"So they jumped into their homes fearfully watched through the windows with curious eyes."

You forgot to add "and" between fearfully and watched.

Other than that, it looks good!

4026735 Oh Kwell

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I can't read your name and keep a strate face.

4027050 It's a challenge I ask all to do.

4027050 HAHAHA me too bro. Meeeee toooooo

RARITY BROKE THE RULES... so uhh did she use the blue dye

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The part where Rarity wanted to watch Broke Back Mountain from the horse's POV, was that a Family Guy reference?

All heil the Unicorn Master Race

4027419 ya got me

4028870 Ha you clever basterd

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i like it... alot... a fucking shitload.

4189020 Thank ya!!!

btw I love ur OC!!!!!

thanks and no problem i might look at some of your other fics if there anything like this then you got yourself a follower/stalker

Domestic violence yay

The Spike abuse was starting to give me b[censored]er, but when it became meanspirited violence, it turned into a fucking suckfest.

....I .... Guess this was kinda cool.....

i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/780/245/98c.jpg .

I'll like and fave it though, so .... Yeah

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Dont want to throw twilightpoopsparkle under the bus but the spike over-abuse was something i didnt want to do...