Several of you chapters seem to have this one signature line. Something that really stands out. Something like your garden variety ant at a picnic walking up to you, reaching behind an Oxygen molecule and slapping you across the face with a 15" dildo, then confidently walking away. Something you remember.
This was the chapter I've been waiting for...since before I even knew I was waiting for it. I mean, this rates right up there with the Twilight-Trixie anger-sex scene from like...book two, I think it was...as the hottest thing ever. Incredible. Absolutely incredible
Dear fucking god....this was beautiful, and exactly what I have been waiting for. Order sometimes needs to dominate Chaos in order to keep things in check, and in this case, you brought it to its almost literal and sexual interpretation, very nicely done.
That's incorrect. Also, there should be a comma in between those 2 "very"s. Also, "pooh" should be "poo". When characters in kids' shows say that, it's because the writer wanted to say "shit", but they couldn't say "shit", so they had to say "poo". It's the difference between saying "ass" and "butt", or saying "damn" and "darn", or saying "hell" and "heck". Discord was referring to fecal matter. He was not referring to an orange talking bear from a cartoon by A. A. Milne.
4580693 Because you're not pointing out typos (when they're outright typos, I always change them). You're rewriting and telling me I can't use the phrase 'oh pooh' when the dictionary supports me, and I hear five times more from you than from the people who're liking it.
Which is not to say that you're not liking it, but it doesn't FEEL like you're having fun reading this wacky huge clopfic epic, it feels like you're being very frustrated by what you see as imperfections, often ones I meant to employ!
Settle down and everything will be fine. I still love you but you really do not get the difference between a typo and wilful messing with the language, and I think it's because you're trying too hard to find any typo or mistake and it's ruining the book for you (again, or maybe not)
I can't tell if you're yanking my chain or if you're simply Celestia's gift to proofreaders and just can't turn it off ever. If you're having fun I'm not sure it matters. I'm just going to keep on sticking in textual quirks that push the reading experience this way and that, on purpose, and if you're that dismayed by being asked to write a story then I won't make you do it.
But you should try. You might like it, and find it oddly liberating
4581468 Oh, I'm still having fun, and I still love these stories. It's just that it's impossible to tell which mistakes are intentional and which mistakes aren't. Of course it feels obvious to you, but that's because you know because they were your idea, but most of the time, intent doesn't translate through text. Also, the "pooh" thing was entirely my fault; I had no idea that that was a real word. Also, if I stop pointing these things out, then you'll never know about the real typos, and your stories will forever have them.
I know I've been complaining a lot through the last few chapters, and I'm sorry about that. I am fussy.
I have to praise the scene between Celestia and Chaos. That was amazing, and well done, and really worked. It explored both characters well, and had some amazing imagery as well. A very nice chapter.
I find it interesting that we both interpret Celestia the same way: as an avatar of Order and Law.
And the Los Pegasus mountains are always interesting.
You know, maybe I'm late to say this, but every time Crowbar or Derpy are mentioned, I think back to previous scenes with Twilight and either of them and I'm just waiting for a scene with Twilight saying 'You retarded ponies are what's wrong with society. Should just kill the lot of you the moment it comes to light you're mentally handicapped, save us intelligent ponies the trouble of putting up with you.' I'm just waiting for it, because by now, that kind of disgusting thought process would fit Twilight perfectly. I wouldn't even bat an eye in disbelief. I'd just be reaching for the rifle and having thoughts of taking this little purple-colored rabid dog behind the shed and putting it out of it's misery.
God damn it, Fluttershy.
Several of you chapters seem to have this one signature line. Something that really stands out. Something like your garden variety ant at a picnic walking up to you, reaching behind an Oxygen molecule and slapping you across the face with a 15" dildo, then confidently walking away.
Something you remember.
That “…you don’t like snorkels?” line was a doozy. i.imgur.com/fH5FO.png
This was the chapter I've been waiting for...since before I even knew I was waiting for it. I mean, this rates right up there with the Twilight-Trixie anger-sex scene from like...book two, I think it was...as the hottest thing ever. Incredible. Absolutely incredible
silly Flutterbutter, that's not what's going to happen. ~<3
Damn it Flutters. If the bit wasn't elsewhere, that'd be total bonerkill.
... As it is, I can see Chaos cuddling her in about two seconds flat and fixing her leg, while Celestia muses over options and hugs her too.
Dear fucking god....this was beautiful, and exactly what I have been waiting for. Order sometimes needs to dominate Chaos in order to keep things in check, and in this case, you brought it to its almost literal and sexual interpretation, very nicely done.
"canting neither to left or to right"
That's incorrect. Also, there should be a comma in between those 2 "very"s. Also, "pooh" should be "poo". When characters in kids' shows say that, it's because the writer wanted to say "shit", but they couldn't say "shit", so they had to say "poo". It's the difference between saying "ass" and "butt", or saying "damn" and "darn", or saying "hell" and "heck". Discord was referring to fecal matter. He was not referring to an orange talking bear from a cartoon by A. A. Milne.
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http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/pooh-pooh
4580541 Well, the other stuff still stands!
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Nope. Just because you said it, I'm keeping it all exactly as it was.
From now on for every correction you submit, you have to write a story.
Note that I didn't specify a GOOD story, but it has to be published on FIMfic.
4580681 ...Why? I thought you liked it when I pointed out typos.
4580693
Because you're not pointing out typos (when they're outright typos, I always change them). You're rewriting and telling me I can't use the phrase 'oh pooh' when the dictionary supports me, and I hear five times more from you than from the people who're liking it.
Which is not to say that you're not liking it, but it doesn't FEEL like you're having fun reading this wacky huge clopfic epic, it feels like you're being very frustrated by what you see as imperfections, often ones I meant to employ!
Settle down and everything will be fine. I still love you but you really do not get the difference between a typo and wilful messing with the language, and I think it's because you're trying too hard to find any typo or mistake and it's ruining the book for you (again, or maybe not)
I can't tell if you're yanking my chain or if you're simply Celestia's gift to proofreaders and just can't turn it off ever. If you're having fun I'm not sure it matters. I'm just going to keep on sticking in textual quirks that push the reading experience this way and that, on purpose, and if you're that dismayed by being asked to write a story then I won't make you do it.
But you should try. You might like it, and find it oddly liberating
4581468 Oh, I'm still having fun, and I still love these stories. It's just that it's impossible to tell which mistakes are intentional and which mistakes aren't. Of course it feels obvious to you, but that's because you know because they were your idea, but most of the time, intent doesn't translate through text. Also, the "pooh" thing was entirely my fault; I had no idea that that was a real word. Also, if I stop pointing these things out, then you'll never know about the real typos, and your stories will forever have them.
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If you're having fun that's the important thing. Nopony else seems to mind
ALMOST nopony seems to mind
4586264 You still didn't fix this:
"canting neither to left or to right"
Commence read.
Welp.
Those explosions sure seemed to have drawn attention.
I know I've been complaining a lot through the last few chapters, and I'm sorry about that. I am fussy.
I have to praise the scene between Celestia and Chaos. That was amazing, and well done, and really worked. It explored both characters well, and had some amazing imagery as well. A very nice chapter.
I find it interesting that we both interpret Celestia the same way: as an avatar of Order and Law.
And the Los Pegasus mountains are always interesting.
Now Twilight comes in and ruins everything in 3... 2... 1...
Oh Applejinx, why do you make me hate best pony?
You know, maybe I'm late to say this, but every time Crowbar or Derpy are mentioned, I think back to previous scenes with Twilight and either of them and I'm just waiting for a scene with Twilight saying 'You retarded ponies are what's wrong with society. Should just kill the lot of you the moment it comes to light you're mentally handicapped, save us intelligent ponies the trouble of putting up with you.' I'm just waiting for it, because by now, that kind of disgusting thought process would fit Twilight perfectly. I wouldn't even bat an eye in disbelief. I'd just be reaching for the rifle and having thoughts of taking this little purple-colored rabid dog behind the shed and putting it out of it's misery.