Piabetes

Pinkie Pie was stuck with diabetes one fateful afternoon.
Everyone had believed she was immune to sugar.
She was the party pony. How could she die? Of sugar, no less?

Pinkie can feel her soul slipping away, and so, she calls all her friends to talk with them one last time.

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LuckyLiar

LuckyLiar #1 · Jul 31st, 2014 · 1 · 1 ·

That was AMAZING
Almost cried here dude

TheSwordofFlames

TheSwordofFlames #2 · Jul 31st, 2014 · 1 · ·

Whaddaya mean "It wasn't really sad"? This was sad!

-swirl-

-swirl- #3 · Aug 1st, 2014 · · ·

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Thank you both!

ChaoticShadow

ChaoticShadow #4 · Aug 1st, 2014 · · 1 ·

Not to lie this was the saddest pinkie pie story ive read so far on fimfiction

-swirl-

-swirl- #5 · Aug 2nd, 2014 · · ·

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Really? I'm glad you think so! Sad is what I was going for, but I wasn't sure if it actually was sad or not. Now I know!

gamexpert1990

gamexpert1990 #6 · Aug 2nd, 2014 · · 1 ·

I noticed one typo:

Spike miht not be willing forever.

Missing the letter "g" - might

And if you want my opinion: You can remove that last sentence in your Author's Notes. This story IS a sad one...

This is where I usually say: "Thanks for writing!" , but I'm not really sure if I should thank you for making me cry...

Well, I suppose it is a beautifully sad story, so - Thank you for writing...

-swirl-

-swirl- #7 · Aug 2nd, 2014 · 1 · ·

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Ah, thank you for pointing that out. I'll fix it :3

And, wow, I've received a lot of comments saying that this is really sad, so I guess I'll omit that last sentence in the author's note!

TheSwordofFlames

TheSwordofFlames #8 · Aug 2nd, 2014 · · 1 ·

4789404 You see, this right here is an example of a good author. Taking tips and suggestions from their readers. You don't see many of those anymore.

-swirl-

-swirl- #9 · Aug 4th, 2014 · · ·

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Thanks for the compliment!

bronyslayer

bronyslayer #10 · Aug 5th, 2014 · · 2 ·

i didin't really find it sad. that is becuase you are a hartles basterd. pay no mind to my frend ther he can't show sadnes it is near imposiboll and please dont think that me and him think it is a bad story on the concherwery we think it is really good and we hope to see more storys by you keep up the good work

G-AB Acid

G-AB Acid #11 · Aug 30th, 2014 · · ·

Diabetes does not work like this. Like, at all.

I also don't know why people are saying this is a sad story; it barely has enough text to establish pathos... which would've been fine if the writing itself was able to rectify that... which it didn't.

It's a valiant first try, I guess... but you have much to learn.

-swirl-