It Gets Worse...
Everypony was at a loss for words. Right there was their ruler's horn, a bloody mess on the ground. Princess Celestia herself was speechless; her mouth was open wide and her pupils were tiny pinpricks as she lay in the dirt in pain.
"Princess Celestia!" Twilight yelled as she got over her shock.
Her mind tried to come up with ways to fix this, but it was blank. No matter how hard she tried, she got nothing. Finally, she couldn't think at all. It was too much; Spike's suicide attempt, the depression, sadness, pain, tears, rage and now this. She just couldn't take it any more. Twilight sat there for a long moment, staring out into space, doing absolutely nothing, until finally, she fell into the dirt beside her former mentor.
Luna stared at me in shock and disbelief. I hadn't hesitated to do it at all. In fact, I did it swiftly, with absolutely no emotion on my face. I hadn't even blinked. Luna stood there, staring at my empty eyes; I stared back. We were stuck like that, not saying a word, just... staring. That is until I acted suddenly. In only a few seconds, Luna was engulfed in my fire. She hadn't moved out of the way fast enough; her shock delayed her reaction, and there was no escape for her. She screamed in surprise and pain, trying to get out of the green flames, but it was no use. My inner magic kept her from moving and she was stuck.
"W-what is this?!" She yelled in shock.
"Magic." Was all I said back, and I felt my magic growing stronger. Soon, the feeling was gone, and Luna had stopped struggling.
Good, you weren't lying about my abilities, Darkness. Not that it would have mattered.
I would never lie to you, my friend. Now, send her to the middle of the Everfree...
Don't have to tell me twice.
Hmm... you seem to be more confident, friend... Confidence added. That's a good sign. Now with more of me, you will show no mercy. Without us, you'd be a coward. I guess Twilight was right about the magic of friendship.
Yeah, she was. Though, I have a feeling that her friendship won't help her now. Or, perhaps it will.
What do you mean by that, friend?
Maybe, if she just knew how to be friends with me and wasn't so dense... Maybe none of this would have happened.
But it has! So it doesn't matter anymore. The ponies have wronged you, and now you must teach them a lesson!
"Goodbye Luna. Have fun dying in the middle of a monster infested forest where you belong, you lying bitch!" Was my last words before I threw her down deep into the Everfree forest. I stood there quietly for a moment before turning around in the direction of where the ponies scattered off to. I didn't waste time looking for the bastard ponies. Instead, I began to crush and burn every house or mansion I saw. If forced the hiding ponies to scatter out, attempting to outrun my towering form and certain death, but I was too fast.I picked up the first pony I saw. All of the ponies looked prissy, so there was no telling which was nobles and which was not. I guessed I'd have to kill them all. Oh well. Can't say I didn't try to show a little restraint and mercy.
"So... you were one of the fuckers that wanted me dead, yes?" I growled. The stallion I was holding shook his head vigorously, crying tho whole time, begging to be released. "... Well, if you truly didn't, then you can thank the fuckers who did for this happening. I'll make sure it's agonizing and slow..." After my little 'speech', I engulfed him in my flames, I could control how my flames worked at any time. He'll be burning for at least an hour and when the flames stopped, he'll be in pain for another half an hour before he finally dies. I'll make sure he gets a clear view of everypony else burning to death as he dies. And they'll die quicker than him.
"Stop right now Spike!" I heard familiar voice call from behind me. I turned my had around slowly and faced the pony who said that. I wasn't surprised to see Twilight's big brother, Shining Armor.
To be truthful, I didn't really want to hurt him. He was more of a friend to me than all of Twilight's friends combined. He had hung out with me when we still lived in Canterlot, always saying that there was too many mares around and that I needed a stallion in my life. He was like a big brother to me, and I felt a connection to him. Whenever I was down, he would be the pony I always went to first for advise. He played with me a lot, showed my how to play hoofball and we were inseparable. We had some good times, cracking jokes, and when I claimed I was old enough to and begged him for an hour, we spent time talking about what mares looked the best. I sent him a letter telling him what was happening back before I went on a rampage, but he said he was super busy dealing with being royalty and fixing up the Crystal Empire after the Sombra incident (Yes, they still had trouble with that), but he'd come as soon as he could. But he didn't come soon enough.
Actually, now that I think of it, I kind of regret going on a rampage. I could've ran off to the Crystal Empire instead of doing this. I could've been with the ponies who looked up to me because I was their hero. I could've seen Shining Armor and talked to him again and tried to get things almost back to normal. But instead, I chose this route and I let him down. My only friend that wasn't just a voice in my head... I had somepony and I still did this. There's no way he'll be able to forgive me for this. My eyes widened and my heart dropped. I had absolutely nothing now. Now... due to my dumb actions... I had absolutely nopony. I was now alone in this world. There's nopony else that loves me anymore. It's over.
But I didn't cry. I just looked at Shining Armor with a sad look in my eyes.
"Go away." I whispered.
"No! You know I won't just-"
"I SAID GO AWAY!" I yelled at the top of my lungs. Shining Armor rubbed his ears.
"I was able to take down two goddesses, Shining! TWO! I really don't wan't to hurt you, so go away." I felt something well up inside me. It wasn't good.
"I refuse!" He yelled.
He was a stubborn fool.
"Go!"
"No!"
"GO!"
"It's not gonna happen!"
"GO DAMMIT!"
My body began to shake and my head was pounding. I clenched my head in my claws and my eyes were shut tight. Something was burning me inside of me and out. I panted heavily, and opened my eyes, but seeing nothing but darkness.
"LEAVE NOW!" My voice boomed, but it was deeper and scarier than my normal voice. I felt something cold and hot at the same time running up my body. All of a sudden, extreme pain pulsated through my entire body making me scream in agony. It was like my body was being ripped apart and put back together and then back apart. It was pure agony.
"Hey Rainbow Dash! Could you fly me around Ponyville for a while! I wan't to see how awesome it is to fly!"
"Oh, hey there Spike. Sorry, I ain't got any free time right now. See ya!"
...
"Hiya there Spike!"
"Hey there Pinkie! How's it going?"
"Great! I just made a new flavor of cupcakes today and they're super duper delicious!"
"Cool! Can I have so-"
"Oh, I have to go make some more muffins! We ran out and I almost forgot about them! See ya later Spike!"
"Oh... um, bye... I guess."
...
"Hey Fluttershy!"
"Oh, hi there Spike, how are you today."
"Good as always."
"Oh that's nice I-"
"Where's Angel going?"
"Oh no! Angel! Sorry Spike, but I must go and get Angel. I'll see you later!"
"Yeah... later...
There was no later.
...
"Hey Applejack!"
"Sorry Spike. Can't talk. Gotta buck apples."
...
"Spike, you don't understand how it feels to love somepony only for them to love somepony else!"
...
"Spike, clean up while I'm gone!"
"Spike, come get this book."
"Spike, you stay here."
"Stay here."
"Spike."
"SPIKE!"
"SPIKE!!!"
"SHUT UUUUP!!!" I yelled. "SHUT UP! SHUT UP! SHUT UP! SHUT UP!"
"Spike?" Shining Armor was looking at me weirdly. I turned towards him in rage.
"SHUT UP!"
The sound of breaking bones and tearing flesh reached my ears. It sounded so loud and I felt like I was about to go deaf. It only angered me even more.
"SHUT UP!"
Crunch!
It got even louder and it was the only thing I could hear. At least it was until...
"SPIKE!"
"I HATE THAT NAME!"
Crunch!
"I love you Spike!"
"NO YOU DON'T! NOPONY EVER DID."
CRUNCH!
"I care about you!"
"FUCK YOU!"
Suddenly, silence. Absolutely no noise was heard. I no longer could hear the crunch of bodies being crushed or that useless name being called. I couldn't hear that damned voice comeing from everywhere but nowhere at all. I couldn't even hear that fire that I knew was surrounding me that should have been crackling and popping.
I opened my eyes and looked around me. The old me would've puked in disgust or have been traumatized for life. Now... I just stared. Right in front of me was a sea of dead bodies, blood and ashes scattered everywhere. I saw that stallion I picked up earlier and he looked traumatized. I looked beck to what used to be Shining Armor, now just a cold corpse laying in its own foul blood. I looked around some more and saw two more familiar faces. I fell on my knees.
"Mom... Dad..." I whispered. They were still breathing surprisingly, but they'd die in a few minutes. I blew my magical flames around their body and teleported them in front of Ponyville's hospital. Hopefully somepony'd find them and help them My fire had also healed them enough to make them last another 10 minutes. My head jerked upwards and I went through my memories. Did I destroy the hospital? I shrugged and turned back to Shining Armor and after hesitating, I teleported him to Ponyville too.
"Spike!"
"I HATE THAT NAME!"
That's enough friend. Darkness whispered. I wanted to cry so badly, but I forced myself not to. I wanted things to go back to normal.
But then again, when was anything ever normal in my life?
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5076613 Actually I ended up forcing myself to do it because I didn't want you all waiting for me just because I can't deal with a simple crush.
(P.S. She rejected me. But she said we can still be friends. I feel a little better I guess.)
purple you are horrid at your job
5077535 good for you btw do you still want , e to edit
5078115 Hope comes later in the story. It doesn't appear much because Spike had so little hope. Hope is the weakest one.
5078304 Well, I would, but I'm currently in school & my computer at home is SLOOOOW! But I'll try to get it to you.
5076613 OH
my god....spike is beyond the point of no return,this can't end well
Well then. Not what I was expecting. I guess Spike is finally seeing a little clearly. Sorta realizing what he's doing. Too bad it's just barely too late I mean he killed his big brother figure and most likely killed Twilights parents. But then again you probably got something planned for that. I wonder what Twilight is doing just falling next to Celestia I mean other than the obvious. The bone crunching scene reminded me of another story, except that one was a horn getting snapped off... And was an AiE story.
I liked it over all. Glad to see you did something cause it's way better to get yourself to do something than let your depression steap.
It takes some real effort to push through a dilemma like this to get work done, or at least from what I've seen. A few people I know that went through it just shut down for a few weeks. I've personally made up my mind that pursuing relationships of the sort isn't high on my list of priorities. It makes things a bit too complicated for my tastes. Okay, I'm rambling again. Long story short, I can appreciate what effort it took to get this out for us. Now onto the story.
I've noticed a few things while comparing Spike's way of speaking and his thoughts. In his head, he's still uncertain about his actions, only going through with them because his 'friends' say it's for the best. On the outside, he's almost constantly giving off the aura of a cold-blooded killer (no, the reptile pun wasn't intended.) You wouldn't expect that behavior from someone whose thoughts are so uncertain, almost like they aren't the same person at all. The Spike on the outside is more like a combination of Darkness and Confidence at this point, though it definitely leans closer to the former than the latter. Spike's original self seems to be mostly locked up in his mind undergoing the change needed to support the cruel actions the other two are already doing.
The second thing I noticed is that Hope is being oddly quiet at the moment. This could mean one of three things. The first is that Hope is just the one who's taking the longest to grow into an influential force on Spike, lining up with his complete lack of it before going mad. The second is that it could be the worst of the three voices, kind of how like how the worst evils in many stories are the ones with the heaviest locks on them. The third is that it could be what Spike needs to break out of the other two's control, causing them to want to keep it too small to do anything of the sort. Any of the above could be the case, or it could be something else I haven't even considered yet. That's the fun thing about theorizing, all the 'what if' scenarios that come from the plot taking a different course.
Hi Shining Armor, bye Shining Armor. Good to see that you're as useless as always. Honestly, it seems like the Royal Guard (Shining included) are little more than decorative lawn gnomes at this point. They either do absolutely nothing or (when they try to help out) end up failing miserably. They were left helpless by Nightmare Moon, and she just stirred up a breeze and teleported in a smoke cloud. This is a good summary for what would happen against an actually dangerous opponent. Bodies everywhere! The only ponies who get anything done in Equestria are young adults learning about friendship, and they couldn't do anything, so you had no chance. Say hello to Cerberus for me. And tell Hades I want the ten bits he owes me for our poker game.
The plot marches onwards and I'm still curious about what happens next. I'm guessing Discord crops up later, but that's the only certainty I can see beyond another pile of noble pony corpses being assembled. I look forward to the next update.
5080697 Yeah, it was pretty hard to get this out, but I said "No, I won't let them wait any longer just because I can't get over this crush!" So after a few hours of raging, backspacing and rewriting paragraphs (And maybe crying a bit), I made this.
Once again you're spot on, my friend. (Do you want me to tell you about hope, or do you want to learn for yourself?)
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When it comes to stories on this site, the tension of waiting to see what happens next is half the fun. In other words, no spoilers!
5081928 Okay then!
5082935 the mane 6 better not be able to use the elements of harmony on him and twlight has got to turn back in to a plane unicorn because she turned in to a alicorn because of friendship and she back stab her oldest friend the universe should take it away and please dont let them use elements of harmony on him ya but twlight back into a unicorn the mane 6 lose the elements and i love u great story
It seems the name trigger a memory affect. Bringing back all those bad emotions at once can be... bad for the brain.
5158851 So in other words, Princess of Friendship my ass!
5179093 yep you got right
Well its offical, I am now extremrely sad. Hindsight really does suck
I wanted to punch her sooo bad when she said this to him.
Hmmm... I see that Hope is being oddly quiet...
hihi, reading this again (and yes my old comments were cringy as shit, I don't blame the downvotes) and I can see why I never got that far in this story, it feels like a dramatic drop in quality compared to the first, perhaps it's because it's in a different story format, from diary writing to first-person real-time. but I honestly feel it shouldn't have gotten this bad, like for example the worst cliche I see used is him saying "he will burn for 30 mins before dying" or "I healed them enough to last another 10 mins" like that's just cliche as shit stuff you see in edgy stories. basically, my gripe is that this story series went from a relatively well-written story about mental issues to an edgy dragon that feels nothing going on a killing spree
I know this is an old story and not an example of how you write today was just so jarring I felt the need to point it out as pointless as that may be, this isn't meant as a comment to shit on you, just semi venting
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No no, I understand. To be honest, I keep this up as a reminder of the progress I've made over time. I was 14 when I wrote these, and I always loved the concept of writing darker stories, but as a young teen I didn't know how to convey these subjects properly. I'm considering making another fic and publishing that sometime soon. Maybe. Either way, I gotta say, at least it isn't on the level of "My Immortal", so I can at least give my younger self that, haha.
I had this sort of plan to connect his edgy killing spree to a much worse form of that episode where he got greedy. And I had a thing where in the third installation, he'd have these ponies doing his bidding against their will but he gets shown sympathy from a few of them and eventually has to let go of the cycle that kept him getting worse and worse. I also didn't want an ending with no consequences and a clean moment where they "fixed everything". Ponies were going to remember his actions for centuries and it would take a lot of time, effort, and healing for things to be okay again. But did I have the know how to pull off such an edgy plot? Pffft, no. I like edge, but it's gotta be done right, and I didn't know how at the time.
I'm surprised you revisited this. Both my artwork and my writing at this time were very... not-good. But as you can see with my profile pic, art has been going uphill and, if I do post that story of mine sometime soon and you bother checking it out, maybe you could see a rise in writing quality. Thanks for the comment, even if it is on am embarrassing work.