"I almost died. I didn't though. I got turned into a mare. It hurt a lot but I didn't die. Thats a lot better than what most people who get a shard of metal through their spine can say."
Soo, this story seems interesting, and even more so that the guy was transformed (relatively)immediately(upon arrival) I must say, i noticed quite a few grammar issues(and i am, by no means, the god of grammar myself) , BUT they did not realy destract me from the story. Hehe, the run to the reception was fun, i wonder what shenanigans will ensue next. Untill then, good luck^^
4917503 Glad your liking the story so far, and trust me if I can help it I will have more trollestia. Be prepared for it for she will rain down upon ye with a trolling like none you have had. Thanks for reading!
Remember spellchecker is your friend here, while you shouldn't completely trust the spellchecker system it does help fixing things. You need to not just trust what you wrote is good and check what you have written before hitting the post button. I suggest you look into a getting a proofreader and have someone take on the role of editor and go through the chapters you have posted to help fix your errors. Case and point when you say "Lunas" it means there is more than one Luna, but if you say 'Luna's' it indicates something belonging to her.
Ounce is a weight, every time you've used it thus far in memory, you should have used "once" instead. Not sure if you fix this in later chapters, but just putting it down while its fresh in my mind.
M-rays suggest that objects are at least partially transparent to magic. An interesting concept, but not completely surprising, considering that magic rays are seen to pass through air with ease, despite the presence of said air.
("Five-Twenty Five? I thought I would have been out longer.")
After another few minutes she felt confident enough to brave going out.
with her legs tucked in and Celestia on her bum in the chair.
Nodding Ryan stood up and, after taking off her hospital gown, slowly walked over to the reflective glass.
I thought she already had it off?
After she got over the size she noted that her eyes were still brown and lacked eyelashes but had no other real noticeable features.
leaning her head over opening her mouth at all angles into a mirror was just too funny.
and that the pony has found what it is they want to do for their life."
Celestia had moved to the window and opened the curtains staring at the sun as she told her tale. Ryan found it interesting and moved to sit next to her.
Ryan was growing tired of how often her face was tinting red.
Soo, this story seems interesting, and even more so that the guy was transformed (relatively)immediately(upon arrival)
I must say, i noticed quite a few grammar issues(and i am, by no means, the god of grammar myself) , BUT they did not realy destract me from the story.
Hehe, the run to the reception was fun, i wonder what shenanigans will ensue next. Untill then, good luck^^
4895952 Just wait till the next chapter, thats where things really start to pick up.
4917503 Glad your liking the story so far, and trust me if I can help it I will have more trollestia. Be prepared for it for she will rain down upon ye with a trolling like none you have had. Thanks for reading!
Remember spellchecker is your friend here, while you shouldn't completely trust the spellchecker system it does help fixing things. You need to not just trust what you wrote is good and check what you have written before hitting the post button. I suggest you look into a getting a proofreader and have someone take on the role of editor and go through the chapters you have posted to help fix your errors. Case and point when you say "Lunas" it means there is more than one Luna, but if you say 'Luna's' it indicates something belonging to her.
Ounce is a weight, every time you've used it thus far in memory, you should have used "once" instead. Not sure if you fix this in later chapters, but just putting it down while its fresh in my mind.
4918287 yayyy
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M-rays suggest that objects are at least partially transparent to magic. An interesting concept, but not completely surprising, considering that magic rays are seen to pass through air with ease, despite the presence of said air.
I thought she already had it off?