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Artsy-fartsy, athlete, twin!

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Velvet Whisper is a little past new to this whole street-ninja, parkour thing, and training is hard. The running isn't too hard for her, because she likes it. The hard part is the people she has to deal with. Being the only girl in the squad, she goes through some heckling before the day is over. Whisper walks the balance of being accepted, and being rejected. Being good enough to stay, or being a complete failure. Having friends even just a phone call away can make a world of difference. But one day on a training run, she has the inevitable fall that all trainees go through. It's just, there are times when we fall and we can laugh, brush it off, and then move along or try again. But sometimes... It's just not worth laughing over.

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I really liked the in depth description of the parkour in this. The characters seem like they have good chemistry too. As for dryness, I wouldn't say it got terribly boring anywhere in particular. Looking forward to seeing how Whisper gets on at school! :ajsmug:

5500756 Awesome!

*phew* Thanks for the input! It's good to self-critique, but it helps a lot when other people say their thoughts :)

Will there be a sequel? Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5513559 Nah, it was just a test run as my first thing on Fimfiction.

And no...? I don't think it's worth of that kind of attention. Thanks for the suggestion, though :)

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