"I almost died. I didn't though. I got turned into a mare. It hurt a lot but I didn't die. Thats a lot better than what most people who get a shard of metal through their spine can say."
"Art, do you remember when we said the spell changes you based on a lot of factors that we are not fully aware of? That we can only hope everything goes right and that everything goes where it needs to be?"
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"Art, do you think we would have done something so drastic if there existed any other spell that could change a pony's form, that could be controlled?"
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"Art, why have you written this as your number one question?"
5302795 Shes wondering now if it's possible to do it again now that she isn't in critacle condition. Could they change her back, or could they send her back home? Remeber it was only becuse of her weird dreams that Luna even knew she exsisted and was able to track and grab her.
5306115 It's less that she wants to, and more for the sake of knowing. She stiil isn't sure yet what it is she wants to do. She wants all the information she can get before she makes any kind of decision, like when she asked to be woken up when she first got to Equestria.
5308364 I honestly do try, but writing it in a believable way for a characters point of view is tricky for me. I obviously don't have a background in writing, so I'm just trying my best like anyone else. As for the matter at hand, she just didn't think of it that way. I had think the way she did because that's how I think she would have. It's just a matter of what I think she would think. That is my defense my good sir.
5323447 Look, I understand that you're just trying to be helpful, but you have posted too many comments about the same problem now. I already knew about these problems and if you had looked more closely you would have seen that I already have a proof reader, they just happen to be very busy with their job right now and so does not have that much time to get online. Also, you have only read the first few chapters. I've gone to great lengths to improve upon myself and I think it shows as they go on, I just haven't had the time to double check everything because I DON'T HAVE A COMPUTER OF MY OWN. I've had to work out of my local library in order to get anything done. I promise that as soon as the x-mas craze is over and when I can get a new computer that the quality will improve, just please be patient and don't spam the comments.
Stories pretty good. A bit of mistakes but that's alright. I don't know if this is on purpose or not but you didn't mention what was in the Canterlot Collective. So I'm pretty curious what the reporter had written. Maybe it'll be in the next chapter? Anywho I'll wait for the next update which looks like it will be after Christmas?
5356083 Just whenever I can get it tuned up. It is in fact the last chapter, so Im working on it extra hard. And yes It will be mentiond what was writen in The Conterlot Colective in it as well.
5400768 Some of these things are more a personal touch than anything. I don't use ellipsis, I just use multiple periods. There is no other way to betray different lengths of time and honestly if I had the chance to become a professional writer I would use them as such. The same with all capitals with lots of exclamations. I feel it gets across the volume of the characters voice much better than using one or two exclamations. I understand that with these kinds of ideals it might be hard to be taken seriously, but I'm not afraid to assert what I think is creative ways to represent certain aspects of my story. I have made mistakes and I wont try and say they were all creative choices, but understand that when one truly is, that I will stick by it.
Hey, Pinkie again! I wanted to tell you that I've got the absolutely BEST "I'm really sorry about chasing you through Canterlot Castle" party planned for you. I just can't wait! But Twilight said I do have to wait until you come visit us here in Ponyville, and at first I was all like "Awww" but then I was like "WAIT, if I wait I can throw her TWO parties." First is the "I'm really sorry about chasing you through Canterlot Castle" party like I said before and the other ones a "Welcome to Equestria/Ponyville" party! So I'll wait for now, but please please PLEASE hurry and get here. I might just burst if I have to wait too long!
"I'm screwed."
no shit
"Art, do you remember when we said the spell changes you based on a lot of factors that we are not fully aware of? That we can only hope everything goes right and that everything goes where it needs to be?"
...
"Art, do you think we would have done something so drastic if there existed any other spell that could change a pony's form, that could be controlled?"
...
"Art, why have you written this as your number one question?"
5302795 Shes wondering now if it's possible to do it again now that she isn't in critacle condition. Could they change her back, or could they send her back home? Remeber it was only becuse of her weird dreams that Luna even knew she exsisted and was able to track and grab her.
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The fact that she wants to go through that again is pretty messed up in of itself.
5306115 It's less that she wants to, and more for the sake of knowing. She stiil isn't sure yet what it is she wants to do. She wants all the information she can get before she makes any kind of decision, like when she asked to be woken up when she first got to Equestria.
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You really ought to go into this stuff in your story instead of the comments.
5308364 I honestly do try, but writing it in a believable way for a characters point of view is tricky for me. I obviously don't have a background in writing, so I'm just trying my best like anyone else. As for the matter at hand, she just didn't think of it that way. I had think the way she did because that's how I think she would have. It's just a matter of what I think she would think. That is my defense my good sir.
5323447 Look, I understand that you're just trying to be helpful, but you have posted too many comments about the same problem now. I already knew about these problems and if you had looked more closely you would have seen that I already have a proof reader, they just happen to be very busy with their job right now and so does not have that much time to get online. Also, you have only read the first few chapters. I've gone to great lengths to improve upon myself and I think it shows as they go on, I just haven't had the time to double check everything because I DON'T HAVE A COMPUTER OF MY OWN. I've had to work out of my local library in order to get anything done. I promise that as soon as the x-mas craze is over and when I can get a new computer that the quality will improve, just please be patient and don't spam the comments.
Stories pretty good. A bit of mistakes but that's alright. I don't know if this is on purpose or not but you didn't mention what was in the Canterlot Collective. So I'm pretty curious what the reporter had written. Maybe it'll be in the next chapter? Anywho I'll wait for the next update which looks like it will be after Christmas?
5356083 Just whenever I can get it tuned up. It is in fact the last chapter, so Im working on it extra hard. And yes It will be mentiond what was writen in The Conterlot Colective in it as well.
5400768 Some of these things are more a personal touch than anything. I don't use ellipsis, I just use multiple periods. There is no other way to betray different lengths of time and honestly if I had the chance to become a professional writer I would use them as such. The same with all capitals with lots of exclamations. I feel it gets across the volume of the characters voice much better than using one or two exclamations. I understand that with these kinds of ideals it might be hard to be taken seriously, but I'm not afraid to assert what I think is creative ways to represent certain aspects of my story. I have made mistakes and I wont try and say they were all creative choices, but understand that when one truly is, that I will stick by it.
5400808 Like he was supposed to know that. He just called what ever he wanted.
Ah, Pinkie. Never, ever change.