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The Crossover Channel EC


I love to write, wither it's music or stories. But I also love MLP: FIM. Go Luna! I write stories based on movies/tv shows/Books. So I guess you can call this: Based on That!

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When Pinkie Pie's parents die, she sends out letters to all of her sisters for the funeral. But when none of them RSVP she gets her sisters together to talk things out. When Pinkie Pie moved to Ponyville she didn't leave the rock farm on good hoofs. Maud was the only one who was able to forgive her. Pinkie really wants her sisters to pay their parents there respect, even if it means that she won't be able to.

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Comments ( 11 )

Wow, sad but really good.:twilightsmile:

Some grammar errors but other than that it is good.

Not bad, perhaps a bit rushed. What really needs work is the spelling and use of capitals. You are putting way to much trust in spell check. Try reading the story out loud or asking one of the editors available on the site for help. Some examples of what I mean are,

throw instead of through

where for were

there for their

a fence for offense
these are a few that I found there are others, punctuation, wrong word and so forth, good luck.

I think you need to learn the difference between 'there' and 'they're'

There's grammar and spelling failure all over the place and Pinkie feels a little less bubbly than she should, but other than that I like it. Keep it up!

*Looks at story image*

... You know Pinkie's middle name is Diane right?

Awesome!!!

Grammar mistake: "We? No a fence Pinkie but you didn't exactly leave that farm on good terms.

It's offence

Spelling error in the short description:

After the death of there parents Pinkie Pie thinks it's time for all of her sister's to meet up on the rock farm.

- there

Spelling errors in the long description:

When Pinkie Pie moved to Ponyville she didn't leave the rock farm on good hoofs.

- hooves

Pinkie really wants her sisters to pay their parents there respect,

- their respects

Good story look forward to more:pinkiehappy: and don't swat the grammar you'll get it

Good sadfic so far. Some minnor grammer issuses here and there, but nothing big.

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