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Cupcakesfilly


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Hello. I'd like to tell you a story, a story about my life. My full name is Princess Sugar Twinkles, but you can just call me Twinkie. All of my friends do. I have a very good memory, and most things I remember are about when I was young, a mere foal. No will be here to talk to you about it. Sit back, because my life is rather long. I am 197 years old now, but still pretty young for a pony like me.

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Good Job on getting some cover art. I'm still using google images. But onto the Criticism.

No spelling errors so far. the grammar is okay.

Try not to clump your paragraphs together.

Space it out more to make the story easier to read.

Other than that.

If possible, try to make the beginning chapter at least 1,000 words or more.

I've found that if the beginning isn't at least 1,000 words, the readers on this site won't take you as seriously.

After the first chapter, feel free to reduce or even add to the word count.

It's strange, but my views jumped when I did that.

I wish you the best of luck in writing little multi-colored horse words.

And if you have any questions feel free to ask me or another user on this site.

Also if someone else hasn't said it already...

Welcome to Fimfiction! We're glad you are here with us!

:twilightsmile:

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