Sunset Shimmer is starting to regain her old self. Can't say if that's a good or bad thing.
Welp, the caverns of insanity were dull and mind numbing, but things are really getting heated now. I wonder why some of these damned don't just end their lives to escape their suffering, but I suppose that's the magic at work of Tartarus. Taking the easy way out would defeat the purpose.
And Twilight gains her first set of injuries. And an ominous foreshadowing injury from Sunset...
Judging by the affects of the tornado and your cover art, I think I know who's going to be the next lord. Let's see if I'm right.
I wonder why some of these damned don't just end their lives to escape their suffering, but I suppose that's the magic at work of Tartarus. Taking the easy way out would defeat the purpose.
This topic will actually be addressed in an offhand sorta way, and soon.
4457876 I wish I could do more with the character, actually. There's a lot of potential in him. Unfortunately this is all we see of him in the TvE universe, and in No Heroes he doesn't stick around for very long before going kaput.
Maybe I could do an origin story... although that's been done to death and I hate being unoriginal.
You know, you could probably rate this story TEEN until the actually mature content is visible. Ive seen ongoing stories uprate themselves before when authors want to explore more mature stuff.
4458842 Hmm, I dunno. Going 'Teen' for the first few chapters might earn me a larger audience, but at the same time I'm never sure what qualifies. I could change it over for a little while, at least until I get to the chapter that I'm fairly certain would be of a 'mature' level.
A Nilgiri Tahr, also referred to as an ibex. In my No Heroes stories I used them as the dominant race of Nildia, my MLP variant of India. Since I consider the No Heroes and Trixie vs. Equestria universes to have the same history, it also made sense that they would have the same races.
That said, I acknowledge that using them will confuse some people, so I didn't mention them often.
Just when I thought that Sunset was a repentant pony, you 180° her apparent character back to pre-EqG. Done well, of course. The thing is, now I'm unsure if she and Twilight are going to become friends, or if Sunset plans to later betray her. Though you did make quite a show of Sunset and Twilight insisting they needed each other to survive. Hmmm.
Sombra was well done. The gorey scenes were brilliant and, while brutal, not over-the-top. So now onto the next Lord. And Twilight already has a messed-up wing. Shiiiiet. Oh, for future reference, I will PM you corrections separately.
6708054 I was going to wait to respond to your comments until after you finished the story, but this one?
I have to ask: have you really not heard of Dante's Inferno? It's only one of the most famous depictions of the afterlife ever devised in the history of literature. I mean no offense, it's just that I thought everyone had at least heard of it. A large number of our common interpretations of hell originated from its pages.
I knew what the winds were going to be as soon as they were mentioned! They were a very true to Dante homage. Though, seeing Lust placed so close to Greed was interesting, since by Dante-Logic, Sombra and his territory would have been farther into Tartarus. His scenes were interesting, but considering the chapter length and the way everything has been fleshed out in here so far, I was hoping that there'd be more of a Sombra-tease.
Sunset hesitating to help Twilight makes me think that her sin wasn't greed at all, but something much farther into Tartarus. Betrayal, maybe?
Sunset Shimmer is starting to regain her old self. Can't say if that's a good or bad thing.
Welp, the caverns of insanity were dull and mind numbing, but things are really getting heated now. I wonder why some of these damned don't just end their lives to escape their suffering, but I suppose that's the magic at work of Tartarus. Taking the easy way out would defeat the purpose.
And Twilight gains her first set of injuries. And an ominous foreshadowing injury from Sunset...
Judging by the affects of the tornado and your cover art, I think I know who's going to be the next lord. Let's see if I'm right.
Till then!
This topic will actually be addressed in an offhand sorta way, and soon.
Whew! I forgot just how long some of these are.
Sombra was always my biggest peeve during season 3. They took badass villain design and gave him the personality of "Head Goon."
I like your interpretation a lot better.
4457876
I wish I could do more with the character, actually. There's a lot of potential in him. Unfortunately this is all we see of him in the TvE universe, and in No Heroes he doesn't stick around for very long before going kaput.
Maybe I could do an origin story... although that's been done to death and I hate being unoriginal.
You know, you could probably rate this story TEEN until the actually mature content is visible. Ive seen ongoing stories uprate themselves before when authors want to explore more mature stuff.
4458842
Hmm, I dunno. Going 'Teen' for the first few chapters might earn me a larger audience, but at the same time I'm never sure what qualifies. I could change it over for a little while, at least until I get to the chapter that I'm fairly certain would be of a 'mature' level.
4457876
What do you think of ^this^ idea?
If these two ever reach the point where they unashamedly share gallows humor, I'd like to see Sunset say "I'll be your wingmare."
Just who or what is a nilgiri?
4476877
I knew someone was going to ask that.
A Nilgiri Tahr, also referred to as an ibex. In my No Heroes stories I used them as the dominant race of Nildia, my MLP variant of India. Since I consider the No Heroes and Trixie vs. Equestria universes to have the same history, it also made sense that they would have the same races.
That said, I acknowledge that using them will confuse some people, so I didn't mention them often.
I have this bizarre feeling Cadence is the next lord.
4521465
*averts his eyes with an amused smile*
Damn, man. Winds of Passion, huh? Creepy.
Just when I thought that Sunset was a repentant pony, you 180° her apparent character back to pre-EqG. Done well, of course. The thing is, now I'm unsure if she and Twilight are going to become friends, or if Sunset plans to later betray her. Though you did make quite a show of Sunset and Twilight insisting they needed each other to survive. Hmmm.
Sombra was well done. The gorey scenes were brilliant and, while brutal, not over-the-top. So now onto the next Lord. And Twilight already has a messed-up wing. Shiiiiet.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Oh, for future reference, I will PM you corrections separately.
4930058
I appreciate that.
What, gore? I see no gore. You're clearly confusing this for a much later chapter.![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
Tartarus: Where Pixar lamps go to die![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
5339861
Hah! You're the first person to comment on the reference.
Golly Jimineti! I forgot how pathetic Sunset was in these earlier chapters. This is going to be a a ball all over again, I can tell.![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
...How in the world did I miss that Sunset was Virgil until halfway through this chapter? Brb, burning my liberal arts degree.
So where is the story that inspired you to write this? Is it an actual book? Or another story on fimfiction?
6708054
I was going to wait to respond to your comments until after you finished the story, but this one?
I have to ask: have you really not heard of Dante's Inferno? It's only one of the most famous depictions of the afterlife ever devised in the history of literature. I mean no offense, it's just that I thought everyone had at least heard of it. A large number of our common interpretations of hell originated from its pages.
Here, let Wikipedia explain.
I knew what the winds were going to be as soon as they were mentioned! They were a very true to Dante homage. Though, seeing Lust placed so close to Greed was interesting, since by Dante-Logic, Sombra and his territory would have been farther into Tartarus. His scenes were interesting, but considering the chapter length and the way everything has been fleshed out in here so far, I was hoping that there'd be more of a Sombra-tease.
Sunset hesitating to help Twilight makes me think that her sin wasn't greed at all, but something much farther into Tartarus. Betrayal, maybe?![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)