Buried alive. Left to rot. On the edge of his fate the detective is pulled from his coffin. The city that covered him is gone and the detective is worlds away. Magic, friendship, love, harmony, someone still has to put all the pieces together.
A very interesting story, I look forward to reading more of this story. With Valentino's occupation I could see him playing part and helping out on any adventures once he starts getting a grasp on the culture, history and ins and outs of Equestria. After all being a detective he'd have to be pretty perceptive, think pretty fast on his feet and be good at solving problems, puzzles and unknowns.
This is amazing, as soon as I finished the second chapter I logged on to my pc and searched you up just to tell you how much I love your work, even if its just two chapters right now I know you will go far. Keep up the good work.
Very good so far, loving the whole Detective in Equestria thing. A fresh look on HiE stories,(The soldier or average joe stories get kind of bland after a while.) I am looking forward to new chapters.
OK you sucked me in. Have a like an fave. I just hope this isn't one of those stories that grinds to a halt and just stops getting updated because ya can't think of where to take it.
"You shouldn't tease her like that," said Fluttershy, a small smile on her face. Not that i dont like this new fluttershy but doesnt she seem a bit more persuasive than normal? Consider this is the fluttershy from the show
80% i will scream when who touch my sensitive place.
Pacing, story and character are very intriguing. Looking forward to reading more Very nice work so far ^_^
A very interesting story, I look forward to reading more of this story. With Valentino's occupation I could see him playing part and helping out on any adventures once he starts getting a grasp on the culture, history and ins and outs of Equestria. After all being a detective he'd have to be pretty perceptive, think pretty fast on his feet and be good at solving problems, puzzles and unknowns.
Loved this chapter, it was great.
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What about the 20%?
5163938 Of course, 10% sex - 10% random.
I almost had to go to the hospital because of it...
This is amazing, as soon as I finished the second chapter I logged on to my pc and searched you up just to tell you how much I love your work, even if its just two chapters right now I know you will go far. Keep up the good work.
God, we need more of this. Anxiously awaiting more!
Surprised they never took him to the hospital, or get a consult from the staff there. A case of them all getting distracted?
Very good so far, loving the whole Detective in Equestria thing. A fresh look on HiE stories,(The soldier or average joe stories get kind of bland after a while.) I am looking forward to new chapters.
Foreshadowing.
OK you sucked me in. Have a like an fave. I just hope this isn't one of those stories that grinds to a halt and just stops getting updated because ya can't think of where to take it.
This has been great so far and I hope to see more. Faved.
Pretty good. Although, I am eager to find the meaning of the clock, and exactly HOW he got here.
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he would have been dead at 5, or something.
Maybe a time lord thing? Just randomness here...
Oooh, intriguing! I wonder if he learns that he's actually dead?
The privilege of fantasy
granted unto him so pained,
away now from the comfort of home.
Presently "living" this dream.
We shall read on.
.... Awesome shit man.
"You shouldn't tease her like that," said Fluttershy, a small smile on her face.
Not that i dont like this new fluttershy but doesnt she seem a bit more persuasive than normal? Consider this is the fluttershy from the show
5873042, she probably has the same reaction now that she had when first meeting Spike.
And caring for hurt... animals is her virtue after all.
Tick tock goes the clock...
He's pretty nonchalant about being nude, and while that's a refreshing change of pace, I'd like to stop imagining him in the buff really soon.
Finally, a smoker.
... or not.
I'd be through the pack within 2 days at most, and that's if I stretched it. He ain't a smoker.
The only thing that sentence needs is for "Good Thing" to be capitalized like that. :D
Is it so easy to drop the magic? Alas, not a scientist
Is it so easy to drop the magic? Alas, not a scientist