze gramatic mistakes of ze vest!
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Heil Vebster!
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Heh, that rhymed!
Sigh should be sign.
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Fixed.