"I almost died. I didn't though. I got turned into a mare. It hurt a lot but I didn't die. Thats a lot better than what most people who get a shard of metal through their spine can say."
This is a good story, but incredibly awkward to read with the abundance of spelling and grammatical errors. I'd offer to edit/proofread, but I don't know how that works on FIMfiction.
5077108 I'm in a postion now where I can't have a proof-reader, but if you really feel like helping then you can kindly point out my mistakes. Trust me when I say that I was a lot worse, but with ponies like you helpfully pointing out problems I'm getting better. So don't be afraid to tell me when I bucked up and thanks for the read!
5077163 I felt that having him be pre-destined to come to Equestria would have under mined his journey of rediscovering himself as a girl, being forced an atachment to some big adventure or likewise. It's all about how fast everything is moving and how she has not had a chance to just sit down for more than a day and REALLY think about whats happend to her and how she'll feel after she does. Even the descrptions, while not directly narrated by her, give some insight to whats shes thinking or feeling. You might notice that not only is her vocabulary changing but so is the descrptions as well. If a moral seems a bit heavy thats becuse thats whats always been most improtant to HIM, but now SHE has not had the time to think about much and so morals, which is what she always thought were the only thing she had going for her, are forgoten in this rush of stuff happening to her and so won't be has heavly used. It's just about her learning and growing and me trying my best to convey that. Hope that helps you to understand what it is I'm trying to do.ml Thanks for readin!
I'm sorry, I've reached my error tolerance limit, I suggest you fix the grammatical mistakes asap. This is a genuinely interesting story to me, but the misspelling and various other grammatical errors just keep me from enjoying the story. If it weren't for the grammatical errors I probably would have already put this in my favorites list.
You kept using 'quit', when you hould have been using 'quite'
5042233 I noticed that too, but I didnt have time to change it. Im gonna fix it and some other mistakes when I can get on a computer.
share not shard
you meant to write bat-pone or bat-pony/ponies?
5073444 Nope, bat-pon. It's just how Art Craft spelled it in her head, but I understand the confusion. Thanks for catching that other one though!
5073671
Now this looks interesting! Should point out though in your story description though, it should be per se, not per say.
5073806 Thanks for pointing that out, and double thanks for reading!
This is a good story, but incredibly awkward to read with the abundance of spelling and grammatical errors. I'd offer to edit/proofread, but I don't know how that works on FIMfiction.
5077108 I'm in a postion now where I can't have a proof-reader, but if you really feel like helping then you can kindly point out my mistakes. Trust me when I say that I was a lot worse, but with ponies like you helpfully pointing out problems I'm getting better. So don't be afraid to tell me when I bucked up and thanks for the read!
5077163 I felt that having him be pre-destined to come to Equestria would have under mined his journey of rediscovering himself as a girl, being forced an atachment to some big adventure or likewise. It's all about how fast everything is moving and how she has not had a chance to just sit down for more than a day and REALLY think about whats happend to her and how she'll feel after she does. Even the descrptions, while not directly narrated by her, give some insight to whats shes thinking or feeling. You might notice that not only is her vocabulary changing but so is the descrptions as well. If a moral seems a bit heavy thats becuse thats whats always been most improtant to HIM, but now SHE has not had the time to think about much and so morals, which is what she always thought were the only thing she had going for her, are forgoten in this rush of stuff happening to her and so won't be has heavly used. It's just about her learning and growing and me trying my best to convey that. Hope that helps you to understand what it is I'm trying to do.ml Thanks for readin!
I'm sorry, I've reached my error tolerance limit, I suggest you fix the grammatical mistakes asap. This is a genuinely interesting story to me, but the misspelling and various other grammatical errors just keep me from enjoying the story. If it weren't for the grammatical errors I probably would have already put this in my favorites list.
5323447 calm down. hell fix em eventually.
To take a quote from Turbo,