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I knew Grim had a plan for Bloods power, but what motives could he have for giving Twily her memories?
Aurora losing her child to Blood would have sent RD into the same rage either way..... unless Grim is looking for a standoff against Twi after he gets fully powered up?
That could be interesting.
Twidash I love your plot twists and foreshadowing.
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Did you get the call back to Truth in Meanings?
4777158 Whateva.
4777172 Uh...no?
4777060 This Platinum Crown by Capn_Chryssalid..
(NOTE: It is imperative that you read The Best Night Ever by the same author, as it is TPC's prequel. It is also fairly important, but not vital, that you read TBNE's portion in Wanderer D's The Sweetie Chronicles.)
4777794 In TiM Rainbow was to become the Grim Reaper, aka the angel of death.
Siros last sight of Rainbow was as the angel of death.
Added to read later list
mantle.
Yeah. Guess who got to see the everloving shit get killed out of him?
Lookin' at her right now.
Try not to see the mare who DID do the killing...ah, who the hell am I kidding. Blood Dawn would cherish it. Bastard.
Dude, what the hell? You getting a man-crush/battlecrush on Rainbow?
For all that I adore RD right now, I still will contest this claim.
...It'll be more like 20 seconds, really.
Hastily sped?
Lol. Only four?
Period instead of a comma.
What's with you and making mares unable to conceive? Aurora, I understood because Blood Dawn, but...
First off, either change that last comma to a colon or to a period.
Secondly...
Comma instead of a period.
Probably should be a comma after "flight"
as his.
Blood Dawn's own.
Also, what exactly was in his last attack? Something like Siros's lifeforce literally infused in the wound to stop it from healing?
First comma should probably be a semicolon.
Period should be a comma.
Well, unless RD leaves herself open again, I think this battle just tipped in her favor, somewhat..
Probably should be a colon instead of a comma.
I don't think the hospital will care very much, though...
Comma after "sure" should be a period, and there should thus be a comma after "yes"
There should be a period after "'sure, maybe, I suppose'"
Oh, and though I didn't add it in, I think "giveaway" is one word, not two.
Compliment, and probably snarled.
Replace the comma with "for". Flows better IMO.
That period is unnecessary.
Phew...When I'm done helping you, Twidash, I think I'm going to put a limit of 7-8K words maximum on average for the next time(s) I edit.
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Changes posted, thanks!
Cadance would/should have died from her pregnancy, It was only because of Twilight that she lived. her inability was a result of that
Aurora was injured, although Twilight fixed that
Firestar was the only one who naturally had the issue.
but yeah, it has become a pattern hasn't it? I won't/wasn't planning on doing it again.
You and me both. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy the new chapter length as it lets me go a lot deeper into the characters and story, but it is... taxing to say the least.
That is my longest fight scene to date. How did I do?
4780262 Pretty good.
Though, I think this chapter is fine as 12K words because breaking it up between the first and 2nd halves would be a bit breaking flow-wise. Butyeah, mebbe tone it down next time.
i can just imagine for people close enough it would be a giant blur
4782709 No one would survive being close enough to see. the shockwaves alone would kill them
4782725 probably so but thats one heck of a fight
4782828 Thanks! I was worried about it, it came in as my longest fight to date at over 5k words.
I'm glad it was well received.
4784891 Thanks man. You should really enjoy the next chapter. It is amazing!
Matthew, you do realize that you made Rainbow completely obliterate everything to get back to Twilight?
She the real MVP.
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She would do anything for the one she loved, just like me.
4795798 Like I've said before, you are one smooth motherfucker.
That. Was. AWESOME!!!!!!!!! I mean not only that you kept Blood alive to feel immesurable pain before you killed him, but you did it like a Dragonball fighting style.(Just to let you know I love anime and Manga.) Throughout this whole series you have kept me at the edge of my seat wanting more and more, I mean this stuff is AwesomelyFantasticwithadashofRadicalness. But unfortunately I have finally caught up to you (which it is not a bad thing by the way.) and now I have wait until the next chapter. But that is not a bad thing because thanks to you I can start reading TAW and bats stuff while I wait for your next chapter. Before I leave though even though I mostly talk about Twi and Dash, does not mean that I am only interested in them. I definitely want to find out what happens to everypony as well(Firestar Radiant,etc.) CANNOT wait until the next one and as always keep up the good work.
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I snickered when you said blood should burn... I had just written the end of the fight
Well I am glad that I was able to help in a some small way. Twidash other than bats and Thaw who was the third writer and which story was it again I seem to forgotten it. Do not get me I am totally gonna read thaw and bats its just that I do not remember the third. Looking forward to chapter eight and I will back from time to time just to see how you are doing.
Forget the beginning of my new comment I read yours wrong.....sorry
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Growing pains
How many damn times has the name Firestar been used?
4801348 3271 times?
4801449 .3.
Growing Pains is that the writer or the story?
4802729 story
Can you also tell who the writer is then because I can not seem to find the correct story. I really would appreciate if you did....pretty please with sugar on top.
4803783 Peroth E
Thank you ever so much
I can totally see why Wind Beneath Her Wings By Taw is your favorite by him. I just finished chapter 3 and enjoying every minute of it. Do not worry though my opinion still stands as you and Pen Stroke are the top writers of this site. I gave him a comment stating that I am reading and enjoying his works, but I also told him that you recommended him to me and that if he should give any credit to anypony it should be you (I hope you do not mind and if you do I am really REALLY sorry.). Also just wondering how you doing both real life and story wise and also remember to keep it up and no pressure. I cannot speak for everypony but I know when it comes to an exciting story like this one I can be very patient.
4813815 well as expected work is kicking ma ass this month... As such I haven't gotten any work done on the story in a while.
That being said, I have a LOT of great ideas for the next chapter. As such I plan on putting a lot of work towards it this weekend. Although I have no idea when it will be out.
I can definitely understand how you feel work wise. For I work in freight and at least for the past few weeks, I have been getting a lot trucks that have been coming in one right after the other. Plus and here is the best part of the whole thing.... I GET ALMOST LITTLE OR NO HELP AT ALL.....YAY. I truly believe that Discord is having fun with the both of us. Now I cannot wait to see those great ideas you have in store for us, and as for the TBA date for the next chapter do not worry about it. I know that life is important and you will get it done when you do. I hope Discord will leave you alone for at least some of the time so you can sit back and relax, and try not to stress out too much with the story.
I sound like a broken record every time I finish the chapter but golly I'll say it again.... trully astounded by what I just read.
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This is easily my bad ass Rainbow chapter. I loved every second of it.
The build up to it was perfect in my opinion.
5175284 I was getting VERY impatient with the whole one second, two second
But it added a whole new level of intensity and lust to find out what happened
5175289 she made a promise to kill him in ten seconds.
I actually like that, it made it easer to choreograph in my head when I wrote it and it also showed how fast they were moving. Every section of fight was a second for them
5175294 which made it that much more thrilling
5175294 and we both now how much of a softie I am...
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Yes, yes it did.
You can probably see why I said to read Sinister actions, blood oath, and ten seconds in one go.
5175294 so you know how my body was filed with joy to see the family reunited again
5175300 Things get nice again in the next two chapters. And Shower fun does occur between them
5175302 should I read 'shower fun' after 'a return to normalcy'
5175302 ever since "A Life Lived For Other's" I've been eagerly awaiting a CALM chapter filled with love and happiness.
5175310 Yes, I do summarize it in the author notes of Misconstrued Intentions, but it's not the same as reading it.
There are some great jokes you will miss if you skip it.
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Firestar's wedding, second first date, the honeymoon, and sorrowful truth don't count?
I thought second first date was one of my bests.
5175324 you gotta point, I'll give you those....
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You should really like 8 and 9,
You won't like 10... no one does
5175331 OH DAMN..... I'm not surprised, we'll need a chapter like that to keep the readers on their toes and still interested in the story to stay with it.
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A good story should make you happy and sad, it has to touch on every emotion between those two as well..
Don't get me wrong, I love the feel of A live lived as much as my readers did. But if that was all I did, without conflict.... The story wouldn't be half as good.
That being said, I'm thinking about a short story when this is done with Aurora, about the day she got her cutie mark.