Buried alive. Left to rot. On the edge of his fate the detective is pulled from his coffin. The city that covered him is gone and the detective is worlds away. Magic, friendship, love, harmony, someone still has to put all the pieces together.
The whole day really helped reaffirm those feelings. In spite of the strangeness and the differences I was lying in bed content in that I wasn't alone. In that light, everything else didn't seem quite as bad. So that was something. So that was something
I thought of this song when I first saw this words! (Are you ready baby) (oooh) (ahh yeah) Extra Extra read all about it I wanna show kinda ya something new Now If your having trouble just getting a boner Here’s something cool that’ll work for you It’s way better than a Dirty Trixiez Some will say that its a bit extreme Close your eyes and spread your legs now What I’m about to do will make you scream You better lube it up ’cause its easier to get it deeper in In her hole so she screams
Ah Ah oh ah Oh Ah Ahhh AHHHH.
It’s easy to find mare that really dig it In the red light ponyville or in the town You can spot a mare who’s bin using the shocker She walks around with a pinky that’s brown When ya do too much butter sugar And your hard meat stick won’t stand Add your middle finger to Pussy the middle And spread the shocker all across the land
Seriously though, Val's got some issues! Skeleton Man Val seems like it might be useful in a fight too, considering he retained a measure of autonomy and a good deal of ability.
Sounds like Val is being haunted by the Grim Reaper or some such. Especially now that Luna has noted it as unnatural to Equestria. I imagine some reaper esque entity is trying to get back the soul that it lost and is having trouble cause 'questria ain't playin by the same rules as Earth.
Really good chapter. I really like Olive and she seems really genuine. That is pretty tough to write. Many times when excited enthusiastic characters like that are introduced they just seem annoying. So, good job! Luna was pretty adorable, and now Celestia is going to be interested in trying to introduce some romance in his life, haha great times!
5726732 The idiom "extending an olive branch" means to make peace, often by negotiation. It so happens she's an aide for ambassadors, so in a way, Olive is extending an olive branch.
I'm surprised no one asked more about the FUCKING BLACK MAGIC PORTAL THAT HE MADE. I mean seriously, if they could work out how he did that they could provide instantaneous travel of supplies and passengers making trains and other forms of transport obsolete, even if that's not possible the fact that he was able to do that at all should indicate that he CAN cast magic and I would want that to be investigated a bit. Who wouldn't want magic? For all we know the "creature" that attacked him is just his magic because it has no real direction form him so it does it's own thing according to his emotions.
Not really any grammatical errors, but missing words all over the place. I didn't really take note of it until they started hoping up, but i counted at least 8 instances.
Very nice chapter though, looking forward to the next one
She vaguely mentioned that the timing actually worked out for her, which was kind of weird.
Now there's all sorts of lewd stuff going through my head! :D
6861911 Oh I'm still fairly sure it's Twi x Val. There's just way too much going on between the two, and they have a deeper understanding of each other. And, interestingly, it's not the big stuff that pushes romance - it's the little things that happen "in the background", and all of those little things seem to be centered around Twilight.
So if you are feeling alone just let me know, send me a message and I'll be over there as soon as I can.
... uhhh, what's going on here, Twilight? ;]
... though I have to admit, Rainbow really seems to be putting some effort in, here... I wonder...
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I thought of this song when I first saw this words!
(Are you ready baby)
(oooh)
(ahh yeah)
Extra Extra read all about it
I wanna show kinda ya something new
Now If your having trouble just getting a boner
Here’s something cool that’ll work for you
It’s way better than a Dirty Trixiez
Some will say that its a bit extreme
Close your eyes and spread your legs now
What I’m about to do will make you scream
You better lube it up ’cause its easier to get it deeper in
In her hole so she screams
Ah Ah oh ah Oh Ah Ahhh AHHHH.
It’s easy to find mare that really dig it
In the red light ponyville or in the town
You can spot a mare who’s bin using the shocker
She walks around with a pinky that’s brown
When ya do too much butter sugar
And your hard meat stick won’t stand
Add your middle finger to Pussy the middle
And spread the shocker all across the land
YEEAHHH
Update in ten days? Yes fucking please!
And I'm really likening how you've characterized Celestia.
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5720971 no we say "BRING MORE BEER!!!"
Much hugs. Such comfort.
Seriously though, Val's got some issues! Skeleton Man Val seems like it might be useful in a fight too, considering he retained a measure of autonomy and a good deal of ability.
Sounds like Val is being haunted by the Grim Reaper or some such. Especially now that Luna has noted it as unnatural to Equestria. I imagine some reaper esque entity is trying to get back the soul that it lost and is having trouble cause 'questria ain't playin by the same rules as Earth.
Really good chapter. I really like Olive and she seems really genuine. That is pretty tough to write. Many times when excited enthusiastic characters like that are introduced they just seem annoying. So, good job! Luna was pretty adorable, and now Celestia is going to be interested in trying to introduce some romance in his life, haha great times!
^Think you forgot to cap the W
Nyaaawwww, everything is fine~
I'd like to see more of Olive Branch too.
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The idiom "extending an olive branch" means to make peace, often by negotiation. It so happens she's an aide for ambassadors, so in a way, Olive is extending an olive branch.
Love the Valentino/Celestia scenes, they are great.
I'm surprised no one asked more about the FUCKING BLACK MAGIC PORTAL THAT HE MADE. I mean seriously, if they could work out how he did that they could provide instantaneous travel of supplies and passengers making trains and other forms of transport obsolete, even if that's not possible the fact that he was able to do that at all should indicate that he CAN cast magic and I would want that to be investigated a bit. Who wouldn't want magic? For all we know the "creature" that attacked him is just his magic because it has no real direction form him so it does it's own thing according to his emotions.
Not really any grammatical errors, but missing words all over the place. I didn't really take note of it until they started hoping up, but i counted at least 8 instances.
Very nice chapter though, looking forward to the next one
I know these chapters are quite long, but they never feel long enough. I start reading them and they're over before I know it.
5728968 That racist.
5728968 Damn that nigger skeleton
I have to say that I am enjoying this story. I do hope to see more of it. Keep up the good work you are doing.
Dragonfox
5796988 what's good nigga?! tse4.mm.bing.net/th?id=HN.608001141528528990&w=236&h=176&c=7&rs=1&qlt=90&o=4&pid=1.7
Well, he is in Canterlot. Chances are high he'll eventually run into everybodys favorite prince
At first, I shipped Val with Twilight, then it was RD, then Fluttershy. Now I'm convinced it's either Princess Luna or Celestia. Olive Branch too.
Now there's all sorts of lewd stuff going through my head! :D
6861911
Oh I'm still fairly sure it's Twi x Val. There's just way too much going on between the two, and they have a deeper understanding of each other. And, interestingly, it's not the big stuff that pushes romance - it's the little things that happen "in the background", and all of those little things seem to be centered around Twilight.
... uhhh, what's going on here, Twilight? ;]
... though I have to admit, Rainbow really seems to be putting some effort in, here... I wonder...