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Welp.
She boned.
Also, Poor old Chryssy almost always gets the short stick in the story.![:fluttercry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttercry.png)
It was only a matter of time before the tables turned. Now they'd be looking to renegotiate their contract to cover overtime pay.
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>Colonial Marines sucked
2598456 Soon.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
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2601674 Thank you
2602431 Muldoon was my favorite
2602587 Short is an understatement
2602652 Damn straight! Unions' Rights!
2602687 I know...
2602929 Form a queue to the left
tumblr.com/tagged/too%20soon?language=pt_PT
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2603119 When did Winona run down the curtain and join the choir invisible?
I know she got impregnated but I didn't think she burst like John Hurt yet. Poet and I didn't know it.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Nice to see a story where Celly being a manipulative chessmaster blows up in her face.
DAYUUUUUUUUM!
2603405 Kids will be kids![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
patience.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
2603612 It's only been a few days
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2603795 MMM-HMMM, GUUURL!
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you stalkin me? XP anyway if its a good story I'm there
not to mention AJ is awesome there's that too.
Tons of changelings and a bitch princess calls for an exosuit http://www.planetavp.com/images/planetavpfeatures/AxP-Exosuit1.jpg
Dude. These guys are hard asses![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
I love the mercelless characterization here, you really don't make any attempt to keep these guys as saints. Purely buisness, through and through. I like it![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Red will drown the silver lining,
Desperate mothers: fillies crying,
Clouds of white find soldiers flying,
Don’t you know today we’re dying?
2608218 Read that in a story somewhere... buuuut I decided to stick with full herbivore in this one--makes Scootaloo's mental break more interesting. HiE cliché FTW![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
i dont think im ok with chrysalis getting shot in the face![:twilightangry2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightangry2.png)
2609260![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
2611603 I appreciate your thoughtful input, and you may be right in that regard![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
I think I address that issue a little further in, but if you still find the characterization to be too far afield, please tell me. I only wish to become a better writer, so criticism is quite welcome.
Hmm. Tyrantlestia is a huge no-no for me, but you've done alright with the rest so far. I'll stick with this story for a little while more, but there really needs to be a good explanation for such normally OOC behaviour
Just a note: Celestia would never ever go back on a deal she made.
The fact that she even said "Or else?" is completely against her character. Her immediate response should have been to fulfill her side of the bargain and give back the suits. Then again, the whole bargain was kind of silly anyway...
2614481 Pfft. Um, don't know how to respond other than GH*Holds back spit take*. Sorry, I was drinking tea. Damn you randomly awkward comments!
2615496 Oh... OH! I see. Sorry about that
Looking back I see what you mean by that statement. Totally my fault: I didn't make the connotation/tone behind her words very clear, did I?
I didn't mean for
to be read in a defiant manner. Celestia has been alive long enough to understand what kind of people she's dealing with. She knows there's an "or else" to be had in there somewhere, and she wants it out in the open. I was a bit rushed when I wrote that, and I currently have no editor. It will be fixed, however.
I also acknowledge your point about the deal being extraneous and unnecessary in the first place. The way I justified it in my mind is best explained in the tenth chapter (eleventh, if you follow the FIMfiction button things) as a precaution against Discord's magic. Even then, I suppose you are right, and Celestia is a bit OOC in my story.
I'll take your comments to heart--I really do appreciate them--and they will affect how I portray her in the future, but I did kind of enjoy writing her this way (a little guiltily, mind you) and that will also influence how I write her in the rest of the story. I hope it doesn't peeve you so much that you have a hard time reading the second half![:applejackunsure:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applejackunsure.png)
Anywho, thanks again, and have a wonderful end of the week![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
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It's no big deal.
I only wanted to make you aware that she was a bit OOC, in case that was something you didn't want.
To be honest, having a character act differently than normal to suit your story is fine.
Unless it's, like, one of the mane 6 or something...
My point is, the actual show's characterization of a lot of characters (Celestia included) is fairly hazy and incomplete. Most of what we think about them is fanon anyway.
Sure, it was a little jarring when your Celestia didn't match up with the usual definition, but it only took some getting used to.
I look forward to more of this story.
2616232 As do I![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
For now, though, I feel that I should get some work done on my other two stories. Part Two of Xenophobia will be rolling around soon, though.
And now I'm caught up and have to wait like everybody else.
Dammit!!!!!!
Still, this is so awesome, duder. The characterization is beautiful for Jer and Ray. Also, I don know if someone has complained, but I love the implied/suggested romance between AJ and Ray. I hope it comes to fruition, mainly because I love happy endings and seeing he wounded man be healed and all that jazz.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Keep up the great work, brother!
These guys are the ultimate bad asses!
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Exactly, most Celestia characterization is fanon. ChessMastia being the most common fanon characterization.
2725291 Nnnnnno... no, I haven't even considered making a sequel as of yet. Still got a ways to go with this one![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
2726105 please make sure pinkie gets with jer. ive seen very little pinkiemance and want to see her get her due please?![:pinkiesad2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesad2.png)
Whens the next chapter coming out?
2900027 Been in a faraway place with little internet, but it is in production, promise![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
Survivors log, day 45.
It's been almost two months since the last update. Food and water supplies are running dangerously low. Starting to lose hope. Can hear whispers all around me. They get closer and closer with each passing day. I'm running out of firewood and matches. Darkness closes in. I can hear them coming closer and closer as the light of my fire dims...I can see them gnashing their teeth at me, ready to pounce on me as soon as the last light goes out. I estimate that I'l run completely out of firewood within the next week. Only the light of Xenophobia can save me now...
(Seriously man, get writing! I MUST know what happens next...)
I say again. I don't like the way Celestia is being depicted in this story. Everything else so far is actually really good but like another comment before mine I hope there's a good explanation as to why she is acting like this.
Hell, yeah! You tell her, Ray! Don't forget to tell her that you will be punishing her later for her attempted attacks on your and Jer's minds. After all, to humans, nothing is more sacred than the sanctity of one's own mind.