Shackled Heart of Ice

Lost and confused Roman awakens in the middle of Everfree Forest with no memories of his past or where he is from. Little did he know that with him came a new threat Equestria had forgotten long ago.
This is his journey.

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Ch.1: Blue nights and tea · 17th Apr 2014 · 1,469 words
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The General · 17th Apr 2014 · 1,966 words
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Blizzards in Bliss · 23rd Jul 2014 · 2,501 words
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Garnet Shield

Garnet Shield #1 · Apr 17th, 2014 · 2 · · Ch.1: Blue nights and tea ·

Ok i skimmed through it and it doesn't seem too bad i caught a few grammatical errors in there but nothing too bad. It's always nice to meet a fellow brony especially a fellow writer. check out my story so far maybe you can get a bit of inspiration. Till then stay classy my friend
P.S. side note consider adding some music to certain chapters using the YouTube link and if you need extra assistance I'm always willing to help in my spare time and if you need help with descriptions i can gladly oblige you just give a rough summary of your story or give a small piece of information about it that won't actually spoil the story itself also never say your bad at the description because that is what captures some pony's interest in your story in a way the description is the most important part besides the main plot of your story never do anything like this

(Your whole Life Changes In a Cartoon Movie.The Cartoon movie Is MLP.You Watched your Programma Lats night but Then you get black out when a flits Light came into your Tv Screen.You woke Up in ponyville.You was no Human anymore, You was Your Own MLP Character.You got Every Piece of Body What a pony got.But sowly when you Walked through Ponyville. You meet your Fav MLP Character in Your own eyes!)

Overlord Sparkle

Overlord Sparkle #2 · Apr 17th, 2014 · · · Ch.1: Blue nights and tea ·

This was the first thing I thought of...

"Nico! Cousin! Let's go bowling!"

North

North #3 · Feb 15th, 2015 · 1 · · Ch.1: Blue nights and tea ·

This is all very mysterious. By the way, does Roman have a Cutie Mark? If so, what is it?

Flare Rain

Flare Rain #4 · Feb 15th, 2015 · · · Blizzards in Bliss ·

5626589 I seemed to have forgotten to fix that. Thanks for pointing it out though ^ ^ ((I believe I planned for a sword with a rose around it)) I'll be sure to fix it.

North

North #5 · Feb 15th, 2015 · 1 · · The General ·

Hmm...Crystal Empire...snow storm....is the ancient nemesis Sombra? That would make sense, but...(this is random) I don't think Sombra knows French or Prench or whatever, and the person who wrote that letter to Celestia said "Au revoir" near the end.

Or maybe Sombra does know Prench, that would be random and cool, or maybe I'm way off the mark.

North