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What am I?

I don't know who, or what, I am. I woke up on a mountain and everything hurt. Others either run away or chase me just because I look this way. I don't know why they're doing this. I never did anything to hurt them.

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Distrance

Distrance #1 · May 7th, 2012 · · ·

Amnesia, the world's greatest in plot device since the beginning of modern story.

Drifter

Drifter #2 · May 7th, 2012 · · ·

im sorry for thumbing down. I dont read very many fics (although I love writing them) and yours grabbed my attention because it was a changeling fic and im in the process of writing one. I dont want to be mean but want to give some constructive critisism. My first problem is you started in first person then went on in third. Maybe if you made it seem like it was thinking that, then that would've been better. Also it seemed a bit rushed . I could barely keep track of what was going on. Try to slow down a bit, explain whats going on more instead of he was there, now he's here, now he's running away. That was also a problem for me too when I began writing, but just try to slow down, add detail, etc. Also, you said it ALOT. That kind of bugged me too. Try using he or she.
Good luck!

Xavius_Night

Xavius_Night #3 · May 7th, 2012 · · ·

hmmm... very interesting.
However, I think you could easily continue this story, perhaps with a damaged changeling that no longer quite synchs with the hive.

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