It had seemed like such a normal day when she had gotten up this morning. True, the previous evening had been spent leaving an anonymous love note for her best friend, but she had not expected to go from pining over her to showering with her in a single cycle of the sun and moon. Yet here she was. And now, the mare of her dreams had just uttered a phrase from her fantasies. “Rarity... um... voulez-vous coucher avec moi, ce soir, mon cherie?”
There was a long pause as Rarity’s nethers fought against her brain for control of her blood supply. The brain was not faring well. She froze, uncertain if her own senses could be trusted. She can’t possibly mean... Oh, please let her mean! “Darling... did you just ask me if I would like to sleep with you tonight?”
Forelegs wrapped around her and a warm wet tongue began to lick her ears. “Um... yes. If that’s okay with you...” Fluttershy began to lightly nibble and kiss Rarity’s ears lovingly.
Rarity melted into the embrace, all thoughts of her mane forgotten. “A-are you certain, my beloved? I would love nothing more, but I don’t want you to rush into—” Again, further thoughts were thoroughly disrupted by the tongue inserted into her ear.
Fluttershy giggled a little at Rarity’s sudden lack of focus. “I’m very certain. I have never been so certain. But are you certain? We’ve been on a real date and I’ve met your parents, so we’re past ‘too soon’ now, right?”
Fluttershy bit lightly into her neck, then whispered breathily into her ear. ”You see, dinner made me very excited. I loved kissing you and being fed by you. I’m either going to spend the night pleasuring myself, or pleasuring you. Which would you prefer I do?”
Rarity was positively drenched now, and not just because of the shower. She laughed a little frantically. “I think the whole concept of ‘too soon’ can be forgotten, my love.” She gasped as Fluttershy caressed her flank, then turned her head to face her lover and put on what she hoped was a serious face. “This is you now, isn’t it? I don’t want any artifice. I will not make love to ‘New’ Fluttershy or ‘My’ Fluttershy or any of that nonsense.”
Fluttershy tittered a little in embarrassment, but wasn’t embarrassed enough not to steal another kiss from the frazzled fashionista. “I don’t need them anymore. I’m just... me. I would really really like to do some of the things I’ve been dreaming about doing with you, if that’s all right.” She resumed nibbling lightly on Rarity’s ear as the water continued to pour over them.
Rarity closed her eyes and exhaled shakily. “Yes, yes, a thousand times yes!” She turned in Fluttershy’s embrace and kissed her passionately, her tongue exploring Fluttershy’s mouth in quick, darting movements before she pulled back to pant heavily. “Do you have any idea how much I have wanted to hear those words? I confess, I had even hoped that our massage might have led to a, how shall I put it, ‘happy ending’ earlier.”
Fluttershy leaned forward to redirect her nibbling to Rarity’s neck, humming happily. “Oh, you are a naughty filly, aren’t you Rarity? You should have told me... I wouldn’t have minded.”
Rarity felt her knees weaken. “Um... Fluttershy, as much as I am enjoying this... perhaps we should finish our shower and move to your bed? If you keep doing — aah yes, that — I am going to collapse. I should like for that to be on a bed, please.”
Reluctantly pulling apart, they finished cleaning up with only a bare minimum of teasing from the pegasus. After drying off they headed towards the bedroom, Rarity getting her own back by putting the tiniest extra bit of sway into her hips and lifting her tail high as she walked, which was very well received if the blush on Fluttershy’s cheeks was anything to go by. Satisfied that her love wasn’t getting it all her own way, Rarity lay down on top of the bed, more aware than ever of just how very naked she was. Oh my love, do with me what you will, make me yours!
However, no ravishment came. She looked up at Fluttershy in some confusion; the need was clear in her eyes, but no action was forthcoming. She seemed frozen in indecision... Oh, right, she’s never done this before either. Hmmmm. Well, no help for it then. “I am sorry, my love, I suppose I expected you to take charge because of the sheer passion you have been showing tonight. Come, lay with me. We’ll discover our bodies together.”
And then came the pounce. Rarity quite suddenly found her mouth full of happy squealing pegasus tongue as forelegs wrapped themselves around her in a crushing embrace. She broke the kiss after a good few seconds of divine tongue-wrestling, gasping for air. “P-please, my lovely, not quite so rough. I am excited as well but we don’t have to rush.” She re-initiated the kiss, but more lightly this time. “How would you like to progress matters, my dear? I will admit to never having been with another pony myself, but as an avid reader of romance I believe I know a few things at least. Or would you prefer to explore me for yourself?”
“Um... I think I want to... do that second thing.” Fluttershy smiled shyly, but not innocently. “Um... lie back please.” After she complied Shy began to trail hot, wet kisses along her neck. Rarity groaned at the sudden display of aggression, reveling in the sensations of warmth and wetness pressing into her fur, and shivered as the cool air wafted over those areas already lavished with Fluttershy’s attentions.
“Y-yes, darling, that’s wonderful. Do with me as you wish, I welcome it!” In truth she more than welcomed it; she hungered for it. She had been attracted to this mare for ages. Many had been the nights spent in lonely seclusion, reading about the scandalous romance of Princess Platinum and Private Pansy (hardly historically accurate but who was she to complain) and imagining the two of them playing out the same scenes — in full costume of course, ones lovingly created by her own hooves. Pity about her sheets, but she’d managed to get the stains out most of the time.
While she kissed Rarity softly about the chest and neck, Fluttershy’s hooves began to softly stroke her coat, drawing little circles on her belly fur. “Rarity, um... I sort of have a confession to make.” Shy kissed her lightly on the muzzle. “I’ve never been with anypony else, but... well, do you know Cloud Kicker?”
“Well, yes. Weather team, very brazen as I recall. Likes to have relations with casual partn— Fluttershy, you surely don’t mean you slept with her?!” Don’t panic! She is clearly in love with me. I-it is okay if this is not her first time.
“Oh, oh no! Nothing like that! But she loved to make me blush by telling me the things she would do with mares... in detail. Um... I’ve never tried it myself but... I think I know a few things too.” She blushed heavily at this confession. Now Rarity will think I’m terrible for not being innocent! “Please don’t hate me...” Oh Fluttershy, you’re so loose.
Rarity leaned up to comfort her with a nuzzle. “Fluttershy, that’s nothing to be ashamed of! You hardly had a choice in the matter after all. I am minded to thoroughly chastise that mare for treating you so. I must admit I never expected you to be the more worldly of us, but this is hardly the first time you have surprised me. Very well, if you know the techniques I suppose now would be an opportune time to apply them. Please, darling, make love to me, make me your mare!”
“Okay!” the pegasus chirped, smiling happily. She began to lightly caress Rarity with her hooves again, but then she remembered something Cloud Kicker had mentioned doing. Oh, that was so embarrassing! Steeling her resolve, she began to drag her wing slowly across Rarity’s thighs.
Rarity was quite enamored with the way Fluttershy’s hooves felt as they lightly stroked her chest, but when the wing touched her... “Oh!” She began to giggle madly. “Oh my, I —haha!— am sorry my dearest, I know that wasn’t likely the reaction you were hoping for but I am—” she laughed even more loudly, “—quite ticklish there!”
“Oh, um, sorry. Let me try something else?”
Recovering from her giggling fit, Rarity shook her head at their foolishness. “Oh this is silly. Here, let’s just kiss for a bit and stop trying to force the pace. I really don’t expect you to be a skilled lover, my darling. Just love me, and that will be perfection enough.” She wrapped her forelegs around Fluttershy. “Come here, my lovely mare.”
The two began to kiss each other, slowly and tenderly at first, then more passionately as they warmed up. Rarity ran her hooves through Fluttershy’s soft pink mane, her tongue dancing and swirling around the other mare’s in a sensuous waltz. They broke the kiss, both quite breathless. “L-lie back, my sweet, I believe it’s my turn to play with you for a while.”
Rarity suddenly had the utmost sympathy for Fluttershy’s earlier attack. Seeing her lying there so vulnerably, looking up with those huge aqua eyes full of nothing but love and trust, the unicorn just wanted to dive headfirst into a sea of passion and make her cry out with delight. She shivered with anticipation. This is no dream. My beloved is here before me, waiting to be made love to. She gave an excited little squeal of happiness.
Now, where did she say— Rarity began to kiss the leading edge of Fluttershy’s left wing, causing the pegasus’ eyes to widen in surprise as she gasped a bit. Hmmm, yes, on the right track then. Let’s try... Kissing further and further down, she reached and llightly nibbled at the base of the wing joint. Suddenly, her lover’s wings both snapped rigid. Oh! Yes, I believe we have a reaction! Hmmm... what about... Rarity gently massaged the inside of the wing, at a spot just below the coverts.
This time Fluttershy’s whole body went rigid, eyes scrunched shut and mouth open in a silent scream; then she melted into the bed, her muscles seeming to relax all at once as she turned to jelly. Fluttershy slowly opened her eyes and gazed up at her lover, panting heavily. “R-Rarity... um... d-do that again please?”
Rarity stared at her own hooves in shock. Oh... Mother you really weren’t kidding were you? So focused was she on attempting to please her partner (and trying to decide on how to proceed further) that she scarcely noticed Fluttershy move - that is, until a very warm tongue began to lick her horn.
“What—”
“Shhhhh. Um, keep doing what you’re doing.”
In the pounding rain outside, Angel lay huddled in his hutch. He hated the rain, all the more so for having trapped him in here instead of the warmth of the cozy home he shared with the Yellow One. An ear perked up suddenly as he heard a high pitched squeal of joy, followed closely by a booming, instantly recognizable voice.
“FLUTTERSHY!”
A flock of birds burst from the nearby tree in fright, and all the animals woke from a sound sleep to look around fearfully for predators. Finding none, they uneasily settled back down to sleep.
Angel flopped back onto his straw in disgust, grumbling to himself. Of all the bad luck, now they were mating! That meant the fussy one would be around even more.
How long until Angel tries to drive off Rarity... lol
It feels weird to be this happy for the two of them. I read the alternate version first, and then skimmed to be sure they were the same, but this is just as fantastic. I'm wondering how you'll end this, though. Because this seems like a perfect spot to me.
1168383 Your right, this is a very good place to end the story. That said, I have no desire whatsoever to see this end, and demand more. Because even if continuing the story might seem forced and unnecessary, I have believe that Steel could make it work. Probably best not to listen to me though, or this story will turn into a detailed chronicle of Fluttershy's and Rarity's lives that doesn't finish until they die happily together in their eighties. And then I'll demand a sequel.
1168770 Haha Believe me, I'd have no problem with following them into their 80's. I just want one of those super awesome, happily ever after endings. We could've said "Happily ever after" a couple times now and the new chapters continue to surprise and don't feel out of place so I'm happy the story's continued. As long as Steel can keep it that way, I'm happy to follow these two through whatever comes their way. Good times for all.
Chengar's Cloud Kicker is starting to become the Cloud Kicker
1169257 As she should be. She is the winning pony.
Thank you for writing this. It really makes me happy whenever I see Green in my update queue.
This is an amazing story and I would be completely satisfied if it should end here. However, I do not think that it will be ending quite yet...
damn it. i cant read it either way with a stable mind. I can't read it without thinking "GF would NOT approve." Sorry bro, I'm sure it's great, but I can't read it. Mind telling me if there was any real plot development, or if it was just a lemon?
Woo-hoo! New chapter! = best ship!
1169888 the edited version is pretty tame, but suffice to say this is 14.5 for a reason, its meant to take place between the storyline. You can safely skip this chapter and miss no real story developments.
1170744 again i cannot read this with sound mind, cause the only thing that comes to mind is "this feels as bad as porn" so im really sorry, but thanks for bothering to tell me what i did (or didnt) miss
If this ain't the end, when will it end?
Cause I have to say it and I am sorry for that but I felt that the story became tame shortly after the confession and all.
Also this seems like a very good conclusion, maybe just a wrapping things up a bit and this story could be complete.
After this I really can't see how much you can add to the relationship.
So I am asking this not because I do not like the story but I would like to see this complete without any unnecessary chapters.
hmm i like
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I am completely okay with that.
Wonderful chapter dear, I appreciate the edited chapter, although; that might have been pushing it for tame. Anyway, I can't wait to see how they break it to the rest of the six; and Spike. Especially spike
Wonderful chapter as always darling Ciao
*Reads the A/N at the beginning* I don't know... Is the red pill Cherry, Strawberry, or Raspberry flavored?
1176570 Passion fruit of course.
1176576 ... Meh, Mint it is, then.
1176590 Quite alright my friend, that's why I edited a version to be non-explicit.
... Poor Angel Bunny... xD Sounds like SOMEBUNNY needs to get laid himself! XD
(Am I a bad person? I am, aren't I? ; ; )
OUTSTANDING!
So that was the green pill. I'm gonna go see what the red pill has to offer. Se you there!
I just want to say one thing to all of you who took the green pill...
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It's actually done in a very tasteful manner, and I'm typically very picky about that.
Are you french or just fluent? 1176603
1176650
"Pets of Ponyville" by, well, me. It's with Opal. The two little hellions make for one nice if decadent couple.
1179880
In the Mysterious Mare O' Do Well when Applejack gets out of Rainbow's hug it looks like she kisses on the cheek. Watch it really slowly
I took the red pill.....but I want more
1187014
An excellent lesson for anyone to learn Another, which I'm especially happy to see you already have learned, is how to accept criticism with grace and dignity. I was having a very bad day yesterday when I posted that comment, and had since been worrying that I'd offended you.
I DO like this story, and I'm interested in reading whatever you come out with next.
1187398 Oh more coming, I have a nice start on chapter 15 and am now planning out the next arc and interlude.
If you wrote this as clop, can you also write some other... events, as such, as well?
I MUST KNOW MOAR ABOUT THE CMC!
1192417 The cmc will have another interlude, but it will definitely not be mature. Foals after all.
1192434
Sorry. I meant for those two to be separate. I meant, are you going to write more... descriptive examples of the role-play Pinkie and Twilight get up to, or what Applejack and Dashie get up to?
I wonder if the CMC will experiment when seeing their sisters (and idol) messing around with each other.
It's their curiosity, after all...
1192444 I do intend to revisit those scenes and write them out in more detail yes. Now that I have a means to do so without making the main storyline mature.
1192459
So, are they all going to be add-ons to "Red", or will each pairing have it's own separate clopfic?
1192471 They'll all be on Red, that's why I added "Current chapter" in the description. That will be updated as I add more scenes.
1192481
But does that mean you aren't going to update any previous chapters?
1192523 Oh sorry. What I mean is that I will write out the scene from the chapter. Like for Appledash it will pick up right at the scene where they were laying down in the orchard.
1192537
Oh, goodie.
I'm not a huge fan of clop, but we all know that clop should be a bonus to the story, not the whole story.
INB4 any punderful wons based on bonus, and whole.
RED PILL totally worth it! 10 pts to Gryffindor!
1181755 neither sadly. But when I research for a chapter I don't mess around. I did searches for correctly written french names for the dishes in the restaurant. The phrase Fluttershy utters is of course from the popular song.
1171004 chapter 15 finishes act 1. act 2 begins after the interlude.
I liked the ending very much it made me laugh! I do love this fanfic alot good work writing it all <3
1193381 Well done then, that's some good research
1216158 I agree, well said
1192434 that and the site prohibits foal clop. It's in 'da rules!
Also this has been on my read later list since chapter 3 or 5 (early on at least) and I'm glad to say that I finally got around to reading it... the question is do I take the red pill when I get home? Welp, one story off the list and one back on
1223756 Well no, foal clop is allowed. I just would not do that to the cmc. It was kind of a huge deal for them to even kiss. Regarding the red pill... it's explicit, I am not going to lie. It's a mature romantic love scene with nothing held back, but its very tasteful. I have had several people say that despite the fact they normally avoid mature stories that mine was very well done. It's up to your personal tolerance. The edited chapter is a bit racy as well, but it cuts away from anything outright mature.
1225248 well its really good. Im gonna have to find this Aurora and tell her how good i think it looks
1225404 http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Aurora the art itself was done by Spitfire Fluttershy plays golf.
1216158Ok thanks