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Trapped (Project: Arena)

Dark Haze, a pegasus with an unfortunately broken wing, is a pawn in a game he didn't know he was involved in. He wakes up to find himself trapped in an arena-esque environment. Will he survive? Will he find out who did this to him?

My first serious fic.
I know, it's not a very good story, but I wanted to try writing, being good at nothing else.

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Typewrittensoul

Typewrittensoul #1 · Jun 3rd, 2012 · · · For Sport ·

First off, remove the center formatting. Second of all, the pacing is decent and this first chapter is proving to be an intriguing set up that is good at enticing the curious.
Beyond that, just keep writing and reading to build up experience.

NightmareOfADream

NightmareOfADream #2 · Jun 3rd, 2012 · · · For Sport ·

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Hehe, it's the style I like to write in, sorry.

Typewrittensoul

Typewrittensoul #3 · Jun 3rd, 2012 · · · For Sport ·

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It's not a style but a format. You're only doing your story a disservice if you think it's a unique way of writing a fic without knowing the proper ways of using it. Just keep writing and reading and I'm sure you'll improve with time.